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Reviewer: Moazfargal ( talk · contribs) 19:54, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Hi Davest3r08! I'll be reviewing this one. —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 19:54, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
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You cite
this source in the "Killing" section. The source says that police arrived at the scene at 11:35, which is inconsistent with the attack starting at 11:38 as the secton currently states. You cite
this other source later in the article that says that the attack started 11:30 and that police arrived 11:38. Kindly fix this confusion. —M3ATH (
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22:46, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Verifiability problem solved. Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 00:09, 27 November 2023 (UTC)
I'll place a few suggestions for improving the article prose below. Kindly strike out those you act on, or comment if you feel differently. —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 22:46, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 00:07, 27 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:53, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:54, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:35, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:34, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:51, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
As is customary practice, I will place the review on hold for seven days until the aforementioned issues are resolved. Davest3r08, if you finish this in less than seven days, notify me here (and ping!) or on my talk page. After these issues are fixed, I will invite a more experienced reviewer (this is my first review) to chip in with their thoughts. I'll also need their help with checking the conformity with the relevant policies of the image used and checking for copyvio, as I am inexperienced in these areas. —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 22:55, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Davest3r08, sorry for the delay. I'll be checking the article in a moment. —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 16:33, 1 December 2023 (UTC)
@ Moazfargal Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 17:19, 1 December 2023 (UTC)
Davest3r08, it seems there is no issue regarding copyright and the images, as far as I can understand from what I've read. Since I do not want to delay this review further, I'm going to go ahead and pass this nomination. Congrats! —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 16:26, 3 December 2023 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Moazfargal ( talk · contribs) 19:54, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Hi Davest3r08! I'll be reviewing this one. —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 19:54, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
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You cite
this source in the "Killing" section. The source says that police arrived at the scene at 11:35, which is inconsistent with the attack starting at 11:38 as the secton currently states. You cite
this other source later in the article that says that the attack started 11:30 and that police arrived 11:38. Kindly fix this confusion. —M3ATH (
Moazfargal ·
Talk)
22:46, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Verifiability problem solved. Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 00:09, 27 November 2023 (UTC)
I'll place a few suggestions for improving the article prose below. Kindly strike out those you act on, or comment if you feel differently. —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 22:46, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 00:07, 27 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:53, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:54, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:35, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:34, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 23:51, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
As is customary practice, I will place the review on hold for seven days until the aforementioned issues are resolved. Davest3r08, if you finish this in less than seven days, notify me here (and ping!) or on my talk page. After these issues are fixed, I will invite a more experienced reviewer (this is my first review) to chip in with their thoughts. I'll also need their help with checking the conformity with the relevant policies of the image used and checking for copyvio, as I am inexperienced in these areas. —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 22:55, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Davest3r08, sorry for the delay. I'll be checking the article in a moment. —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 16:33, 1 December 2023 (UTC)
@ Moazfargal Done Davest3r08 >:) ( talk) 17:19, 1 December 2023 (UTC)
Davest3r08, it seems there is no issue regarding copyright and the images, as far as I can understand from what I've read. Since I do not want to delay this review further, I'm going to go ahead and pass this nomination. Congrats! —M3ATH ( Moazfargal · Talk) 16:26, 3 December 2023 (UTC)