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"Critical reception towards the EP consisted of positive to mixed reviews. Several
critics praised" → "The EP received positive to mixed reviews from
music critics, with several of them praising"
"at the EP's selection of songs," → "at the selection of songs by some,"
Background and release
"dropping her "and the Diamonds" moniker in her" → "dropping the "and the Diamonds" moniker from her"
"explaining that" → "explaining that:"
"there wasn’t much" → "there wasn't much"
"her first new single with" → "Marina's first
single under" with the target
"she embarked on the" → "Marina embarked on the"
Remove wikilink on England
"a digital extended play featuring" → "a digital extended play that features"
"On the same day," → "That same day,"
"confirmed her news and described" → "confirmed her news, with the release describing"
"published on 13 September," → "published on 13 September 2019,"
"previous studio albums had become popular with her fans," → "previous albums had become popular with fans,"
"of releasing an EP." → "of releasing an acoustic-dedicated EP."
"She also revealed how" → "Marina also revealed how"
"re-recorded for the EP. She said:" → "re-recorded for Love + Fear (Acoustic), saying:"
"the acoustic versions of the EP's songs" → "the EP's acoustic versions of her songs"
"sent the EP to" → "sent Love + Fear (Acoustic) to"
Promotion
Img looks good
"Following the release of the album" → "Following its release"
"as a musical guest on" → "as a musical guest for"
"where she performed" → "where Marina performed"
"in its music video." → "in the accompanying
music video." with the appropriate wikilink
"to promote the EP in addition to Love + Fear" → "to promote Love + Fear (Acoustic) in addition to the album"
"in the United States." → "in the US."
"three music videos for the songs" → "three music videos for the versions of her songs"
"her official
YouTube account" → "Marina's
YouTube channel during"
"The first one," → "The first visual, accompanying"
"alongside the EP" → "alongside Love + Fear (Acoustic)"
"was for "Karma" and released on 25 September." → "accompanied "Karma" and was released on 25 September 2019."
"dancing and wearing an" → "that dances and wears an"
Critical reception
Remove the ratings box since there is only one review in it
Can't you add more review(s) here so it is backed up properly how the reception was?
"review of the EP, writing that she" → "review of Love + Fear (Acoustic), writing that Marina"
"and described the acoustic version" → "and he described the acoustic version"
"Allison Stubblebine, a writer for" → "Allison Stubblebine, writing for"
"was mxied in her review of the release." → "was somewhat mixed in her review of Love + Fear (Acoustic), giving it three stars out of five."
"as the album's closing track and called it" → "as the closing track of Love + Fear and called the acoustic"
"she said the release was "cluttered" and songs" → "Buchman said it was "cluttered", and songs"
"the originals"; she added:" → "the originals", with her adding:"
Track listing
Retitle to Love + Fear (Acoustic) track listing
Add above the title; Credits adapted from
AllMusic, with [12] evoked directly afterwards
Remove targets to Captain Cuts on both Ryan McMahon and Ryan Rabin
[12] should not be evoked in Notes with the new order, while keep All tracks produced by Benjamin Fletcher as the sole note since the other is no longer needed
Only one ref should be here; I would suggest only keeping one rather than merging them, since too many retailers may be unnecessary detail
References
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Copyvio score needs moderate fixing as it is currently at 40.5%; the Billboard ref seems to be behind this
Cite BroadwayWorld as publisher instead for ref 7
Either keep ref 10 or 11 and add numerous citations for countries to verify the release was various; reword appropriately in prose too, plus if you are going to go with [10] change to
Amazon.com in the formatting that changes the Amazon layout depending on the country, or do
Apple Music (US) for [11], country layout changing there too.
External links
Good
Final comments and verdict
On hold after taking a good look at the article, but be aware I may suggest further changes after you fix the suggestions and never feel afraid to question me if any of the comments confused you! It is good to see EPs being nominated as GAs recently, though. --
K. Peake15:26, 26 July 2020 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake – I believe I addressed all of your comments above. A few things though: I kept the original AllMusic source (#20) because I still used that source to obtain the individual writing credits for the track listing. In regards to the Billboard ref, the only thing appearing in the copyvio detector is the block quote. Also, I could not find anymore formal EP reviews. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Thanks again,
Carbrera (
talk)
19:20, 28 July 2020 (UTC).reply
Carbrera Thanks for replying to me properly, I did some copy editing and maybe you could decrease the amount of quoting slightly? Also, is three reviews really enough to verify an overview of reception? --
K. Peake20:14, 28 July 2020 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake – do you have any suggestions as to which quote(s) I should shorten and/or remove? And in regards to your latter point, I believe three is reasonable for a small-scale EP release like this. It was written about by several publications but only reviewed by a few unfortunately.
Carbrera (
talk)
22:45, 28 July 2020 (UTC).reply
Carbrera No quotes need to be shortened anymore, it's fine right now in terms of copyright and I did some more copy editing very briefly but am now ready to ✓Pass this! --
K. Peake07:01, 29 July 2020 (UTC)reply
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Albums, an attempt at building a useful resource on recordings from a variety of genres. If you would like to participate, visit the
project page, where you can join the project and/or contribute to the
discussion.AlbumsWikipedia:WikiProject AlbumsTemplate:WikiProject AlbumsAlbum articles
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Pop music, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of articles related to
pop music on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Pop musicWikipedia:WikiProject Pop musicTemplate:WikiProject Pop musicPop music articles
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Women in Music, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
Women in music on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Women in MusicWikipedia:WikiProject Women in MusicTemplate:WikiProject Women in MusicWomen in music articles
"Critical reception towards the EP consisted of positive to mixed reviews. Several
critics praised" → "The EP received positive to mixed reviews from
music critics, with several of them praising"
"at the EP's selection of songs," → "at the selection of songs by some,"
Background and release
"dropping her "and the Diamonds" moniker in her" → "dropping the "and the Diamonds" moniker from her"
"explaining that" → "explaining that:"
"there wasn’t much" → "there wasn't much"
"her first new single with" → "Marina's first
single under" with the target
"she embarked on the" → "Marina embarked on the"
Remove wikilink on England
"a digital extended play featuring" → "a digital extended play that features"
"On the same day," → "That same day,"
"confirmed her news and described" → "confirmed her news, with the release describing"
"published on 13 September," → "published on 13 September 2019,"
"previous studio albums had become popular with her fans," → "previous albums had become popular with fans,"
"of releasing an EP." → "of releasing an acoustic-dedicated EP."
"She also revealed how" → "Marina also revealed how"
"re-recorded for the EP. She said:" → "re-recorded for Love + Fear (Acoustic), saying:"
"the acoustic versions of the EP's songs" → "the EP's acoustic versions of her songs"
"sent the EP to" → "sent Love + Fear (Acoustic) to"
Promotion
Img looks good
"Following the release of the album" → "Following its release"
"as a musical guest on" → "as a musical guest for"
"where she performed" → "where Marina performed"
"in its music video." → "in the accompanying
music video." with the appropriate wikilink
"to promote the EP in addition to Love + Fear" → "to promote Love + Fear (Acoustic) in addition to the album"
"in the United States." → "in the US."
"three music videos for the songs" → "three music videos for the versions of her songs"
"her official
YouTube account" → "Marina's
YouTube channel during"
"The first one," → "The first visual, accompanying"
"alongside the EP" → "alongside Love + Fear (Acoustic)"
"was for "Karma" and released on 25 September." → "accompanied "Karma" and was released on 25 September 2019."
"dancing and wearing an" → "that dances and wears an"
Critical reception
Remove the ratings box since there is only one review in it
Can't you add more review(s) here so it is backed up properly how the reception was?
"review of the EP, writing that she" → "review of Love + Fear (Acoustic), writing that Marina"
"and described the acoustic version" → "and he described the acoustic version"
"Allison Stubblebine, a writer for" → "Allison Stubblebine, writing for"
"was mxied in her review of the release." → "was somewhat mixed in her review of Love + Fear (Acoustic), giving it three stars out of five."
"as the album's closing track and called it" → "as the closing track of Love + Fear and called the acoustic"
"she said the release was "cluttered" and songs" → "Buchman said it was "cluttered", and songs"
"the originals"; she added:" → "the originals", with her adding:"
Track listing
Retitle to Love + Fear (Acoustic) track listing
Add above the title; Credits adapted from
AllMusic, with [12] evoked directly afterwards
Remove targets to Captain Cuts on both Ryan McMahon and Ryan Rabin
[12] should not be evoked in Notes with the new order, while keep All tracks produced by Benjamin Fletcher as the sole note since the other is no longer needed
Only one ref should be here; I would suggest only keeping one rather than merging them, since too many retailers may be unnecessary detail
References
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Copyvio score needs moderate fixing as it is currently at 40.5%; the Billboard ref seems to be behind this
Cite BroadwayWorld as publisher instead for ref 7
Either keep ref 10 or 11 and add numerous citations for countries to verify the release was various; reword appropriately in prose too, plus if you are going to go with [10] change to
Amazon.com in the formatting that changes the Amazon layout depending on the country, or do
Apple Music (US) for [11], country layout changing there too.
External links
Good
Final comments and verdict
On hold after taking a good look at the article, but be aware I may suggest further changes after you fix the suggestions and never feel afraid to question me if any of the comments confused you! It is good to see EPs being nominated as GAs recently, though. --
K. Peake15:26, 26 July 2020 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake – I believe I addressed all of your comments above. A few things though: I kept the original AllMusic source (#20) because I still used that source to obtain the individual writing credits for the track listing. In regards to the Billboard ref, the only thing appearing in the copyvio detector is the block quote. Also, I could not find anymore formal EP reviews. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Thanks again,
Carbrera (
talk)
19:20, 28 July 2020 (UTC).reply
Carbrera Thanks for replying to me properly, I did some copy editing and maybe you could decrease the amount of quoting slightly? Also, is three reviews really enough to verify an overview of reception? --
K. Peake20:14, 28 July 2020 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake – do you have any suggestions as to which quote(s) I should shorten and/or remove? And in regards to your latter point, I believe three is reasonable for a small-scale EP release like this. It was written about by several publications but only reviewed by a few unfortunately.
Carbrera (
talk)
22:45, 28 July 2020 (UTC).reply
Carbrera No quotes need to be shortened anymore, it's fine right now in terms of copyright and I did some more copy editing very briefly but am now ready to ✓Pass this! --
K. Peake07:01, 29 July 2020 (UTC)reply