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A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Lead
see below comment on "none of whom take the role of a central protagonist"
There should be a sentence or two summarizing the reception.
I don't really know what to say other than that it was "well received"---which is pretty boring.
Curly "JFC" Turkey🍁¡gobble! 21:54, 10 March 2017 (UTC)reply
Background and publication
It's unclear what Palomar is - both as a work and as the name of the village. The text should specify that each brother's work was separate, opposed to them collaborating like
The Luna Brothers. Should
Palomar (comics) be linked?
It possibly should—I've been weighing how to deal with that for a while. Part of the problem is that the Luba et al. stories have continued after they left Palomar, but I doubt they should be separate articles ...
Curly "JFC" Turkey🍁¡gobble! 22:55, 9 March 2017 (UTC)reply
I wouldn't think so, but I'm afraid I can't be too much help here. I've only heard good things about L&R, but I haven't read any of it yet.
Argento Surfer (
talk) 14:19, 10 March 2017 (UTC)reply
"his characters[4] and their community,[5] and" I think this would read better as "his characters, their community, and..."
"In issues #21–26..." The next paragraph says L&RX appeared in #29-40. Is the aside on Human Diastrophism important to this particular article? Poison River is mentioned twice before it's linked.
that same sentence has two "..., which..." phrases. It would read better as two sentences, split after the first mention of the English band. The second sentence should be reworded something like "Within the story, the fictional band claims the English band stole their name." I think the parenthetical would be fine as a regular sentence, but if you want to keep it you'll need to move the whole thing inside the previous sentence or move the period at the end inside the parenthetical and capitalize "the".
Poison River is linked again here, and some of the material is duplicated from Background and publication. It doesn't need to be both places, but I think the part about it being more complex works better down here.
"Comics scholar Douglas Wolk..." This sentence cites [26] four times. It would read better with a single citation at the end. I'm not sure the comma is needed after "others".
There've been issues with the implementation of infoboxes that have driven me away lately. I'd prefer to avoid them until all the issues are resolved.
Curly "JFC" Turkey🍁¡gobble! 22:55, 9 March 2017 (UTC)reply
It's not relevant to this particular GA, but you've got me curious. Is there a talk page where I could read up on the issues?
Argento Surfer (
talk) 13:32, 10 March 2017 (UTC)reply
In Synopsis, you say "none takes the part of a main protagonist". Is this sourced from [18] with the following sentence? If not, I'd strike that part and reword it as "Forty of the large
ensemble cast".
detailed rationales provided. You may consider using
Template:Non-free comic in place of
Non-free book cover in the future, but both work for this this particular article's main picture.
Both images need
WP:ALTTEXT. The caption for the second image doesn't sound right - "and is recurs " - I'm not sure if it's a tense problem, typo, or missing word.
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A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Lead
see below comment on "none of whom take the role of a central protagonist"
There should be a sentence or two summarizing the reception.
I don't really know what to say other than that it was "well received"---which is pretty boring.
Curly "JFC" Turkey🍁¡gobble! 21:54, 10 March 2017 (UTC)reply
Background and publication
It's unclear what Palomar is - both as a work and as the name of the village. The text should specify that each brother's work was separate, opposed to them collaborating like
The Luna Brothers. Should
Palomar (comics) be linked?
It possibly should—I've been weighing how to deal with that for a while. Part of the problem is that the Luba et al. stories have continued after they left Palomar, but I doubt they should be separate articles ...
Curly "JFC" Turkey🍁¡gobble! 22:55, 9 March 2017 (UTC)reply
I wouldn't think so, but I'm afraid I can't be too much help here. I've only heard good things about L&R, but I haven't read any of it yet.
Argento Surfer (
talk) 14:19, 10 March 2017 (UTC)reply
"his characters[4] and their community,[5] and" I think this would read better as "his characters, their community, and..."
"In issues #21–26..." The next paragraph says L&RX appeared in #29-40. Is the aside on Human Diastrophism important to this particular article? Poison River is mentioned twice before it's linked.
that same sentence has two "..., which..." phrases. It would read better as two sentences, split after the first mention of the English band. The second sentence should be reworded something like "Within the story, the fictional band claims the English band stole their name." I think the parenthetical would be fine as a regular sentence, but if you want to keep it you'll need to move the whole thing inside the previous sentence or move the period at the end inside the parenthetical and capitalize "the".
Poison River is linked again here, and some of the material is duplicated from Background and publication. It doesn't need to be both places, but I think the part about it being more complex works better down here.
"Comics scholar Douglas Wolk..." This sentence cites [26] four times. It would read better with a single citation at the end. I'm not sure the comma is needed after "others".
There've been issues with the implementation of infoboxes that have driven me away lately. I'd prefer to avoid them until all the issues are resolved.
Curly "JFC" Turkey🍁¡gobble! 22:55, 9 March 2017 (UTC)reply
It's not relevant to this particular GA, but you've got me curious. Is there a talk page where I could read up on the issues?
Argento Surfer (
talk) 13:32, 10 March 2017 (UTC)reply
In Synopsis, you say "none takes the part of a main protagonist". Is this sourced from [18] with the following sentence? If not, I'd strike that part and reword it as "Forty of the large
ensemble cast".
detailed rationales provided. You may consider using
Template:Non-free comic in place of
Non-free book cover in the future, but both work for this this particular article's main picture.
Both images need
WP:ALTTEXT. The caption for the second image doesn't sound right - "and is recurs " - I'm not sure if it's a tense problem, typo, or missing word.