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Mildly repetitive in the lead, the first para deals in general with the institutions he was involved with, second para then revisits those all, repeats some of the facts and expands a little more. Perhaps merge those details so they're only stated once?
Potentially need to link "commencement ceremony" as I'm not familiar with that term and I think it's slightly counter-intuitive for some of us (if, as I suspect, it's graduation, which isn't commencing, it's finishing, although it's commencing the next chapter I suppose...)
"Following the end of World War II, the number of students at Georgetown doubled" just like that? One assumes this happened over a period of time, or was it the very next class in, what, 1946, was twice that of the 1945 class?
The source doesn't give a timeframe, except to indicate that the increase was very quick, which was generally true for universities across the United States after the end of the war, in the wake of the
GI Bill.
Ergo Sum20:00, 29 September 2019 (UTC)reply
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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Mildly repetitive in the lead, the first para deals in general with the institutions he was involved with, second para then revisits those all, repeats some of the facts and expands a little more. Perhaps merge those details so they're only stated once?
Potentially need to link "commencement ceremony" as I'm not familiar with that term and I think it's slightly counter-intuitive for some of us (if, as I suspect, it's graduation, which isn't commencing, it's finishing, although it's commencing the next chapter I suppose...)
"Following the end of World War II, the number of students at Georgetown doubled" just like that? One assumes this happened over a period of time, or was it the very next class in, what, 1946, was twice that of the 1945 class?
The source doesn't give a timeframe, except to indicate that the increase was very quick, which was generally true for universities across the United States after the end of the war, in the wake of the
GI Bill.
Ergo Sum20:00, 29 September 2019 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.