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03:48, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
You've done a nice job with a dearth of material with which to go on. Here are a few things to correct. First, remove the tone diacritics (marks) from the entire body of the article. You have the pinyin rendering of Luo's name in the opening template, so it won't affect anyone who wishes to pronounce Luo's name correctly but can't read the characters. Second, delete the "Mao's" before "biographers" at the end of the lead. Third, it's unnecessary to give publication dates after the names of researchers or scholars in the article itself - your citations will give those. Fourth, I would unlink and decapitalize South Central China in the lead.
You've done a nice job so far. I would advise you really dig to find a bit more substance to include in the article. After fixing what I've mentioned, adding some more information, and maybe getting another review, I think the article will be ready to pass. White Whirlwind 咨 03:48, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
Given the major changes to the article since the review began, I'm putting this back in the queue. Wizardman 14:55, 5 April 2013 (UTC)
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You've done a nice job with a dearth of material with which to go on. Here are a few things to correct. First, remove the tone diacritics (marks) from the entire body of the article. You have the pinyin rendering of Luo's name in the opening template, so it won't affect anyone who wishes to pronounce Luo's name correctly but can't read the characters. Second, delete the "Mao's" before "biographers" at the end of the lead. Third, it's unnecessary to give publication dates after the names of researchers or scholars in the article itself - your citations will give those. Fourth, I would unlink and decapitalize South Central China in the lead.
You've done a nice job so far. I would advise you really dig to find a bit more substance to include in the article. After fixing what I've mentioned, adding some more information, and maybe getting another review, I think the article will be ready to pass. White Whirlwind 咨 03:48, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
Given the major changes to the article since the review began, I'm putting this back in the queue. Wizardman 14:55, 5 April 2013 (UTC)