GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (
|
visual edit |
history) ·
Article talk (
|
history) ·
Watch
Reviewer: HĐ ( talk · contribs) 11:29, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Will begin reviewing this article shortly. I began listening to Harry Styles after "
Kiwi", which really showcased his departure from 1D (not a fan of the group's music, sorry...) and becomes one of my go-to songs whenever I want to feel energized lol. His new album Fine Line is also a solid album, though I have not listened to all tracks, including this one. Probably I'll check this one out after reviewing this article. Cheers,
HĐ (
talk)
11:29, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
compared it frequentlyprobably "compared it" would be enough
number 3"number three" (per WP:MOSNUM)
reaching the top 10 in 12 other countriesthis reads like WP:OR. I'd recommend naming some specific countries
The song peaked within the top 10 on charts and received certifications in [select countries]in order to avoid repetition. Some countries will have to be removed, though. HĐ ( talk) 05:07, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
1970s classic rockI don't think "classic rock" refers to 1970s rock but rather 1960s rock. Consider revising this
Released after a two-year hiatus, "Lights Up" marks a departure from Styles' signature rock style towards a more pop-leaning sound.[1][2][3][5][6]There are five references for this claim... Is there any source that could sum this up?
The song composed in 4/4 timegrammar
"Lights Up" eschews traditional song structuresPreviously it mentions that the song follows a verse-chorus form, which I think is rather conventional?
Styles'"Styles's" ( MOS:'S)
More to come.. HĐ ( talk) 03:00, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
on his social mediaProbably "on his social media accounts"?
Caramanica called that the songprobably "said that"
"groovy, melodic track"as they don't add substance
top 10 entry"top-10 entry"
In Ireland, the song peaked at number four on the Irish Singles Chart, becoming Styles's highest debut on the chart at the time. A month later, it was surpassed by "Watermelon Sugar", which arrived at number two in the countryThis reads like trivia. I would removethe "highest debut" bit
It became Styles's second highest charting debut on the chart at the time, behind "Sign of the Times" at number four.Ditto. Avoid "at the time" (I don't remember the link to the discussion, but there is a consensus that "at the time" phrasings are discouraged)
Credits adapted"Credits are adapted" as it is a full sentence (there's a full stop)
Good Article review progress box
|
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (
|
visual edit |
history) ·
Article talk (
|
history) ·
Watch
Reviewer: HĐ ( talk · contribs) 11:29, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Will begin reviewing this article shortly. I began listening to Harry Styles after "
Kiwi", which really showcased his departure from 1D (not a fan of the group's music, sorry...) and becomes one of my go-to songs whenever I want to feel energized lol. His new album Fine Line is also a solid album, though I have not listened to all tracks, including this one. Probably I'll check this one out after reviewing this article. Cheers,
HĐ (
talk)
11:29, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
compared it frequentlyprobably "compared it" would be enough
number 3"number three" (per WP:MOSNUM)
reaching the top 10 in 12 other countriesthis reads like WP:OR. I'd recommend naming some specific countries
The song peaked within the top 10 on charts and received certifications in [select countries]in order to avoid repetition. Some countries will have to be removed, though. HĐ ( talk) 05:07, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
1970s classic rockI don't think "classic rock" refers to 1970s rock but rather 1960s rock. Consider revising this
Released after a two-year hiatus, "Lights Up" marks a departure from Styles' signature rock style towards a more pop-leaning sound.[1][2][3][5][6]There are five references for this claim... Is there any source that could sum this up?
The song composed in 4/4 timegrammar
"Lights Up" eschews traditional song structuresPreviously it mentions that the song follows a verse-chorus form, which I think is rather conventional?
Styles'"Styles's" ( MOS:'S)
More to come.. HĐ ( talk) 03:00, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
on his social mediaProbably "on his social media accounts"?
Caramanica called that the songprobably "said that"
"groovy, melodic track"as they don't add substance
top 10 entry"top-10 entry"
In Ireland, the song peaked at number four on the Irish Singles Chart, becoming Styles's highest debut on the chart at the time. A month later, it was surpassed by "Watermelon Sugar", which arrived at number two in the countryThis reads like trivia. I would removethe "highest debut" bit
It became Styles's second highest charting debut on the chart at the time, behind "Sign of the Times" at number four.Ditto. Avoid "at the time" (I don't remember the link to the discussion, but there is a consensus that "at the time" phrasings are discouraged)
Credits adapted"Credits are adapted" as it is a full sentence (there's a full stop)
Good Article review progress box
|