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Hello, WebHamster. I've left a message on your own page requesting help with more footnotes. I now see that there is another parenthetical citation which can be reduced to a footnote. It is in the first paragraph after the boxed quote from SRV in the section on Mack's comeback in the 1980s.
Regarding photos: I have some free-use photos taken at Lonnie's performance in Nashville in 2007, the one to which I refer in the final paragraph of the article. I have no clue how to get them into the article but could send them to you if you could instruct me how to do so. Likewise, Lonnie's own website has a dozen or so photos showing him playing with Eric Clapton, the Rolling Stones, etc. You could take your pick from there. If you feel you need consent to use those (they are all just snapshots) let me know, and I'll get Lonnie's consent.
Thanks in advance. Your editorial assistance has been very helpful.
slp512 Slp512 01:49, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
This is a great article and is well on its way to GA or A status but some work is needed on the 'lead in' section. It's far too short. It needs to be a maximum of about 4 paragraphs and be a mini version of the article itself. WP:LAYOUT gives more details. It may be worthwhile someone requesting a peer review at WP:BIOPR for more advice on what's needed. A definite need though is/are free-use images in addition to the album covers. ---- WebHamster 00:48, 20 November 2007 (UTC)
The article is starting to get heavy laden with POV. I had to revert User:Slp512, whose been working hard on the article, but at the same time was caught altering cited text to puff it up with his own original research and praise... which is akin to vandalism. No one can alter cited text to match their own personal POV. 156.34.219.91 ( talk) 01:01, 29 January 2008 (UTC)
slp512 here again. Many thanks for pointing out the specific problem. As I understand it, there are two objections.
(1) First, the use of the word "influential" to describe Mack's work as a guitarist. Without going back to count them, there must be at least 10 cited and quoted references in the article which substantiate the use of this adjective.
(2) The words "has been dubbed...[the first guitar hero, first virtuoso, etc.]" in the earlier version. This is factually correct. Blues Producer Bruce Iglauer used those exact words in an article published by Gibson Guitars, which article is cited in one of the footnotes. In quoting Iglauer from the same interview in the body of the article, I believe I left those words out both for economy of expression and because they are arguably puffery and debatable in any event. That is why, when referring to the fact that Mack had been so "dubbed", I added the reference to guitarists Eddy, Dale, etc., each of whom could make similar "highly subjective" claims.
All that said, I don't have a huge problem with the article as it presently appears, including the word "perhaps", if that's what it takes to get the "scarlet letter" removed pronto.
Thanks to all.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 02:28, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
Hello, slp512 here.
Not clear if you consider some of my article to be vanadalism, or who was "caught altering cited text". Please specify. If I am the alleged culprit, I'd like to respond but need specifics. In any event, please state what you find objectionable, so that I can either (a) explain myself or (b) attempt to fix it.
Many thanks. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 00:29, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
Hello, slp512 again. To avoid needless exchanges: I have backup for most of the article, much of which backup has been cited. The rest of the material, as near as I can tell, is not even fairly debatable. For what it is worth, there is a wealth of material I did not include, as it is known to me as a personal friend of LM, but has not been aired in any previous publication. Accordingly, I left it out.
As to POV generally, I admit to having one; I can't imagine that anyone but a fan or friend would care to write an article worth reading on this topic, and, in fact, no one had. I recall that there was a "stub" article there several months ago, which I attempted to enlarge until someone else objected to neutrality or tone. Not knowing what else to do, and having no guidance re specifics, I ended up deleting my work product entirely, starting again from scratch months later. Now comes another objection. I understand that someone out there may have objections, questions or concerns; what I request is that you make them as specific as possible, so that I may focus upon them and attempt to satisfy them, short of scrapping the article a second, and last, time.
Thanks in advance.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 01:29, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
slp512 here again. Thanks, Dr. K. What annoys me is that I made a point of saying that the "first guitar hero" title was "highly subjective" and could be claimed with equal authority by four other named guitarists, not just Lonnie Mack. Then I get dinged for NOT saying that Mack was only "perhaps" the "first guitar hero". Did I not say that in a different, and much more factually explicit, way? As noted earlier, I have no problem with EITHER formulation, so long as everyone else is satisfied; I'd just like the scarlet letter removed.
One further comment: I've tried to be factually accurate throughout this project, and when in doubt have gone to the ultimate source, LM himself. Two examples: (a) Numerous write-ups (many of which are available deep on the internet) say that Mack played as a session guitarist during the 1960s with James Brown, Hank Ballard and Freddie King. I was able, through independent research, to substantiate King and Brown, but not Ballard. Ultimately, I called LM, who told me that he never backed up Ballard, although he recorded several Ballard tunes during the '60s. So, unlike most available sources, this article does not make the claim that LM backed up Ballard on any recording, even though I could have cited the other articles as substantiation that he had done so, and, frankly, no one would have been the wiser. (b) In the article, I quote LM as having said that blues and country are "about the closest musics there are", and that he regards both as "earth music". These are direct quotes from an article in one of the guitar magazines from the mid-1970's. However, my hard copy of that article does not indicate WHICH magazine it was. So, I called LM and confirmed the accuracy of the quote before putting it in the article, where it appears without a footnote, since, again, I can't tell which magazine it was.
All of which is a long-winded way of saying I have tried very hard to be factually accurate in this article, and to provide a wealth of third-party material on matters which might appear to others as POV. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 22:42, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
Thanks to all.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 22:19, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
Dr.K. ( talk) 23:50, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
slp512 here. Thanks for these constructive comments. I've already gone back to clean up some of this sort of thing, and now having read this will go back again. Obviously, if you still feel that there is too much POV, feel free to take a crack at fixing it yourself, too.
regards, slp512
Mack's 1963 instrumentals "Memphis", "Wham!" and "Chicken-Pickin'" are now recognized as the first recorded rock guitar solos built around a five-note blues scale. This is a statement that appears repeatedly in this article and it is palpably untrue. Rock and roll guitar solos, since long before Lonnie Mack, used the "five note blues scale." To be honest, this irritates me to no end. There were literally dozens of guitar solos using the pentatonic scale before Lonnie Mack came out with Memphis. No offense to Lonnie Mack, who is a fantastic and truly influential guitarist. But really, it's harder to find a guitar solo in the 1950s and 1960s that wasn't based around a pentatonic scale than it is to find one that is. All of Chuck Berry's solos are based around a pentatonic scale, particularly his instrumental Deep Feeling. On the rare occasions when Bo Diddley allows a single note solo, it's always in the pentatonic scale. Elmore James worked with Big Joe Turner and turned in a raw, pentatonic based solo on the song "TV Mama," in 1953. Those are only three examples. Realistically speaking, nearly all of the early rock and roll guitarists were learning from what musicologists call "the folk tradition," meaning they were figuring out how to play on their own by emulating their favorite players and records, and by asking other players "How did you do that?" Anybody who was learning guitar back then would have been instructed on how to use the pentatonic "blues" scale almost immediately, because the scale gives the impression of having no "wrong" notes, especially if played over a I-IV-V progression. So really, every early rock guitarist was using the pentatonic scale, simply because they were modeling themselves after the jazz and blues guitarists they admired - who also used the pentatonic scale. So, can we agree to modify this outrageous claim and bring it down to something a bit more realistic?-- Happydog ( talk) 18:09, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
Hello to all. slp512 here. I'm in a rush so will respond quickly then hopefully get back to this later.
"First rock guitar solo....[to be base on blues scale]" So says Pinell, Ph. D., and I have quoted him at least twice. There seems to be a definitional problem here. If you include people like Elmore James and even Bo Diddley, you are venturing back more into the blues, or (in Diddley's case) R&B. As to the great Chuck Berry, there is no doubt he was a rock performer in every sense. There is also no doubt that while he is responsible for many standard rock guitar riffs, he never distinguished himself as a full-length guitar soloist, certainly not in the sense which defines "blues-rock", i.e., the genre ushered to maturity by the likes of Eric Clapton, Jeff Beck, Peter Green, and, much later, Stevie Ray Vaughan. I would include Hendrix here, as well, although he is considered by many to be either sui generis or an exponent of "psychedelic rock" guitar.
Before reading these latest comments, I went back to tone down what others might regard as POV in about 10 different places in the article.
I'm not sure how this is supposed to work....is it time for a vote on the scarlet letter, or does it stay there indefinitely? I'd be sad to delete the article, but if it keeps offending folks who Wikipedia has seen fit to bestow with editorial control, this article either has to disappear, or (hopefully!) satisfy those who have taken offense, pretty soon. I don't know that I, personally, can ratchet this thing back a whole lot more.
As always, thanks to all.
slp512`````` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 00:17, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
OK, I'm back sooner than I anticipated.
Anyone who is offended by Pinnell's claim is welcome to take a crack at fixing it. I've already done what I can without violating what I view as the truth of the matter. I will say that Pinnell (whose article is not available on-line, but can be accessed at most big-city central libraries) was careful to say that he was talking about the first "rock" or "rock and roll" guitar solo whose melody was based upon the blues scale, by which one thing is clear and another less clear.
What is clear from context: He was referring to a full-length guitar solo, as distinguished from, e.g., fill riffs.
What is not entirely clear: His definition of "rock" or "rock and roll". However, giving the man some credit for knowing what he was talking about, my inference is that he was referring to something distinctly "rock", as distinguished from a blues or R&B tune with the volume turned up. In his article, he refers to a few things that appear to have been significant to him in this regard, including (as I recall) the rhythm, the picking techniques and the arrangement, generally. However, his article does not expressly say anything to the effect of "Oh, by the way, here's what I mean when I use the terms 'rock' and 'rock & roll'". My own view is that Elmore James and Big Joe Turner were not "rock" musicians in the sense I infer Pinell to have used the term. Bo Diddley certainly comes closer, especially in the highly inclusive sense now used by the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame. But that evidently is not what Pinnell had in mind.
OK, not that anyone needs my permission, but as far as I am concerned, anyone who wants to take a crack at fixing what they view as inaccurate or offensive can take their shot at the article itself.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.135.211.131 ( talk) 01:06, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
slp512 again. OK, folks, I've gone back to neutralize the offending sections as best I can without stating a falsehood. Please read carefully and let me know what you think. I'll be absent for a couple of weeks, beginning now, but will check in again when I return.
slp512
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 02:36, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
Thanks. I couldn't leave without doing another spate of "tone-down" edits, which I hope will prove satisfactory even to those who have been most critical. I will not have time to add the citations noted near the end of the article for a week or so, however. In the interim, if anyone else has suggestions, or feels that other references in the article need citations, hopefully that input can be given in my absence. The computer on which much of my reference material was stored crashed recently, but I still have at least 90% of the reference material in hard copy, so I am that it includes (or that I can find again, if necessary) citations for most if not all of the areas marked as needing citations.
Thanks to all in advance.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 22:59, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
(edit conflict) I have finished checking the article. In my opinion the POV level is low now and the POV tag can be removed. I placed citations needed tags so that the narrative can be strengthened by inline citations. Providing the citations will greatly improve the overall quality of this already fine article. Dr.K. ( talk) 23:05, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
slp512 checking in again. Thanks much, Dr. K. I see I got a little testy a couple of times in my earlier comments, for which I apologize. I concur that this is now a much better article for an encyclopedia than it once was, and that I got carried away at times out of personal feelings. I don't have my background material available here, but checked it quickly last night and confirmed that I can back up most of the "citations needed" tags with what I still have in hard copy. There are some I can't, at least without further research. I'll mention them here in case any of the editors have ideas re how to deal with them.
1. Reference to "Chicken-Pickin'" as LM's most technically-challenging guitar solo. Anyone who has heard LM's guitar work knows this to be true, at least as respects picking speed. But I can't recall an external reference for this, which admittedly states a proposition in the form of an opinion. Suggestions?
2. Under the heading "Blue-Eyed Soul Ballads" the first two "citation needed" tags come after what I view as fair, and reasonably non-controversial comments that are manifestly inferable not just from listening to the music, but from material quoted in the same section, plus material which I haven't cited, but can cite, from the contemporary reviews of LM's first album. However, none of those, as I recall, state it precisely as I have. Too much POV? Change of wording needed to conform more closely to material cited/to be cited?
3. "Many regard (attribution needed) [Mack's guitar solos to have been the first to comprehensively incorporate blues stylism into rock]". I can provide cites to articles whose authors undoubtedly agree, but who arguably have expressed themselves somewhat differently. In fact, look at the boxed quotes from Bruce Iglauer, Ben Sandmel and Brown & Newquist in the same section of the article. Close enough?
4. Under the heading "Elektra Years", the comparisons with Buck Owens, Sam & Dave and Wilson Pickett, singers whose styles and voices are quite distinctive, and therefore innately provide data points from which comparisons can be made. While passages in question are my comments entirely, based upon listening to the recordings, I view them as much closer to the assertion that "bananas are softer than coconuts" than the assertion that "Pork tastes better than beef". The latter is a manifestly personal, highly subjective opinion, while "bananas are softer than coconuts", although similarly phrased as a comparison of qualitative features, is an easily-verifiable observation made from the speaker's personal experience, and upon verification, unlikely to result in substantial disagreement. Bottom line: I'm not sure how to "fix" this, assuming you think it still needs fixing, unless I can dig up old articles I have not yet found, and they just happen to say these things. Not likely. Any suggestions?
5. The two quotes beginning with blues and country being "about the closest musics there are" and ending with "earth music". As indicated in an earlier comment, I have an article from the '70s which expressly quotes Mack as haing said both of these things, but when I copied the article at the Los Angeles Public Library, I did not notice that the pages I copied failed to identify either the author or the publication. All I know for certain is that it was a popular music magazine, almost certainly one of the guitar-oriented ones, and that it was written in the 1970s, which I get from context. I can fax a hard copy of the article if you will provide a fax number. As indicated in my earlier comment, I independently verified the accuracy of the quotes from the article directly with Lonnie Mack. Any thoughts?
OK, I think I can handle the rest without bothering you good folks, but if you can give me some feedback on the above, I can be ready to hit the ground running with all of the "citation needed" tags in a week or so.
Thanks again.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.135.211.131 ( talk) 23:04, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
Wow, thanks, I appreciate the comments. I forgot to mention: a tag above states the article needs more photos, although thanks to webhamster it already has 3 album covers. Mack's website has several great photos, but knowing him as I do, he won't know where they came from, who snapped them, whether they are copyrighted, or whether he has the authority to make it legally OK to use them in another on-line publication. Neither do I. Any thoughts? Also, I will be visiting him in 3 weeks and can take some photos that won't have any of these problems, since they will be coming from me with his consent. I have in mind a photo of him with the "V" and one of his '50s-era Magnatone amps. Any other ideas? Finally, importation of any photos into the article is way beyond my technical expertise, as is almost anything having to do with computers. If you'd be so kind, I'd like to have you take charge of that. Thanks again.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.135.211.131 ( talk) 23:42, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
OK, will do, and thanks again.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.135.211.131 ( talk) 22:15, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
It took a little longer than I thought it would, but I resumed editing this piece a few days ago. It was helpful to get away from it for a while. That made it a lot easier to spot the remnants of "POV", and to delete them. In the process, many passages were eliminated which, had they remained, would have required citation to outside authorities. Most of the deleted material was essentially duplicative of cited and quoted sources, so its elimination not only does not hurt the article, it streamlines it a bit.
I also notice that others have made helpful edits, for which I thank them. All good changes.
In the next few days I will add source citations for the remaining passages which require them, and that will conclude my work on the composition of this article. At that point, I'd appreciate it if one of the editors who have been so helpful in the past would reduce those citations (which I will place in the body of the article) to footnotes, as I can't figure out how to do that.
One last comment: I had planned to take photos of Lonnie Mack when I visited him in early March, but accidentally left my camera with relatives in Atlanta when I drove up to Tennessee to see him. I will find some photos on the internet that I think can be safely used, without violating anyone's copyright, and leave a message here as to where those can be found, in the hope that, again, one of the helpful editors will insert them into the article at appropriate places.
Thanks to all who have helped.
slp512
Dr, K, I'm done now with the additional citations, of which there are many. I have placed them in italics so that they are easier for you to spot. They include not only those which I was asked to provide, but several others.
In addition, there are two extended quotes which, for the sake of layout consistency, should be in boxes. One is the second paragraph of the section entitled "1963: 'Blue-Eyed Soul' ballads". The other is the second paragraph of the section entitled "1970s: Flying 'under the radar'".
Thanks for your kind assistance.
SLP512
No problem with the edits, Dr. K. Your objectivity is much appreciated.
I think I've now provided all the reference citaitons I can find. I deleted a bit of material along the way due to some material lost when my hard-drive crashed, but it doesn't seem to have harmed the article materially.
There are still 10 references in the body of the article which need to be reduced to footnotes. All are in italics, in these locations:
Section 1.3, first paragraph; fourth paragraph (twice) Section 1.4, in the para. before the final blocked quote, and also in the final paragraph. Section 1.5, first and second paragraphs. Section 1.9, paragraph before the final blocked quoted. Section 1.10, first paragraph. Section 1.12, second para.
For photos, it is my understanding that anything which credits the photographer is fair game. If my understanding is correct, there are many photos on Mack's website, http://www.lonniemack.com which could be used. Also, that website has a link to his "MySpace" page, which has even more photos. My personal favorites would be the professional black & white photo depicting Mack sitting in a high-backed chair with his guitar, and a relatively recent color photo showing him holding an acoustic guitar, and standing in front of a wood-panelled wall. Both are on the MySpace page under the link to photos. But you can choose whatever you think is appropriate.
Many thanks.
slp512
Dr. K, to look at the photos on myspace you need a myspace ID. Sorry about that. A link to some picutre is: http://viewmorepics.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=user.viewPicture&friendID=134716769&albumId=590072
If you can't use them, let me know, and I'll see if Mack has any that can be used. I figured that since these were on his myspace page and already credit photographers, they would be fair game, but I'll leave that to your knowledge of how that works.
As to the 3 additional factual references, I think I have references to all 3. I'll look, and update the article accordingly.
slp512
More pix:
The pix I have referred you to are all on his myspace page, but if you can't get to them without a myspace login, let me know. I know his webmaster, if that would help in getting permission to use any photos.
And, no problem re the additional cites, if I can find them, I'll put them where they belong.
slp512
Ok, I'll get to that soon.
Meanwhile there are four new references that need to go into footnotes, one under the "Significance of LM's instrumentals" heading and three under the "Comeback Decade" heading. Under the latter, I had to delete some material which I apparently found in one or both of the full-length bio books on SRV I borrowed from the LA Public Library a couple of years ago. Don't have the books now. So I substituted with new material of equivalent import, for which I still had the reference material.
slp512
Three new refs today. I see you've already found one. The other two are found in the section pertaining to awards in 2005 and 2006.
slp512
I now have a good photo of Mack playing at a concert in 2003. It was taken by his long-time friend and webmaster, Russ House. I have it as an attachment to an email from Mr. House, and also put in in the "my documents" folder of my computer here at work. But I can't figure out how to get it here (no cut and paste option that allows me to do this), so can you give me an email adress to which I could send it along with the written consent of Mr. House?
Thanks.
slp512
Dr K, I've posed your question to Russ, and am awaiting a response.
slp512
Hi, if you wish to upload the photo, the best thing to do is go to the upload page on Wikimedia Commons, upload the photo, fill in a description, and add a license, such as GFDL. Then add the template {{otrs pending}} to the image. After this, ask your friend to fill in an agreement such as commons:User:Riana/statement. Once he has done this, ask him to e-mail it to permissions@wikimedia.org . An OTRS agent should be able to take care of it ASAP. Hope that helps, if not, please feel free to ask. Cheers! ~ Riana ⁂ 15:15, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
Riana/Dr. K: I've asked Russ House, the photographer, to read your instructions and take over from this point. He has already indicated he will grant the license.
slp512
If Russ doesn't contact you in the next few days, I'll call him.
Meanwhile there are two references which need to be reduced to footnotes, one in the 4th Para. of "Career" and the other in the 4th Para. of "Significance...". Thanks again for doing this for me.
slp512
Thanks slp. Will do. Take care. Dr.K. ( talk) 23:11, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
Three new references in introduction. I recalled that Wikipedia requires these in the intro, not just the body.
Thanks again!
slp512
Done. My pleasure. Bye for now. Dr.K. ( talk) 01:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
Dr. K, I saw your call for two more citations in the section entitled "Significance...." and that caused me to re-read it. I concluded it was too long and redundant, so I shortened it considerably, although I added a new quote at the beginning of that section. I'd appreciate it if you'd reduce the citation there to a footnote. Unless asked for more, I'm now done with the footnotes.
slp512
Tags are not a problem at all. Some of them are a bit of a challenge, however. There are things I know to be true from my association with Mack and his managers, and/or just from having lived on the planet for 60 years, and/or maybe from having read it somewhere, sometime. But trying to find an outside reference is another matter entirely. For instance, I just deleted a couple of sentences about Berry speeding up his own performance of "Memphis" and he and Mack ending up friends and touring partners. I know these things to be true, but I'll never find something that says they are, so they're out. Likewise, I know that Mack put on a benefit concert to raise money for Berry's bail when Berry ran afoul of the law and ended up in the slammer, but I'll never find anything that says that either, so it never went into the article. And I know a very interesting story about a time in the late '60s when Mack put together a late-night jam session in Greenwich Village with Jimi Hendrix, Jerry Garcia and Janis Joplin, and coaxed Hendrix into playing country guitar, while he and Joplin sang and Garcia played pedal steel. But I'll never find anything that says that happened, either. My problem is that I know too many things that aren't "out there", and in my zeal I end up mixing them with the stuff that is. So it ends up having to be fixed. Luckily for me, I've had your kind assistance in showing me where I've left the track.
And that's OK. If I wanted free reign over this article I could have written it for some other publication that didn't care as much about documentation. I share your goal of trying to make this article as compliant with Wikipedia requirements as possible. Your editorial assistance has been invaluable. I'll let you scour it for further needed citations, edits, etc., then I'll get back to it again in a few days. Everything comes to an end sooner or later, and I sense this project is a lot closer to the end than the beginning.
slp512
Good tradeoff, I agree.
Dr. K, I see that you've reduced most of my latest references to footnotes. There is still one under the heading "Career", 3d para, and another under the heading "1963: "Memphis"...", 4th para. Coindicentally, I think that gets us to exactly 100 footnotes. Again, if you think anything in the article needs to be fixed, or more footnotes added, I'll trust your judgment.
Regards,
slp512
Thanks for the kudos. It looks like we were working on the article at the same time, and you got one even as I was pointing them out. So they're all taken care of now. Thanks!
slp512
Two more footnotes in "Comeback" section, 3d paragraph, the para about Eric Clapton. Thanks much.
slp512
Dr. K, I added a quote in the 4th para of the section entitled, "1964: The Wham of that Memphis Man". This should be a boxed quote. Also added another reference in the section "1980s: Comeback Decade", 3d para. If you would add the footnotes and do the boxed quote, that would be greatly appreciated. Thanks.
slp512
Hi slp. I just wanted to know if you can find a reference for the following sentence:
Finally, Mack's best-selling single, the instrumental "Memphis", was based on the melody of a Chuck Berry tune. Because we have to provide a backup citation for the reader who is not familiar with the origin of "Memphis". Thanks. Dr.K. ( talk) 19:51, 30 April 2008 (UTC)
Hi, Dr. K. There is a new paragraph quoting the lyrics of a tune in the section entitled "1970s...". It now appears as the 6th para. It should be a boxed quote in order to conform to the format for song lyrics used elsewhere in the article. There is also a new reference at the very end of the section entitled "1980s....". That one needs to be reduced to a footnote. I'd appreciate it if you would do those for me.
I don't plan on any significant revisions at this point. I am trying to find a copy of one of his albums to determine if it merits comment. I am also trying to find out about session work he did with Joe Simon which does not appear in anything written about him that I have found. If Mack is credited on Simon albums themselves, I may mention that session work.
As always, thanks for your assistance.
slp512
Hi Dr. K,
Can you make that new boxed quote match the appearance of the other one just below it (another recital of lyrics from a song)? I tried to copy the way that other one was done, but I don't have a vertical line on my keyboard, and it apparently requires that. Thanks, much!
slp512
Article has been expanded nicely. However ther is a major overkill on WP:QUOTE throughout this article. An excellent player for sure. I was pleased to see someone put some effort into it. If the WP:QUOTE issue could be cleaned up some (cut at least half of them... keep just the best ones) I would almost push this page for a GA review. If the refs were formatted correctly (I am just refering to the book refs/Harvard reference format) it would be a shoe-in. Anger22 ( Talk 2 22) 01:18, 11 July 2008 (UTC)
Slp512 here. I have recently returned to this article after a long time away. I cleaned up a few minor areas in the last several days.
With some trepidation, I will say that further editing of the article to improve it from Wiki's standpoint should probably be done by others. I am a personal friend of Mack's and found it exceedingly difficult earlier in the process to separate out my own POV from the facts, although I ultimately succeeded to the point that the complaints dried up considerably. As to the many quotes, I was driven to include as much material as I could, first, because my own POV was prohibited, and, secondly, because (to my knowledge) there is no comprehensive article on Mack, anywhere. The closest I have found is the recent Gibson Lifestyle article I have footnoted several times. As to formatting, and especially the computer expertise necessary to do it, I am at a complete loss, and had to rely heavily on Dr. K and others, who were helpful in many ways. Finally, this is my first effort at writing an article, and I am sure there are others who are better at it.
For all these reasons, I think it best for others to make any further changes to the article.
Thanks to all.........
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 23:53, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
slp512: Thanks, Dr. K, I'll do as you've suggested.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 00:24, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
slp512: Dr. K, Of the 6 consecutive boxed quotes in section 1.6, I'd like to retain the Brown & Newquist and Sandmel quotes. The other 4 could be referenced in a related footnote.
Under section 1.4, the second boxed quote should be kept. The other two could be swept into footnoted material.
That would eliminate 6 boxed quotes from the body of the article.
Section 1.10: The first two sentences of the third para could be retained, but with a period at the end of the second sentence, to be followed by antoher sentence: According to the lyrics of a tune from the mid-'70s, Mack yearned for the simple, anonymous country life of his youth. [footnote here to the song referenced in the second boxed quote]. In a 1977 interview, Mack added: [the first boxed quote follows here].
That would eliminate one boxed quote from the body of section 1.10.
All of the foregoing would result in elimination of 7 boxed quotes. I'd still like to keep that material in the footnotes if at all possible. As I said yesterday, this is the most comprehensive factual article about Mack's career to be found anywhere, and by far the most comprehensive collection of what others have said about it.
After all of that is done, I'll have to go in and modify the text in some areas from which those quotes have been deleted. When that's done, let's take another look at it.
Thanks much, my friend.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 18:34, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
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slp512
I did some heavy cleanup here. I don't think the section titles should have years in them, removed those. I made awards, and guitar style level 2 headers, and added tables to awards. I changed the formatting of the discography and did some heavy grammar/ redundancy edits to the entire article. Some of the references are still not formatted correctly but I fixed those as I saw them, although they were not my main focus. Washburnmav ( talk) 18:52, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
I promoted this article to Good status as I believe it satisfies those criterion. If you believe any of my edits are incorrect feel free to change it and let me know on my talk page. Thanks. Washburnmav ( talk) 18:46, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
Thanks for your involvement, Washburnmav. I did go back to add some chronological context in a couple of places where it had been lost in the process of streamlining and re-formatting the article. Other than that, the edits are terrific. Thanks to all of the experienced editors whose professionalism and teamwork have greatly improved this article. Slp512 ( talk) 20:09, 24 August 2008 (UTC)
Dr. K: I found a couple of typos and fixed them. Also, in a couple of places, added back a few words of text where the meaning had been lost to the edits. Finally, in the section "Memphis, Wham and the birth of blues-rock guitar", I added back some material which I have placed in parentheses so that you can easily find it (in 3d paragraph). I would appreciate it if you would reduce that parenthetical material to a footnote. It took a long time for me to nail down that fact, and I wouldn't want it to be questioned in the future for the lack of a reference. Thanks much. Slp512 ( talk) 23:39, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
I've added footnote references where requested. Dr. K., as of this writing (you may be in the document now) there are footnote references in the first, fourth and fifth paras. of the releveant section that still need to be put in proper form. I wonder if I could prevail on you to do that? Thanks in advance. Slp512 ( talk) 00:33, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
Dr. K, I also added another footnote at the fifth paragraph of "Career". Thanks much! Slp512 ( talk) 02:03, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Sorry. -- Be Black Hole Sun ( talk) 19:11, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
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And use that template for all the references okay. -- Be Black Hole Sun ( talk) 18:17, 21 September 2008 (UTC)
Okay. Contact me when your finished. -- Be Black Hole Sun ( talk) 14:55, 23 September 2008 (UTC)
I have finished my edits to this point, and have streamlined the article a bit in places. 75.22.60.10 ( talk) 19:49, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
Some good work has been done here recently to make the tone of this article less like an adulatory book, and more like an encyclopaedia article. The references need work though: they should be short citations verifying what's written in the body of the article, but most of them have become little bits of article in their own right, often veering into original research and POV commentary, with three or more references clustered into a single large footnote. I'll start working on this, but it will take time. The Mighty Glen ( talk) 09:16, 23 December 2017 (UTC)
This article still has a significant problem with its use of sources. Most of them read like a construction of a justification for what has been said from multiple sources, rather than simply pointing the reader towards a source that does this. Using multiple sources in one cite is not Wikipedia standard. Some individual sources may well still act to verify what is said, but there's a lot of intervening waffle to cut through.
Also note; a cite that simply directs the reader to another part of the article, or another Wikipedia article, does not constitute a cite. The cite needs to direct the reader to a reliable source. Escape Orbit (Talk) 17:27, 4 July 2023 (UTC)
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Hello, WebHamster. I've left a message on your own page requesting help with more footnotes. I now see that there is another parenthetical citation which can be reduced to a footnote. It is in the first paragraph after the boxed quote from SRV in the section on Mack's comeback in the 1980s.
Regarding photos: I have some free-use photos taken at Lonnie's performance in Nashville in 2007, the one to which I refer in the final paragraph of the article. I have no clue how to get them into the article but could send them to you if you could instruct me how to do so. Likewise, Lonnie's own website has a dozen or so photos showing him playing with Eric Clapton, the Rolling Stones, etc. You could take your pick from there. If you feel you need consent to use those (they are all just snapshots) let me know, and I'll get Lonnie's consent.
Thanks in advance. Your editorial assistance has been very helpful.
slp512 Slp512 01:49, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
This is a great article and is well on its way to GA or A status but some work is needed on the 'lead in' section. It's far too short. It needs to be a maximum of about 4 paragraphs and be a mini version of the article itself. WP:LAYOUT gives more details. It may be worthwhile someone requesting a peer review at WP:BIOPR for more advice on what's needed. A definite need though is/are free-use images in addition to the album covers. ---- WebHamster 00:48, 20 November 2007 (UTC)
The article is starting to get heavy laden with POV. I had to revert User:Slp512, whose been working hard on the article, but at the same time was caught altering cited text to puff it up with his own original research and praise... which is akin to vandalism. No one can alter cited text to match their own personal POV. 156.34.219.91 ( talk) 01:01, 29 January 2008 (UTC)
slp512 here again. Many thanks for pointing out the specific problem. As I understand it, there are two objections.
(1) First, the use of the word "influential" to describe Mack's work as a guitarist. Without going back to count them, there must be at least 10 cited and quoted references in the article which substantiate the use of this adjective.
(2) The words "has been dubbed...[the first guitar hero, first virtuoso, etc.]" in the earlier version. This is factually correct. Blues Producer Bruce Iglauer used those exact words in an article published by Gibson Guitars, which article is cited in one of the footnotes. In quoting Iglauer from the same interview in the body of the article, I believe I left those words out both for economy of expression and because they are arguably puffery and debatable in any event. That is why, when referring to the fact that Mack had been so "dubbed", I added the reference to guitarists Eddy, Dale, etc., each of whom could make similar "highly subjective" claims.
All that said, I don't have a huge problem with the article as it presently appears, including the word "perhaps", if that's what it takes to get the "scarlet letter" removed pronto.
Thanks to all.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 02:28, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
Hello, slp512 here.
Not clear if you consider some of my article to be vanadalism, or who was "caught altering cited text". Please specify. If I am the alleged culprit, I'd like to respond but need specifics. In any event, please state what you find objectionable, so that I can either (a) explain myself or (b) attempt to fix it.
Many thanks. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 00:29, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
Hello, slp512 again. To avoid needless exchanges: I have backup for most of the article, much of which backup has been cited. The rest of the material, as near as I can tell, is not even fairly debatable. For what it is worth, there is a wealth of material I did not include, as it is known to me as a personal friend of LM, but has not been aired in any previous publication. Accordingly, I left it out.
As to POV generally, I admit to having one; I can't imagine that anyone but a fan or friend would care to write an article worth reading on this topic, and, in fact, no one had. I recall that there was a "stub" article there several months ago, which I attempted to enlarge until someone else objected to neutrality or tone. Not knowing what else to do, and having no guidance re specifics, I ended up deleting my work product entirely, starting again from scratch months later. Now comes another objection. I understand that someone out there may have objections, questions or concerns; what I request is that you make them as specific as possible, so that I may focus upon them and attempt to satisfy them, short of scrapping the article a second, and last, time.
Thanks in advance.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 01:29, 30 January 2008 (UTC)
slp512 here again. Thanks, Dr. K. What annoys me is that I made a point of saying that the "first guitar hero" title was "highly subjective" and could be claimed with equal authority by four other named guitarists, not just Lonnie Mack. Then I get dinged for NOT saying that Mack was only "perhaps" the "first guitar hero". Did I not say that in a different, and much more factually explicit, way? As noted earlier, I have no problem with EITHER formulation, so long as everyone else is satisfied; I'd just like the scarlet letter removed.
One further comment: I've tried to be factually accurate throughout this project, and when in doubt have gone to the ultimate source, LM himself. Two examples: (a) Numerous write-ups (many of which are available deep on the internet) say that Mack played as a session guitarist during the 1960s with James Brown, Hank Ballard and Freddie King. I was able, through independent research, to substantiate King and Brown, but not Ballard. Ultimately, I called LM, who told me that he never backed up Ballard, although he recorded several Ballard tunes during the '60s. So, unlike most available sources, this article does not make the claim that LM backed up Ballard on any recording, even though I could have cited the other articles as substantiation that he had done so, and, frankly, no one would have been the wiser. (b) In the article, I quote LM as having said that blues and country are "about the closest musics there are", and that he regards both as "earth music". These are direct quotes from an article in one of the guitar magazines from the mid-1970's. However, my hard copy of that article does not indicate WHICH magazine it was. So, I called LM and confirmed the accuracy of the quote before putting it in the article, where it appears without a footnote, since, again, I can't tell which magazine it was.
All of which is a long-winded way of saying I have tried very hard to be factually accurate in this article, and to provide a wealth of third-party material on matters which might appear to others as POV. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 22:42, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
Thanks to all.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 22:19, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
Dr.K. ( talk) 23:50, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
slp512 here. Thanks for these constructive comments. I've already gone back to clean up some of this sort of thing, and now having read this will go back again. Obviously, if you still feel that there is too much POV, feel free to take a crack at fixing it yourself, too.
regards, slp512
Mack's 1963 instrumentals "Memphis", "Wham!" and "Chicken-Pickin'" are now recognized as the first recorded rock guitar solos built around a five-note blues scale. This is a statement that appears repeatedly in this article and it is palpably untrue. Rock and roll guitar solos, since long before Lonnie Mack, used the "five note blues scale." To be honest, this irritates me to no end. There were literally dozens of guitar solos using the pentatonic scale before Lonnie Mack came out with Memphis. No offense to Lonnie Mack, who is a fantastic and truly influential guitarist. But really, it's harder to find a guitar solo in the 1950s and 1960s that wasn't based around a pentatonic scale than it is to find one that is. All of Chuck Berry's solos are based around a pentatonic scale, particularly his instrumental Deep Feeling. On the rare occasions when Bo Diddley allows a single note solo, it's always in the pentatonic scale. Elmore James worked with Big Joe Turner and turned in a raw, pentatonic based solo on the song "TV Mama," in 1953. Those are only three examples. Realistically speaking, nearly all of the early rock and roll guitarists were learning from what musicologists call "the folk tradition," meaning they were figuring out how to play on their own by emulating their favorite players and records, and by asking other players "How did you do that?" Anybody who was learning guitar back then would have been instructed on how to use the pentatonic "blues" scale almost immediately, because the scale gives the impression of having no "wrong" notes, especially if played over a I-IV-V progression. So really, every early rock guitarist was using the pentatonic scale, simply because they were modeling themselves after the jazz and blues guitarists they admired - who also used the pentatonic scale. So, can we agree to modify this outrageous claim and bring it down to something a bit more realistic?-- Happydog ( talk) 18:09, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
Hello to all. slp512 here. I'm in a rush so will respond quickly then hopefully get back to this later.
"First rock guitar solo....[to be base on blues scale]" So says Pinell, Ph. D., and I have quoted him at least twice. There seems to be a definitional problem here. If you include people like Elmore James and even Bo Diddley, you are venturing back more into the blues, or (in Diddley's case) R&B. As to the great Chuck Berry, there is no doubt he was a rock performer in every sense. There is also no doubt that while he is responsible for many standard rock guitar riffs, he never distinguished himself as a full-length guitar soloist, certainly not in the sense which defines "blues-rock", i.e., the genre ushered to maturity by the likes of Eric Clapton, Jeff Beck, Peter Green, and, much later, Stevie Ray Vaughan. I would include Hendrix here, as well, although he is considered by many to be either sui generis or an exponent of "psychedelic rock" guitar.
Before reading these latest comments, I went back to tone down what others might regard as POV in about 10 different places in the article.
I'm not sure how this is supposed to work....is it time for a vote on the scarlet letter, or does it stay there indefinitely? I'd be sad to delete the article, but if it keeps offending folks who Wikipedia has seen fit to bestow with editorial control, this article either has to disappear, or (hopefully!) satisfy those who have taken offense, pretty soon. I don't know that I, personally, can ratchet this thing back a whole lot more.
As always, thanks to all.
slp512`````` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 00:17, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
OK, I'm back sooner than I anticipated.
Anyone who is offended by Pinnell's claim is welcome to take a crack at fixing it. I've already done what I can without violating what I view as the truth of the matter. I will say that Pinnell (whose article is not available on-line, but can be accessed at most big-city central libraries) was careful to say that he was talking about the first "rock" or "rock and roll" guitar solo whose melody was based upon the blues scale, by which one thing is clear and another less clear.
What is clear from context: He was referring to a full-length guitar solo, as distinguished from, e.g., fill riffs.
What is not entirely clear: His definition of "rock" or "rock and roll". However, giving the man some credit for knowing what he was talking about, my inference is that he was referring to something distinctly "rock", as distinguished from a blues or R&B tune with the volume turned up. In his article, he refers to a few things that appear to have been significant to him in this regard, including (as I recall) the rhythm, the picking techniques and the arrangement, generally. However, his article does not expressly say anything to the effect of "Oh, by the way, here's what I mean when I use the terms 'rock' and 'rock & roll'". My own view is that Elmore James and Big Joe Turner were not "rock" musicians in the sense I infer Pinell to have used the term. Bo Diddley certainly comes closer, especially in the highly inclusive sense now used by the Rock and Roll Hall of Fame. But that evidently is not what Pinnell had in mind.
OK, not that anyone needs my permission, but as far as I am concerned, anyone who wants to take a crack at fixing what they view as inaccurate or offensive can take their shot at the article itself.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.135.211.131 ( talk) 01:06, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
slp512 again. OK, folks, I've gone back to neutralize the offending sections as best I can without stating a falsehood. Please read carefully and let me know what you think. I'll be absent for a couple of weeks, beginning now, but will check in again when I return.
slp512
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 02:36, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
Thanks. I couldn't leave without doing another spate of "tone-down" edits, which I hope will prove satisfactory even to those who have been most critical. I will not have time to add the citations noted near the end of the article for a week or so, however. In the interim, if anyone else has suggestions, or feels that other references in the article need citations, hopefully that input can be given in my absence. The computer on which much of my reference material was stored crashed recently, but I still have at least 90% of the reference material in hard copy, so I am that it includes (or that I can find again, if necessary) citations for most if not all of the areas marked as needing citations.
Thanks to all in advance.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slp512 ( talk • contribs) 22:59, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
(edit conflict) I have finished checking the article. In my opinion the POV level is low now and the POV tag can be removed. I placed citations needed tags so that the narrative can be strengthened by inline citations. Providing the citations will greatly improve the overall quality of this already fine article. Dr.K. ( talk) 23:05, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
slp512 checking in again. Thanks much, Dr. K. I see I got a little testy a couple of times in my earlier comments, for which I apologize. I concur that this is now a much better article for an encyclopedia than it once was, and that I got carried away at times out of personal feelings. I don't have my background material available here, but checked it quickly last night and confirmed that I can back up most of the "citations needed" tags with what I still have in hard copy. There are some I can't, at least without further research. I'll mention them here in case any of the editors have ideas re how to deal with them.
1. Reference to "Chicken-Pickin'" as LM's most technically-challenging guitar solo. Anyone who has heard LM's guitar work knows this to be true, at least as respects picking speed. But I can't recall an external reference for this, which admittedly states a proposition in the form of an opinion. Suggestions?
2. Under the heading "Blue-Eyed Soul Ballads" the first two "citation needed" tags come after what I view as fair, and reasonably non-controversial comments that are manifestly inferable not just from listening to the music, but from material quoted in the same section, plus material which I haven't cited, but can cite, from the contemporary reviews of LM's first album. However, none of those, as I recall, state it precisely as I have. Too much POV? Change of wording needed to conform more closely to material cited/to be cited?
3. "Many regard (attribution needed) [Mack's guitar solos to have been the first to comprehensively incorporate blues stylism into rock]". I can provide cites to articles whose authors undoubtedly agree, but who arguably have expressed themselves somewhat differently. In fact, look at the boxed quotes from Bruce Iglauer, Ben Sandmel and Brown & Newquist in the same section of the article. Close enough?
4. Under the heading "Elektra Years", the comparisons with Buck Owens, Sam & Dave and Wilson Pickett, singers whose styles and voices are quite distinctive, and therefore innately provide data points from which comparisons can be made. While passages in question are my comments entirely, based upon listening to the recordings, I view them as much closer to the assertion that "bananas are softer than coconuts" than the assertion that "Pork tastes better than beef". The latter is a manifestly personal, highly subjective opinion, while "bananas are softer than coconuts", although similarly phrased as a comparison of qualitative features, is an easily-verifiable observation made from the speaker's personal experience, and upon verification, unlikely to result in substantial disagreement. Bottom line: I'm not sure how to "fix" this, assuming you think it still needs fixing, unless I can dig up old articles I have not yet found, and they just happen to say these things. Not likely. Any suggestions?
5. The two quotes beginning with blues and country being "about the closest musics there are" and ending with "earth music". As indicated in an earlier comment, I have an article from the '70s which expressly quotes Mack as haing said both of these things, but when I copied the article at the Los Angeles Public Library, I did not notice that the pages I copied failed to identify either the author or the publication. All I know for certain is that it was a popular music magazine, almost certainly one of the guitar-oriented ones, and that it was written in the 1970s, which I get from context. I can fax a hard copy of the article if you will provide a fax number. As indicated in my earlier comment, I independently verified the accuracy of the quotes from the article directly with Lonnie Mack. Any thoughts?
OK, I think I can handle the rest without bothering you good folks, but if you can give me some feedback on the above, I can be ready to hit the ground running with all of the "citation needed" tags in a week or so.
Thanks again.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.135.211.131 ( talk) 23:04, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
Wow, thanks, I appreciate the comments. I forgot to mention: a tag above states the article needs more photos, although thanks to webhamster it already has 3 album covers. Mack's website has several great photos, but knowing him as I do, he won't know where they came from, who snapped them, whether they are copyrighted, or whether he has the authority to make it legally OK to use them in another on-line publication. Neither do I. Any thoughts? Also, I will be visiting him in 3 weeks and can take some photos that won't have any of these problems, since they will be coming from me with his consent. I have in mind a photo of him with the "V" and one of his '50s-era Magnatone amps. Any other ideas? Finally, importation of any photos into the article is way beyond my technical expertise, as is almost anything having to do with computers. If you'd be so kind, I'd like to have you take charge of that. Thanks again.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.135.211.131 ( talk) 23:42, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
OK, will do, and thanks again.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 206.135.211.131 ( talk) 22:15, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
It took a little longer than I thought it would, but I resumed editing this piece a few days ago. It was helpful to get away from it for a while. That made it a lot easier to spot the remnants of "POV", and to delete them. In the process, many passages were eliminated which, had they remained, would have required citation to outside authorities. Most of the deleted material was essentially duplicative of cited and quoted sources, so its elimination not only does not hurt the article, it streamlines it a bit.
I also notice that others have made helpful edits, for which I thank them. All good changes.
In the next few days I will add source citations for the remaining passages which require them, and that will conclude my work on the composition of this article. At that point, I'd appreciate it if one of the editors who have been so helpful in the past would reduce those citations (which I will place in the body of the article) to footnotes, as I can't figure out how to do that.
One last comment: I had planned to take photos of Lonnie Mack when I visited him in early March, but accidentally left my camera with relatives in Atlanta when I drove up to Tennessee to see him. I will find some photos on the internet that I think can be safely used, without violating anyone's copyright, and leave a message here as to where those can be found, in the hope that, again, one of the helpful editors will insert them into the article at appropriate places.
Thanks to all who have helped.
slp512
Dr, K, I'm done now with the additional citations, of which there are many. I have placed them in italics so that they are easier for you to spot. They include not only those which I was asked to provide, but several others.
In addition, there are two extended quotes which, for the sake of layout consistency, should be in boxes. One is the second paragraph of the section entitled "1963: 'Blue-Eyed Soul' ballads". The other is the second paragraph of the section entitled "1970s: Flying 'under the radar'".
Thanks for your kind assistance.
SLP512
No problem with the edits, Dr. K. Your objectivity is much appreciated.
I think I've now provided all the reference citaitons I can find. I deleted a bit of material along the way due to some material lost when my hard-drive crashed, but it doesn't seem to have harmed the article materially.
There are still 10 references in the body of the article which need to be reduced to footnotes. All are in italics, in these locations:
Section 1.3, first paragraph; fourth paragraph (twice) Section 1.4, in the para. before the final blocked quote, and also in the final paragraph. Section 1.5, first and second paragraphs. Section 1.9, paragraph before the final blocked quoted. Section 1.10, first paragraph. Section 1.12, second para.
For photos, it is my understanding that anything which credits the photographer is fair game. If my understanding is correct, there are many photos on Mack's website, http://www.lonniemack.com which could be used. Also, that website has a link to his "MySpace" page, which has even more photos. My personal favorites would be the professional black & white photo depicting Mack sitting in a high-backed chair with his guitar, and a relatively recent color photo showing him holding an acoustic guitar, and standing in front of a wood-panelled wall. Both are on the MySpace page under the link to photos. But you can choose whatever you think is appropriate.
Many thanks.
slp512
Dr. K, to look at the photos on myspace you need a myspace ID. Sorry about that. A link to some picutre is: http://viewmorepics.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=user.viewPicture&friendID=134716769&albumId=590072
If you can't use them, let me know, and I'll see if Mack has any that can be used. I figured that since these were on his myspace page and already credit photographers, they would be fair game, but I'll leave that to your knowledge of how that works.
As to the 3 additional factual references, I think I have references to all 3. I'll look, and update the article accordingly.
slp512
More pix:
The pix I have referred you to are all on his myspace page, but if you can't get to them without a myspace login, let me know. I know his webmaster, if that would help in getting permission to use any photos.
And, no problem re the additional cites, if I can find them, I'll put them where they belong.
slp512
Ok, I'll get to that soon.
Meanwhile there are four new references that need to go into footnotes, one under the "Significance of LM's instrumentals" heading and three under the "Comeback Decade" heading. Under the latter, I had to delete some material which I apparently found in one or both of the full-length bio books on SRV I borrowed from the LA Public Library a couple of years ago. Don't have the books now. So I substituted with new material of equivalent import, for which I still had the reference material.
slp512
Three new refs today. I see you've already found one. The other two are found in the section pertaining to awards in 2005 and 2006.
slp512
I now have a good photo of Mack playing at a concert in 2003. It was taken by his long-time friend and webmaster, Russ House. I have it as an attachment to an email from Mr. House, and also put in in the "my documents" folder of my computer here at work. But I can't figure out how to get it here (no cut and paste option that allows me to do this), so can you give me an email adress to which I could send it along with the written consent of Mr. House?
Thanks.
slp512
Dr K, I've posed your question to Russ, and am awaiting a response.
slp512
Hi, if you wish to upload the photo, the best thing to do is go to the upload page on Wikimedia Commons, upload the photo, fill in a description, and add a license, such as GFDL. Then add the template {{otrs pending}} to the image. After this, ask your friend to fill in an agreement such as commons:User:Riana/statement. Once he has done this, ask him to e-mail it to permissions@wikimedia.org . An OTRS agent should be able to take care of it ASAP. Hope that helps, if not, please feel free to ask. Cheers! ~ Riana ⁂ 15:15, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
Riana/Dr. K: I've asked Russ House, the photographer, to read your instructions and take over from this point. He has already indicated he will grant the license.
slp512
If Russ doesn't contact you in the next few days, I'll call him.
Meanwhile there are two references which need to be reduced to footnotes, one in the 4th Para. of "Career" and the other in the 4th Para. of "Significance...". Thanks again for doing this for me.
slp512
Thanks slp. Will do. Take care. Dr.K. ( talk) 23:11, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
Three new references in introduction. I recalled that Wikipedia requires these in the intro, not just the body.
Thanks again!
slp512
Done. My pleasure. Bye for now. Dr.K. ( talk) 01:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
Dr. K, I saw your call for two more citations in the section entitled "Significance...." and that caused me to re-read it. I concluded it was too long and redundant, so I shortened it considerably, although I added a new quote at the beginning of that section. I'd appreciate it if you'd reduce the citation there to a footnote. Unless asked for more, I'm now done with the footnotes.
slp512
Tags are not a problem at all. Some of them are a bit of a challenge, however. There are things I know to be true from my association with Mack and his managers, and/or just from having lived on the planet for 60 years, and/or maybe from having read it somewhere, sometime. But trying to find an outside reference is another matter entirely. For instance, I just deleted a couple of sentences about Berry speeding up his own performance of "Memphis" and he and Mack ending up friends and touring partners. I know these things to be true, but I'll never find something that says they are, so they're out. Likewise, I know that Mack put on a benefit concert to raise money for Berry's bail when Berry ran afoul of the law and ended up in the slammer, but I'll never find anything that says that either, so it never went into the article. And I know a very interesting story about a time in the late '60s when Mack put together a late-night jam session in Greenwich Village with Jimi Hendrix, Jerry Garcia and Janis Joplin, and coaxed Hendrix into playing country guitar, while he and Joplin sang and Garcia played pedal steel. But I'll never find anything that says that happened, either. My problem is that I know too many things that aren't "out there", and in my zeal I end up mixing them with the stuff that is. So it ends up having to be fixed. Luckily for me, I've had your kind assistance in showing me where I've left the track.
And that's OK. If I wanted free reign over this article I could have written it for some other publication that didn't care as much about documentation. I share your goal of trying to make this article as compliant with Wikipedia requirements as possible. Your editorial assistance has been invaluable. I'll let you scour it for further needed citations, edits, etc., then I'll get back to it again in a few days. Everything comes to an end sooner or later, and I sense this project is a lot closer to the end than the beginning.
slp512
Good tradeoff, I agree.
Dr. K, I see that you've reduced most of my latest references to footnotes. There is still one under the heading "Career", 3d para, and another under the heading "1963: "Memphis"...", 4th para. Coindicentally, I think that gets us to exactly 100 footnotes. Again, if you think anything in the article needs to be fixed, or more footnotes added, I'll trust your judgment.
Regards,
slp512
Thanks for the kudos. It looks like we were working on the article at the same time, and you got one even as I was pointing them out. So they're all taken care of now. Thanks!
slp512
Two more footnotes in "Comeback" section, 3d paragraph, the para about Eric Clapton. Thanks much.
slp512
Dr. K, I added a quote in the 4th para of the section entitled, "1964: The Wham of that Memphis Man". This should be a boxed quote. Also added another reference in the section "1980s: Comeback Decade", 3d para. If you would add the footnotes and do the boxed quote, that would be greatly appreciated. Thanks.
slp512
Hi slp. I just wanted to know if you can find a reference for the following sentence:
Finally, Mack's best-selling single, the instrumental "Memphis", was based on the melody of a Chuck Berry tune. Because we have to provide a backup citation for the reader who is not familiar with the origin of "Memphis". Thanks. Dr.K. ( talk) 19:51, 30 April 2008 (UTC)
Hi, Dr. K. There is a new paragraph quoting the lyrics of a tune in the section entitled "1970s...". It now appears as the 6th para. It should be a boxed quote in order to conform to the format for song lyrics used elsewhere in the article. There is also a new reference at the very end of the section entitled "1980s....". That one needs to be reduced to a footnote. I'd appreciate it if you would do those for me.
I don't plan on any significant revisions at this point. I am trying to find a copy of one of his albums to determine if it merits comment. I am also trying to find out about session work he did with Joe Simon which does not appear in anything written about him that I have found. If Mack is credited on Simon albums themselves, I may mention that session work.
As always, thanks for your assistance.
slp512
Hi Dr. K,
Can you make that new boxed quote match the appearance of the other one just below it (another recital of lyrics from a song)? I tried to copy the way that other one was done, but I don't have a vertical line on my keyboard, and it apparently requires that. Thanks, much!
slp512
Article has been expanded nicely. However ther is a major overkill on WP:QUOTE throughout this article. An excellent player for sure. I was pleased to see someone put some effort into it. If the WP:QUOTE issue could be cleaned up some (cut at least half of them... keep just the best ones) I would almost push this page for a GA review. If the refs were formatted correctly (I am just refering to the book refs/Harvard reference format) it would be a shoe-in. Anger22 ( Talk 2 22) 01:18, 11 July 2008 (UTC)
Slp512 here. I have recently returned to this article after a long time away. I cleaned up a few minor areas in the last several days.
With some trepidation, I will say that further editing of the article to improve it from Wiki's standpoint should probably be done by others. I am a personal friend of Mack's and found it exceedingly difficult earlier in the process to separate out my own POV from the facts, although I ultimately succeeded to the point that the complaints dried up considerably. As to the many quotes, I was driven to include as much material as I could, first, because my own POV was prohibited, and, secondly, because (to my knowledge) there is no comprehensive article on Mack, anywhere. The closest I have found is the recent Gibson Lifestyle article I have footnoted several times. As to formatting, and especially the computer expertise necessary to do it, I am at a complete loss, and had to rely heavily on Dr. K and others, who were helpful in many ways. Finally, this is my first effort at writing an article, and I am sure there are others who are better at it.
For all these reasons, I think it best for others to make any further changes to the article.
Thanks to all.........
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 23:53, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
slp512: Thanks, Dr. K, I'll do as you've suggested.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 00:24, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
slp512: Dr. K, Of the 6 consecutive boxed quotes in section 1.6, I'd like to retain the Brown & Newquist and Sandmel quotes. The other 4 could be referenced in a related footnote.
Under section 1.4, the second boxed quote should be kept. The other two could be swept into footnoted material.
That would eliminate 6 boxed quotes from the body of the article.
Section 1.10: The first two sentences of the third para could be retained, but with a period at the end of the second sentence, to be followed by antoher sentence: According to the lyrics of a tune from the mid-'70s, Mack yearned for the simple, anonymous country life of his youth. [footnote here to the song referenced in the second boxed quote]. In a 1977 interview, Mack added: [the first boxed quote follows here].
That would eliminate one boxed quote from the body of section 1.10.
All of the foregoing would result in elimination of 7 boxed quotes. I'd still like to keep that material in the footnotes if at all possible. As I said yesterday, this is the most comprehensive factual article about Mack's career to be found anywhere, and by far the most comprehensive collection of what others have said about it.
After all of that is done, I'll have to go in and modify the text in some areas from which those quotes have been deleted. When that's done, let's take another look at it.
Thanks much, my friend.
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 18:34, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
References
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 21:03, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 21:57, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
slp512 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 64.32.181.34 ( talk) 22:36, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
slp512
I did some heavy cleanup here. I don't think the section titles should have years in them, removed those. I made awards, and guitar style level 2 headers, and added tables to awards. I changed the formatting of the discography and did some heavy grammar/ redundancy edits to the entire article. Some of the references are still not formatted correctly but I fixed those as I saw them, although they were not my main focus. Washburnmav ( talk) 18:52, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
I promoted this article to Good status as I believe it satisfies those criterion. If you believe any of my edits are incorrect feel free to change it and let me know on my talk page. Thanks. Washburnmav ( talk) 18:46, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
Thanks for your involvement, Washburnmav. I did go back to add some chronological context in a couple of places where it had been lost in the process of streamlining and re-formatting the article. Other than that, the edits are terrific. Thanks to all of the experienced editors whose professionalism and teamwork have greatly improved this article. Slp512 ( talk) 20:09, 24 August 2008 (UTC)
Dr. K: I found a couple of typos and fixed them. Also, in a couple of places, added back a few words of text where the meaning had been lost to the edits. Finally, in the section "Memphis, Wham and the birth of blues-rock guitar", I added back some material which I have placed in parentheses so that you can easily find it (in 3d paragraph). I would appreciate it if you would reduce that parenthetical material to a footnote. It took a long time for me to nail down that fact, and I wouldn't want it to be questioned in the future for the lack of a reference. Thanks much. Slp512 ( talk) 23:39, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
I've added footnote references where requested. Dr. K., as of this writing (you may be in the document now) there are footnote references in the first, fourth and fifth paras. of the releveant section that still need to be put in proper form. I wonder if I could prevail on you to do that? Thanks in advance. Slp512 ( talk) 00:33, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
Dr. K, I also added another footnote at the fifth paragraph of "Career". Thanks much! Slp512 ( talk) 02:03, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Sorry. -- Be Black Hole Sun ( talk) 19:11, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
<ref name="">{{cite web | url= | title= | publisher= | accessdate=}}</ref>
And use that template for all the references okay. -- Be Black Hole Sun ( talk) 18:17, 21 September 2008 (UTC)
Okay. Contact me when your finished. -- Be Black Hole Sun ( talk) 14:55, 23 September 2008 (UTC)
I have finished my edits to this point, and have streamlined the article a bit in places. 75.22.60.10 ( talk) 19:49, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
Some good work has been done here recently to make the tone of this article less like an adulatory book, and more like an encyclopaedia article. The references need work though: they should be short citations verifying what's written in the body of the article, but most of them have become little bits of article in their own right, often veering into original research and POV commentary, with three or more references clustered into a single large footnote. I'll start working on this, but it will take time. The Mighty Glen ( talk) 09:16, 23 December 2017 (UTC)
This article still has a significant problem with its use of sources. Most of them read like a construction of a justification for what has been said from multiple sources, rather than simply pointing the reader towards a source that does this. Using multiple sources in one cite is not Wikipedia standard. Some individual sources may well still act to verify what is said, but there's a lot of intervening waffle to cut through.
Also note; a cite that simply directs the reader to another part of the article, or another Wikipedia article, does not constitute a cite. The cite needs to direct the reader to a reliable source. Escape Orbit (Talk) 17:27, 4 July 2023 (UTC)