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Jung Chang in her biography gives 1908 for the marriage "when Mao was 14 and his bride 18". Richard Pinch 22:48, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
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You've done a nice job with a dearth of material with which to go on. Here are a few things to correct. First, remove the tone diacritics (marks) from the entire body of the article. You have the pinyin rendering of Luo's name in the opening template, so it won't affect anyone who wishes to pronounce Luo's name correctly but can't read the characters. Second, delete the "Mao's" before "biographers" at the end of the lead. Third, it's unnecessary to give publication dates after the names of researchers or scholars in the article itself - your citations will give those. Fourth, I would unlink and decapitalize South Central China in the lead.
You've done a nice job so far. I would advise you really dig to find a bit more substance to include in the article. After fixing what I've mentioned, adding some more information, and maybe getting another review, I think the article will be ready to pass. White Whirlwind 咨 03:48, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
Given the major changes to the article since the review began, I'm putting this back in the queue. Wizardman 14:55, 5 April 2013 (UTC)
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Other than the couple of minor points I've raised above - which I do appreciate may well be me doing something wrong - I think this is a good article. I'll now just wait until the small queries can be addressed and someone more experienced can give my review a run through. SagaciousPhil - Chat 10:26, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
Hi MBO! Since it's Phil's first review, she asked me to look over her shoulder for a quick second opinion.
This looks solid to me and essentially ready for promotion once Phil's concerns above are resolved (and they seem like easy fixes). Nice job on this one--you've got quite the range of wiki-interests.
I'd only offer two quibbles:
1) the images of the two Maos appear to need US public domain tags to accompany their China PD tags 2) " In their controversial biography Mao: The Untold Story" -- "controversial" could probably be cut here. The book was clearly controversial, so I'm not disputing the accuracy, but it adds a minor (and probably unneeded) neutrality issue to tag one source that way. Since Chang and Halliday are only agreeing with what two other sources said here, I think this word could just be cut (this doesn't seem to have been one of the book's controversial moments).
On a side note, the infobox and text appear to use different date formats (mdy vs. dmy), but this isn't a relevant point for GA. Thanks to you both for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 ( talk) 14:40, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
Congrats on getting this important and hard to research article to FA status and on the main page! -- Michael Scott Cuthbert (talk) 18:41, 20 October 2015 (UTC)
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Jung Chang in her biography gives 1908 for the marriage "when Mao was 14 and his bride 18". Richard Pinch 22:48, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
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White whirlwind (
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03:48, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
You've done a nice job with a dearth of material with which to go on. Here are a few things to correct. First, remove the tone diacritics (marks) from the entire body of the article. You have the pinyin rendering of Luo's name in the opening template, so it won't affect anyone who wishes to pronounce Luo's name correctly but can't read the characters. Second, delete the "Mao's" before "biographers" at the end of the lead. Third, it's unnecessary to give publication dates after the names of researchers or scholars in the article itself - your citations will give those. Fourth, I would unlink and decapitalize South Central China in the lead.
You've done a nice job so far. I would advise you really dig to find a bit more substance to include in the article. After fixing what I've mentioned, adding some more information, and maybe getting another review, I think the article will be ready to pass. White Whirlwind 咨 03:48, 9 February 2013 (UTC)
Given the major changes to the article since the review began, I'm putting this back in the queue. Wizardman 14:55, 5 April 2013 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Sagaciousphil ( talk · contribs) 09:03, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
Other than the couple of minor points I've raised above - which I do appreciate may well be me doing something wrong - I think this is a good article. I'll now just wait until the small queries can be addressed and someone more experienced can give my review a run through. SagaciousPhil - Chat 10:26, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
Hi MBO! Since it's Phil's first review, she asked me to look over her shoulder for a quick second opinion.
This looks solid to me and essentially ready for promotion once Phil's concerns above are resolved (and they seem like easy fixes). Nice job on this one--you've got quite the range of wiki-interests.
I'd only offer two quibbles:
1) the images of the two Maos appear to need US public domain tags to accompany their China PD tags 2) " In their controversial biography Mao: The Untold Story" -- "controversial" could probably be cut here. The book was clearly controversial, so I'm not disputing the accuracy, but it adds a minor (and probably unneeded) neutrality issue to tag one source that way. Since Chang and Halliday are only agreeing with what two other sources said here, I think this word could just be cut (this doesn't seem to have been one of the book's controversial moments).
On a side note, the infobox and text appear to use different date formats (mdy vs. dmy), but this isn't a relevant point for GA. Thanks to you both for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 ( talk) 14:40, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
Congrats on getting this important and hard to research article to FA status and on the main page! -- Michael Scott Cuthbert (talk) 18:41, 20 October 2015 (UTC)