Before I do a thorough review of this article, I need to ask about the references.
Berman, Esmé (2010). Art and Artists of South Africa. Cape Town: G3 Publishers. pp. 376–379.
ISBN9781868123452. (ref 1)
Latest publish is 1999 as far as I can determine.
Schutte, Jan. Die Wêreld van Maggie Laubser, 1972. Radio. What is Radio? (ref 8)
Laubser, Maggie. Dit is my Kontrei, 21 February 1956. Radio.What is Radio? (ref 9}
Die Burger, 2 September 1948, p. 12 - not enough info to identify this publication (ref 10)
need page numbers for books.
Early life
Could some dates be added early on so the reader can follow a time line? (the first one is 1901)
what is a "realistic romantic style painter"?
Could some context be added about who
Edward Roworth is? and why it was important to be introduced to him?
what was her style of painting during this period?
Holland and England
too filled with dates and places where she lived. This seems like trivial detail, when it could be said "in London she moved several times" or something. There isn't mention of her work or how various persons she met influenced her work.
When people are mentioned, it would help to have some context provided so the reader can have some idea of their importance to her life.
South African debut and critical reception
"atrociously unattractive landscapes, in which not one colour, not one shape...has any similitude with nature!" - all quotes need to be directly cited.
General comment
Do you think all those red links will have articles?
Before I do a thorough review of this article, I need to ask about the references.
Berman, Esmé (2010). Art and Artists of South Africa. Cape Town: G3 Publishers. pp. 376–379.
ISBN9781868123452. (ref 1)
Latest publish is 1999 as far as I can determine.
Schutte, Jan. Die Wêreld van Maggie Laubser, 1972. Radio. What is Radio? (ref 8)
Laubser, Maggie. Dit is my Kontrei, 21 February 1956. Radio.What is Radio? (ref 9}
Die Burger, 2 September 1948, p. 12 - not enough info to identify this publication (ref 10)
need page numbers for books.
Early life
Could some dates be added early on so the reader can follow a time line? (the first one is 1901)
what is a "realistic romantic style painter"?
Could some context be added about who
Edward Roworth is? and why it was important to be introduced to him?
what was her style of painting during this period?
Holland and England
too filled with dates and places where she lived. This seems like trivial detail, when it could be said "in London she moved several times" or something. There isn't mention of her work or how various persons she met influenced her work.
When people are mentioned, it would help to have some context provided so the reader can have some idea of their importance to her life.
South African debut and critical reception
"atrociously unattractive landscapes, in which not one colour, not one shape...has any similitude with nature!" - all quotes need to be directly cited.
General comment
Do you think all those red links will have articles?