Everything's looking really good at this point, and there are only a couple of little issues that need addressing:
- By the 1940s, however, American men had to leave -- I think we can do away with the "however" because this isn't actually contrasting anything with the 30s, since it wasn't mentioned that men were, well, there.
- "Plot" implies fiction, so "Synopsis" may be a better heading.
- The film also covers their post-wrestling employment: lion-tamer, detective, nurse, and yodeler -- using the word "employment" we'd have lion-taming, yodeling, etc. so either change as necessary or use a word like "occupation" instead of employment.
- It had several other premieres -- these ones aren't really premieres, are they? Unless it's the Atlanta premiere or Chicago premiere, which is kind of lame. Is "screenings" a better word?
- The film premiered in 2004 at various film festivals across the United States -- Actually, I hear Canada's not actually one of the 50 states ;) It did have its world premiere in Canada, so perhaps add in that it first screened in Toronto.
Done lol.
Nikki
311
18:13, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
- Is there a source for the New York Daily News comment?
- Done - I have no idea where that came from and can't find it, so I removed it.
Nikki
311
18:23, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
- Karie Bible of IGN called the film but Liz Braun of the Toronto Sun calls the film -- sweep through for tense consistency.
- Link Rotten Tomatoes
- I assume Ebert's rating was out of 5, maybe add that in.
- Link San Francisco Chronicle
I think that's all, and sorry for being so picky about things! I guess you know you've got a week, you know how the system works (probably a lot better than I do!) and good luck :) — 97198 talk 13:20, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
- Oh, and is there a source for the film often being referred to as just Lipstick and Dynamite? — 97198 talk 13:24, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
I think I got everything! Thanks for the review. Nikki 311 18:23, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
- Awesome stuff, I'm happy to go ahead and pass it. — 97198 talk 07:17, 28 July 2008 (UTC)
Everything's looking really good at this point, and there are only a couple of little issues that need addressing:
- By the 1940s, however, American men had to leave -- I think we can do away with the "however" because this isn't actually contrasting anything with the 30s, since it wasn't mentioned that men were, well, there.
- "Plot" implies fiction, so "Synopsis" may be a better heading.
- The film also covers their post-wrestling employment: lion-tamer, detective, nurse, and yodeler -- using the word "employment" we'd have lion-taming, yodeling, etc. so either change as necessary or use a word like "occupation" instead of employment.
- It had several other premieres -- these ones aren't really premieres, are they? Unless it's the Atlanta premiere or Chicago premiere, which is kind of lame. Is "screenings" a better word?
- The film premiered in 2004 at various film festivals across the United States -- Actually, I hear Canada's not actually one of the 50 states ;) It did have its world premiere in Canada, so perhaps add in that it first screened in Toronto.
- Done lol.
Nikki
311
18:13, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
- Is there a source for the New York Daily News comment?
- Done - I have no idea where that came from and can't find it, so I removed it.
Nikki
311
18:23, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
- Karie Bible of IGN called the film but Liz Braun of the Toronto Sun calls the film -- sweep through for tense consistency.
- Link Rotten Tomatoes
- I assume Ebert's rating was out of 5, maybe add that in.
- Link San Francisco Chronicle
I think that's all, and sorry for being so picky about things! I guess you know you've got a week, you know how the system works (probably a lot better than I do!) and good luck :) — 97198 talk 13:20, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
- Oh, and is there a source for the film often being referred to as just Lipstick and Dynamite? — 97198 talk 13:24, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
I think I got everything! Thanks for the review. Nikki 311 18:23, 27 July 2008 (UTC)
- Awesome stuff, I'm happy to go ahead and pass it. — 97198 talk 07:17, 28 July 2008 (UTC)