"...wrote the song for The Animals, but lead singer Eric Burdon turned it down." Think it would be better if you were to put "the band's lead singer" here.
"The result was "Kicks," a song originally offered to the Animals, but Eric Burdon turned it down." Consider rewording to "a song originally offered to the Animals, but turned down by lead singer Eric Burdon".
"Within two months of its release, the single sold 500,000 copies." Should probably say "had sold"
"causing a perception by members of the burgeoning youth counterculture" Don't like "causing a perception" here.
Very good article, shouldn't be too much work to get up to standard.
Cavie78 (
talk) 22:52, 14 October 2009 (UTC)reply
All issues addressed, I believe. Regarding the 1982 live single tracklisting, I learned of the single's apparent existence by viewing the Singles Discography at
Paul Revere's official site, but as I can find no other verifiable sources, I removed both references to the single.
Gongshow⊕ 04:15, 15 October 2009 (UTC)reply
I've passed the article, good work!
Cavie78 (
talk) 00:05, 16 October 2009 (UTC)reply
Great! Thanks for the kind words, for taking the time to review the article, and for the suggestions.
Gongshow⊕ 01:40, 16 October 2009 (UTC)reply
"...wrote the song for The Animals, but lead singer Eric Burdon turned it down." Think it would be better if you were to put "the band's lead singer" here.
"The result was "Kicks," a song originally offered to the Animals, but Eric Burdon turned it down." Consider rewording to "a song originally offered to the Animals, but turned down by lead singer Eric Burdon".
"Within two months of its release, the single sold 500,000 copies." Should probably say "had sold"
"causing a perception by members of the burgeoning youth counterculture" Don't like "causing a perception" here.
Very good article, shouldn't be too much work to get up to standard.
Cavie78 (
talk) 22:52, 14 October 2009 (UTC)reply
All issues addressed, I believe. Regarding the 1982 live single tracklisting, I learned of the single's apparent existence by viewing the Singles Discography at
Paul Revere's official site, but as I can find no other verifiable sources, I removed both references to the single.
Gongshow⊕ 04:15, 15 October 2009 (UTC)reply
I've passed the article, good work!
Cavie78 (
talk) 00:05, 16 October 2009 (UTC)reply
Great! Thanks for the kind words, for taking the time to review the article, and for the suggestions.
Gongshow⊕ 01:40, 16 October 2009 (UTC)reply