Done for the DOB, the other one links to
2008 in film. Should I unlink that as well?
No, links like that can be used.
Could you expand the lead a little? Maybe with some information from "Early life and career" and "Personal life".
Yeah, I have tried to do that.
attending drama courses, street- and jazz dance – Shouldn't this say something like "attending drama courses, and performing street- and jazz dance"?
Yeah, you're right. I think that's more or less been there since I created the article.
Ref 1 and 4 needs to be merged because they are the same article.
Actually, ref 1 was a link to an "Infobox" of sorts, that appeared next to the main article. I used that as a source for the place of birth. Unfortunately the link is dead now. I'll try to work it out.
Yeah, but that infobox is included in ref 4 so you might as well replace ref 1 with that. :)
Ah, the infobox has been upgraded since I last looked at it. Merged references.
One of her first roles was an amateur theatre performance as the mother of a spoiled girl wanting new jeans.
Done, changed to "... was 'in an amateur theatre performance as ..."
Nickelodeon's programledarskola is a television show so it should be italicized.
Yeah.
Unlink "October 2006"
Check.
"-40°C" – Use − instead of a hyphen.
Hmm, I wasn't able to figure out how. Are you sure about this, by the way?
Celsius and
Kelvin seem to use a regular dash.
Fixed it for you.
Thanks!
Leandersson has received several awards, and is currently nominated for a Saturn Award for "Best Performance By a Younger Actor", and a Constellation Award for "Best Female Performance in a 2008 Science Fiction Film". – This is a bit unnecessary as it is already mentioned in the Awards section. I think it's best to remove it.
How strongly do you feel about this? :) I'm not a fan of the idea that tables and infoboxes effectively replace the prose. I looked at some other actor-bios before adding this, and they seem to briefly mention a few rewards received (e.g
Emma Watson). But I'm definitely not "married" to it.
OK, it can stay, but can you add references to the paragraph?
Done and done.
In "Personal life", add a link to Falun.
Done.
SheLeandersson has always liked to dance
Right.
The three paragraphs in the "Personal life" section are a bit small. I think it would be better if you merged them into one paragraph.
Yeah, I agree, but it depends. On my 24" monitor they look small, on my 17" they look ok. Done.
Tack så jättemycket! I have addressed everything, but maybe not to your liking :) Thanks again, I really appreciate your swift response. decltype (
talk)
18:56, 11 June 2009 (UTC)reply
Done for the DOB, the other one links to
2008 in film. Should I unlink that as well?
No, links like that can be used.
Could you expand the lead a little? Maybe with some information from "Early life and career" and "Personal life".
Yeah, I have tried to do that.
attending drama courses, street- and jazz dance – Shouldn't this say something like "attending drama courses, and performing street- and jazz dance"?
Yeah, you're right. I think that's more or less been there since I created the article.
Ref 1 and 4 needs to be merged because they are the same article.
Actually, ref 1 was a link to an "Infobox" of sorts, that appeared next to the main article. I used that as a source for the place of birth. Unfortunately the link is dead now. I'll try to work it out.
Yeah, but that infobox is included in ref 4 so you might as well replace ref 1 with that. :)
Ah, the infobox has been upgraded since I last looked at it. Merged references.
One of her first roles was an amateur theatre performance as the mother of a spoiled girl wanting new jeans.
Done, changed to "... was 'in an amateur theatre performance as ..."
Nickelodeon's programledarskola is a television show so it should be italicized.
Yeah.
Unlink "October 2006"
Check.
"-40°C" – Use − instead of a hyphen.
Hmm, I wasn't able to figure out how. Are you sure about this, by the way?
Celsius and
Kelvin seem to use a regular dash.
Fixed it for you.
Thanks!
Leandersson has received several awards, and is currently nominated for a Saturn Award for "Best Performance By a Younger Actor", and a Constellation Award for "Best Female Performance in a 2008 Science Fiction Film". – This is a bit unnecessary as it is already mentioned in the Awards section. I think it's best to remove it.
How strongly do you feel about this? :) I'm not a fan of the idea that tables and infoboxes effectively replace the prose. I looked at some other actor-bios before adding this, and they seem to briefly mention a few rewards received (e.g
Emma Watson). But I'm definitely not "married" to it.
OK, it can stay, but can you add references to the paragraph?
Done and done.
In "Personal life", add a link to Falun.
Done.
SheLeandersson has always liked to dance
Right.
The three paragraphs in the "Personal life" section are a bit small. I think it would be better if you merged them into one paragraph.
Yeah, I agree, but it depends. On my 24" monitor they look small, on my 17" they look ok. Done.
Tack så jättemycket! I have addressed everything, but maybe not to your liking :) Thanks again, I really appreciate your swift response. decltype (
talk)
18:56, 11 June 2009 (UTC)reply