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Reviewer: Sabrebd ( talk · contribs) 11:59, 1 June 2013 (UTC) reply

I will be starting a review over the weekend. Congratulations on the work on this article so far. Initial thoughts are that the article looks well sourced and well written, but has some formatting issues (unnecessary bold, sandwiching of text between images, titles in caps that should not be and use of the adjective hyphen in titles where there is no noun.) A question that also springs to mind is that usually monastic houses are reviewed under Art and architecture - is there some reason that this is under World history? More to follow.-- SabreBD ( talk) 11:59, 1 June 2013 (UTC) reply

Sorry, its the first time I have submitted an article for review. I picked world history basically because it was the closest thing I could find that seemed to fit. I was thinking of it along the lines of it as a historical site and hadn't considered architecture (probably because its in ruins). Anyway, I shall remember to submit monasteries to art and architecture in future.

As I say, it is the first I have submitted for review. I have basically run out of information to add to the article and am now looking for how to improve it further to take it up to that "Good" standard. I'm not expecting it to be at the required standard right now, but have seen how other reviews have basically been in depth, constructive ideas on how to improve the articles and get it to that "good" standard. So that's what I'm really hoping for.

Many thanks. Rushton2010 ( talk) 16:47, 1 June 2013 (UTC) reply

Its not a hard an fast rule, more custom and practice. In any case it does not really matter as the reviewer can choose where to add an article that passes. I will try to be as helpful as I can. There are some things that are necessary for the GA status, but I will try to suggest anything else that will also improve the article.-- SabreBD ( talk) 17:12, 1 June 2013 (UTC) reply

That would be great. Thank you Rushton2010 ( talk) 21:49, 2 June 2013 (UTC) reply

I think we are all fine with the images and captions now.-- SabreBD ( talk) 13:14, 8 June 2013 (UTC) reply

Sorry, I've added another little section ("The abbey's layout") and I've added a plan of the abbey. I made it myself so hopefully it shouldn't have any issues. Sorry/Thanks again -- Rushton2010 ( talk) 22:16, 8 June 2013 (UTC) reply

That is fine. I held off completing the review as I could see you were still adding to the article. I should be able to finish soon. It looks good by the way and was something I was going to suggest for coverage.-- SabreBD ( talk) 12:24, 9 June 2013 (UTC) reply

I'll work my way through you're suggestions. Hope it's ok, I'm crossing out the things as I do them just to make it easier to see what Iv'e got left to do. Thanks again -- Rushton2010 ( talk) 20:08, 10 June 2013 (UTC) reply

It would probably be best not to use the crossing out, as it looks like I have withdrawn the statements (as a rule its not normal on Wikipedia to strike out another editor's comments). Instead you could use the {{Done}} template after each section.-- SabreBD ( talk) 20:44, 10 June 2013 (UTC) reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a ( major aspects): b ( focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• Which Earl of Lancaster's troops attacked and which Earl of Huntington bought the grounds? It would be good to link directly if they have an article.

Sorry for the delay -busy few days. I've added links for the individual pages for the Earl of Lancaster, Earl of Huntingdon and the Marquess of Northampton. -- Rushton2010 ( talk) 14:55, 7 June 2013 (UTC) Done reply

• The lede is a bit short for an article of this length. The MOS recommends two or three paragraphs for an article of this size. That is not a hard and fast rule, but I think it needs a bit more of a summary of the whole article, such as the historical events, especially since some sections have been added.-- SabreBD ( talk) 23:08, 9 June 2013 (UTC) reply

I've extended; let me know what you think. -- Rushton2010 ( talk) 22:34, 10 June 2013 (UTC) Done reply

• There is a bit of inconsistency in the references. Sometimes retrieved is after a full stop and sometimes after a comma. Nicols volume two is in Arabic and then Roman numerals. More importantly, some references given here do not link to the reference but another source (British History Online): if its taken from a secondary source the one actually used should be the one consulted. The Calender of Papal Letters and Visitations of Religious Houses in the Dioc. of Linc are given in short title form, but there is no full version. This may be the same problem as before. I also believe that with JSTOR articles the reference should tell the reader that it is subscription only, but I cannot track down the link at the moment.-- SabreBD ( talk) 23:08, 9 June 2013 (UTC) reply

I've redone the whole reference section so that it is all in the single reference style.-- Rushton2010 ( talk) 22:34, 10 June 2013 (UTC) Done reply

I moved the pics around and reformatted to do my best to get them to copy with WP:IMAGES. Basically there is a need to avoid sandwiching text between images, the Cardinal needs to be on the right so that his eyes face the text and "size forcing" is discouraged. However, long images can be given the parameter "upright", so that they display in a reasonable size. It seem to me that there is room for another pic in the after dissolution section and there are several available on Commons here. The 1906 photograph of Cavendish House is worth considering, but perhaps one of the pics of Abbot Penny's Wall might also be useful, it is after all what most of those passing will see (it is my abiding memory of the place). I also notice there is a very good panorama of the ruins and that could fit in nicely between sections (I can do this if it helps - I have the code handy). It would be a bit of shame not to use this as it would probably look quite impressive. So some things to think about here.-- SabreBD ( talk) 17:45, 3 June 2013 (UTC) Done reply

I've added the picture of Abbot Penny's Wall. I agree its something more people will probably recognise. I will have a play and see if the old photograph of Cavendish House can be fit in without squashing any text too.

I would be very grateful if you could add the panorama. I have seen them used in other articles but I'm afraid I do not know how to add them myself. Thank you again -- Rushton2010 ( talk) 15:09, 7 June 2013 (UTC) reply

No problem. I should also be able to finish the review this weekend.-- SabreBD ( talk) 15:21, 7 June 2013 (UTC) reply

• There may now be room for one more picture in the Cavendish House section, but I am not sure what it is, since another house picture would achieve little.-- SabreBD ( talk) 23:08, 9 June 2013 (UTC) reply

I've jiggled them around a little bit and added a final photo into the extra space -- Rushton2010 ( talk) 21:32, 11 June 2013 (UTC) Done reply

• Working towards FA status, captions will need alternative text. Done Categories should be in alphabetical order. Done The main thing that might be asked for is a bit more historical context about monasticism, religious orders, Dissolution and the new aristocracy taking over. I don't think this is necessary for GA, but it is something to consider for the future.-- SabreBD ( talk) 23:08, 9 June 2013 (UTC) Done reply