There were some instances of poor language. I gave the article a copy-edit, and I believe it is better now. The main problem is with the layout, however. The sections and paragraphs are generally far too short, which violates
Wikipedia:Layout#Body sections and makes the article choppy to read.
The biggest problem with the article is with the lower part, and the heavy reliance on Anunobi. This book is not from an academic press or an academic author. The text subsequently bears witness to this, in the sense that the language is unencyclopaedic and non-NPOV; it seems to be praising and extolling the culture rather than giving a neutral description. There ought to be reliable academic sources on the subject.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Mostly , yes, though certain sections like Art and Economy could certainly be expanded.
Though no requirement, the article would benefit enormously from a more detailed map, perhaps something like the one in
Benin Empire.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Particularly the issue with
WP:RS is serious, and will be hard to fix. Still, I will put the article on hold and check back in a week to see what has been done.
I see that a substantial amount of work has been done on the article since I reviewed it, and I believe it now qualifies for GA status.
Lampman (
talk)
19:22, 22 April 2010 (UTC)reply
There were some instances of poor language. I gave the article a copy-edit, and I believe it is better now. The main problem is with the layout, however. The sections and paragraphs are generally far too short, which violates
Wikipedia:Layout#Body sections and makes the article choppy to read.
The biggest problem with the article is with the lower part, and the heavy reliance on Anunobi. This book is not from an academic press or an academic author. The text subsequently bears witness to this, in the sense that the language is unencyclopaedic and non-NPOV; it seems to be praising and extolling the culture rather than giving a neutral description. There ought to be reliable academic sources on the subject.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Mostly , yes, though certain sections like Art and Economy could certainly be expanded.
Though no requirement, the article would benefit enormously from a more detailed map, perhaps something like the one in
Benin Empire.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Particularly the issue with
WP:RS is serious, and will be hard to fix. Still, I will put the article on hold and check back in a week to see what has been done.
I see that a substantial amount of work has been done on the article since I reviewed it, and I believe it now qualifies for GA status.
Lampman (
talk)
19:22, 22 April 2010 (UTC)reply