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Nominator: SafariScribe ( talk · contribs) 17:20, 5 March 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Pbritti ( talk · contribs) 19:42, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I'm
Pbritti, an editor with a content background of primarily Christianity and architectural subjects.
SafariScribe, your article looks promising considering the breadth of sourcing; I hope to work with you to improve it. I noticed that this would only be your second GA, so I want to offer whatever support I can! Please ping me here or on my talk page as necessary! Best, ~
Pbritti (
talk) 19:42, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
The following comments are from my initial read of the article and are by no means comprehensive. Some comments are more directly related to the GA criteria than others, but each will pertain to an improve I believe should be made to the article. More in-depth reviewing will follow. ~ Pbritti ( talk) 19:43, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
Red Riverin the lead. A comma should precede
Citizens Creekin the same sentence.
Berkeley, Californiaand
Castro Valley, Californiain the first paragraph of the biography section
Tademy bagged a degree in psychologyis too informal (and can mean contradictory things, as I've heard bagged used in a variety of ways)
In 1992, Sheshould not be capitalized
non fiction novelis a contradictory statement. Do you mean historical fiction? Additionally, non-fiction takes a hyphen or can be spelt as nonfiction.
According to her, SheAgain, s shouldn't be capitalized
Overall initial impression: There are some substantial issues. The most pressing is that I think that depth of coverage present in this article doesn't adequately cover the subject according to GA criteria standards. Additionally, there are some fairly substantial MOS issues; I'm prone to typos and I understand how frustrating they can be, so please bear with me as we work together to resolve them. In general, I think we could make a GA here, but we need to fairly substantially expand the article. ~ Pbritti ( talk) 20:08, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
The following is a list of content expansions required for this article to attain GA status through comprehensive coverage. I must admit that the purpose of this list is to indicate that this article is unlikely to pass as a GA at this time but that it can absolutely stand at GAN again. If you believe that you can accomplish the expansion by the end of this week (let's say 00:00 on 21 April for the sake of establishing a deadline), then please make that effort and I'll perform a review then.
non-fiction novel) that does not appear in the source that is cited at the end of the sentence. There are a couple reviews of the book referenced, but these are mostly quotes with limited encyclopedic value to Tademy, containing details more relevant to the article on the book itself. The literary impact of the book is not addressed. Given that she has written other books, it's unusual that these are not more thoroughly mentioned. This section should be expanded to about double its size with new content. Manual of Style issues are fairly prevalent in this section.
Please ping me if you feel you can accomplish all this by Sunday. Best, ~ Pbritti ( talk) 17:39, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Nominator: SafariScribe ( talk · contribs) 17:20, 5 March 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Pbritti ( talk · contribs) 19:42, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I'm
Pbritti, an editor with a content background of primarily Christianity and architectural subjects.
SafariScribe, your article looks promising considering the breadth of sourcing; I hope to work with you to improve it. I noticed that this would only be your second GA, so I want to offer whatever support I can! Please ping me here or on my talk page as necessary! Best, ~
Pbritti (
talk) 19:42, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
The following comments are from my initial read of the article and are by no means comprehensive. Some comments are more directly related to the GA criteria than others, but each will pertain to an improve I believe should be made to the article. More in-depth reviewing will follow. ~ Pbritti ( talk) 19:43, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
Red Riverin the lead. A comma should precede
Citizens Creekin the same sentence.
Berkeley, Californiaand
Castro Valley, Californiain the first paragraph of the biography section
Tademy bagged a degree in psychologyis too informal (and can mean contradictory things, as I've heard bagged used in a variety of ways)
In 1992, Sheshould not be capitalized
non fiction novelis a contradictory statement. Do you mean historical fiction? Additionally, non-fiction takes a hyphen or can be spelt as nonfiction.
According to her, SheAgain, s shouldn't be capitalized
Overall initial impression: There are some substantial issues. The most pressing is that I think that depth of coverage present in this article doesn't adequately cover the subject according to GA criteria standards. Additionally, there are some fairly substantial MOS issues; I'm prone to typos and I understand how frustrating they can be, so please bear with me as we work together to resolve them. In general, I think we could make a GA here, but we need to fairly substantially expand the article. ~ Pbritti ( talk) 20:08, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
The following is a list of content expansions required for this article to attain GA status through comprehensive coverage. I must admit that the purpose of this list is to indicate that this article is unlikely to pass as a GA at this time but that it can absolutely stand at GAN again. If you believe that you can accomplish the expansion by the end of this week (let's say 00:00 on 21 April for the sake of establishing a deadline), then please make that effort and I'll perform a review then.
non-fiction novel) that does not appear in the source that is cited at the end of the sentence. There are a couple reviews of the book referenced, but these are mostly quotes with limited encyclopedic value to Tademy, containing details more relevant to the article on the book itself. The literary impact of the book is not addressed. Given that she has written other books, it's unusual that these are not more thoroughly mentioned. This section should be expanded to about double its size with new content. Manual of Style issues are fairly prevalent in this section.
Please ping me if you feel you can accomplish all this by Sunday. Best, ~ Pbritti ( talk) 17:39, 16 April 2024 (UTC)