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Reviewer: Catlemur ( talk · contribs) 13:56, 9 December 2023 (UTC)
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Sounds good. Noorullah ( talk) 20:31, 9 December 2023 (UTC)
Fixed these issues, some of the books do not have applicable ISBNS, and added ISBNS where possible. Noorullah ( talk) 15:58, 13 December 2023 (UTC)
Tried to fix these issues, cut down on the lead a bit, and expanded on background information for the Mamluk Sultanate. Noorullah ( talk) 17:24, 14 December 2023 (UTC)
Fixed some of these issues. Baharpur does not have a wiki link. Fixed Jalaluddin and other consistent spellings across the article. The conflict began in 1290, but it began as a result of Balban's death in 1287 and what happened afterward, so I rewrote it a bit.
We don't know why Qaiqabad became paralyzed, just that he became ill and paralyzed afterward, which is said in the article. The Turkish officers part were not related to the Turkish faction. Turkish officers is referring to just prominent noblemen/soldiers, as the Mamluk dynasty themselves were of Turkic origin. The factions is explained towards the end of the causes because that is when the conflict is beginning to erupt, as the previous paragraphs above were background information. Noorullah ( talk) 20:54, 15 December 2023 (UTC)
Reworded for political and societal change in the aftermath section.
Period of confusion reworded to turmoil.
Further explained why Jalaluddin was granted such positions (due to Nizamuddins assassination).
Added the Shamsuddin was Qaiqabad's son.
There is also dates for major events in the article where known, such as the ascension of Shamsuddin, as well as Jalaluddin's ascension.
Also what do you mean specifically in alphabetic order? By the authors, or by the title of the books? Noorullah ( talk) 17:13, 22 December 2023 (UTC)
Fixed most of the stated issues. Looking on how to improve the dates though, but have worked on that. Also submitted a request at the copy editors guild to try and improve prose. Noorullah ( talk) 09:26, 28 December 2023 (UTC)
Regretfully I have to fail this nomination due to the reasons outlined above (no dates for major events, lack of copyediting compliant to the MOS, Turkish faction mentioned for an explanation of the major factions has been given etc). The article is nevertheless well written and can easily be brought to GA status when the needed copy editing and additional sources are found.-- Catlemur ( talk) 20:00, 8 January 2024 (UTC)
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13:56, 9 December 2023 (UTC)
Sounds good. Noorullah ( talk) 20:31, 9 December 2023 (UTC)
Fixed these issues, some of the books do not have applicable ISBNS, and added ISBNS where possible. Noorullah ( talk) 15:58, 13 December 2023 (UTC)
Tried to fix these issues, cut down on the lead a bit, and expanded on background information for the Mamluk Sultanate. Noorullah ( talk) 17:24, 14 December 2023 (UTC)
Fixed some of these issues. Baharpur does not have a wiki link. Fixed Jalaluddin and other consistent spellings across the article. The conflict began in 1290, but it began as a result of Balban's death in 1287 and what happened afterward, so I rewrote it a bit.
We don't know why Qaiqabad became paralyzed, just that he became ill and paralyzed afterward, which is said in the article. The Turkish officers part were not related to the Turkish faction. Turkish officers is referring to just prominent noblemen/soldiers, as the Mamluk dynasty themselves were of Turkic origin. The factions is explained towards the end of the causes because that is when the conflict is beginning to erupt, as the previous paragraphs above were background information. Noorullah ( talk) 20:54, 15 December 2023 (UTC)
Reworded for political and societal change in the aftermath section.
Period of confusion reworded to turmoil.
Further explained why Jalaluddin was granted such positions (due to Nizamuddins assassination).
Added the Shamsuddin was Qaiqabad's son.
There is also dates for major events in the article where known, such as the ascension of Shamsuddin, as well as Jalaluddin's ascension.
Also what do you mean specifically in alphabetic order? By the authors, or by the title of the books? Noorullah ( talk) 17:13, 22 December 2023 (UTC)
Fixed most of the stated issues. Looking on how to improve the dates though, but have worked on that. Also submitted a request at the copy editors guild to try and improve prose. Noorullah ( talk) 09:26, 28 December 2023 (UTC)
Regretfully I have to fail this nomination due to the reasons outlined above (no dates for major events, lack of copyediting compliant to the MOS, Turkish faction mentioned for an explanation of the major factions has been given etc). The article is nevertheless well written and can easily be brought to GA status when the needed copy editing and additional sources are found.-- Catlemur ( talk) 20:00, 8 January 2024 (UTC)