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Reviewer: Etriusus ( talk · contribs) 05:03, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
I'm running out of quips to begin these reviews. Review start.
The population of Rocky Mountain locusts continued to decline each year after 1874 and in spring 1875, many of the hatched locust eggs died due to frost, leading to their extinctionBit to comma happy, please break up into two sentences.
Locusts continued to cause more infestations, including Albert's swarm, until insecticides were created during World War IIis this sentence necessary? It seemly contradicts the claim that the locust went extinct. Albert's swarm was already mentioned.
Prose needs some work. I made some edits, please review and revert if necessary. Placing on hold. Etrius ( Us) 04:55, 30 November 2022 (UTC)
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I really don't see anything that I cannot clean-up or are isses within the scope for GA criteria. I understand that some of the issues above may just be writing style and that wouldn't be fair to hold this article back simply on those grounds. I apologize for the whiplash, and relative unorthodox nature of this review but I'll go ahead and pass the article. Congrats!!! Etrius ( Us) 00:53, 1 December 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Etriusus ( talk · contribs) 05:03, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
I'm running out of quips to begin these reviews. Review start.
The population of Rocky Mountain locusts continued to decline each year after 1874 and in spring 1875, many of the hatched locust eggs died due to frost, leading to their extinctionBit to comma happy, please break up into two sentences.
Locusts continued to cause more infestations, including Albert's swarm, until insecticides were created during World War IIis this sentence necessary? It seemly contradicts the claim that the locust went extinct. Albert's swarm was already mentioned.
Prose needs some work. I made some edits, please review and revert if necessary. Placing on hold. Etrius ( Us) 04:55, 30 November 2022 (UTC)
Second pass
I really don't see anything that I cannot clean-up or are isses within the scope for GA criteria. I understand that some of the issues above may just be writing style and that wouldn't be fair to hold this article back simply on those grounds. I apologize for the whiplash, and relative unorthodox nature of this review but I'll go ahead and pass the article. Congrats!!! Etrius ( Us) 00:53, 1 December 2022 (UTC)