The release info should come directly after the liberties sentence, plus move the German language versions info to being part of the opening sentence instead
The release sentence should begin with "The German versions were released..." then following the rest, plus add the US info here instead
Done. I began the sentence as "Odeon Records released the German version..." to avoid passive voicing. Let me know if this looks O.K. Tkbrett (✉)13:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)reply
The commercial performance info is out of order; this should be directly after the recording info of the third para for both countries
Remove the sub section because that is redundant when all positions are weekly; mention in the table captions that they are for weekly chart performance of the songs
Thanks for the taking the time to go through this so thoroughly. I only have one FA under my belt and its in something completely different, so I appreciate your help here. I have gone through and made most of the changes you suggested. See my comments above. Cheers. Tkbrett (✉)13:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)reply
Tkbrett✓Pass now, you did misunderstand my comment about the chart table so I fixed that for you and I also edited the lead after the last para stood out as too short. --
K. Peake18:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)reply
The release info should come directly after the liberties sentence, plus move the German language versions info to being part of the opening sentence instead
The release sentence should begin with "The German versions were released..." then following the rest, plus add the US info here instead
Done. I began the sentence as "Odeon Records released the German version..." to avoid passive voicing. Let me know if this looks O.K. Tkbrett (✉)13:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)reply
The commercial performance info is out of order; this should be directly after the recording info of the third para for both countries
Remove the sub section because that is redundant when all positions are weekly; mention in the table captions that they are for weekly chart performance of the songs
Thanks for the taking the time to go through this so thoroughly. I only have one FA under my belt and its in something completely different, so I appreciate your help here. I have gone through and made most of the changes you suggested. See my comments above. Cheers. Tkbrett (✉)13:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)reply
Tkbrett✓Pass now, you did misunderstand my comment about the chart table so I fixed that for you and I also edited the lead after the last para stood out as too short. --
K. Peake18:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)reply