The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Hi
DiaMali, I will be reviewing. I see you're the main contributor of the page, contributing to over 75 per cent of it. I'll be starting soon.
750h+ (
talk) 02:46, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
This is a nice article, just some prose concerns just need to be adressed;
In the Early life section, it says "Both of his parents are African Americans from the South Side of Chicago;[3] they relocated to Compton in 1984, when they were teenagers, due to his father's affiliation with the Gangster Disciples." Consider splitting into two sentence, like "Both of his parents are African Americans from the South Side of Chicago.[3] When they were teenagers, they relocated to Compton in 1984, due to his father's affiliation with the Gangster Disciples."
750h+ (
talk) 02:56, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Minor grammatical error in the Early life section: "Lamar and his family lived in Section 8 housing, was reliant on welfare and food stamps, and experienced homelessness." was should be changed to were.
750h+ (
talk) 02:59, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Where it says "It done something to me right then and there", change that to "It done [sic] something to me right then and there", since that is what he quoted, but it is grammatically incorrect.
750h+ (
talk) 03:05, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
"Inge played a vital role in his intellectual growth, often critiquing his lexicon and suggesting prompts to strengthen his prose." What is Inge?
750h+ (
talk) 03:08, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Reference number 2, (Young, David (2018). Kendrick Lamar: A Biography. CreateSpace. ISBN 978-1985760677.) which page? you can replace the source if you can't access it.
750h+ (
talk) 03:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
What makes DJBooth, Lakers Nation and HipHopDX reliable sources?
750h+ (
talk) 03:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Source spotcheck completed on three sources--done
750h+ (
talk) 03:34, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I removed the first reference because it felt fan-made and not from a reliable source. DJBooth and HipHopDX are both publications that focus on hip hop music and culture. HipHopDX is actually a subsidiary outlet of
Warner Music Group. I used a DJBooth article to support the "spiritually unsatisfied" remark in the Early life section because the source is a letter the subject wrote to the publication in response to a previous article where they examined how he infuses his religion in his works. I can remove the Lakers Nation reference, though.
DiaMali (
talk) 13:22, 13 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Address my above concerns and I'll be happy to pass the article as
good.
Article is good and exemplifies the basic needs of a good article on Wikipedia. Passing.
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Hi
DiaMali, I will be reviewing. I see you're the main contributor of the page, contributing to over 75 per cent of it. I'll be starting soon.
750h+ (
talk) 02:46, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
This is a nice article, just some prose concerns just need to be adressed;
In the Early life section, it says "Both of his parents are African Americans from the South Side of Chicago;[3] they relocated to Compton in 1984, when they were teenagers, due to his father's affiliation with the Gangster Disciples." Consider splitting into two sentence, like "Both of his parents are African Americans from the South Side of Chicago.[3] When they were teenagers, they relocated to Compton in 1984, due to his father's affiliation with the Gangster Disciples."
750h+ (
talk) 02:56, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Minor grammatical error in the Early life section: "Lamar and his family lived in Section 8 housing, was reliant on welfare and food stamps, and experienced homelessness." was should be changed to were.
750h+ (
talk) 02:59, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Where it says "It done something to me right then and there", change that to "It done [sic] something to me right then and there", since that is what he quoted, but it is grammatically incorrect.
750h+ (
talk) 03:05, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
"Inge played a vital role in his intellectual growth, often critiquing his lexicon and suggesting prompts to strengthen his prose." What is Inge?
750h+ (
talk) 03:08, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Reference number 2, (Young, David (2018). Kendrick Lamar: A Biography. CreateSpace. ISBN 978-1985760677.) which page? you can replace the source if you can't access it.
750h+ (
talk) 03:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
What makes DJBooth, Lakers Nation and HipHopDX reliable sources?
750h+ (
talk) 03:29, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Source spotcheck completed on three sources--done
750h+ (
talk) 03:34, 10 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I removed the first reference because it felt fan-made and not from a reliable source. DJBooth and HipHopDX are both publications that focus on hip hop music and culture. HipHopDX is actually a subsidiary outlet of
Warner Music Group. I used a DJBooth article to support the "spiritually unsatisfied" remark in the Early life section because the source is a letter the subject wrote to the publication in response to a previous article where they examined how he infuses his religion in his works. I can remove the Lakers Nation reference, though.
DiaMali (
talk) 13:22, 13 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Address my above concerns and I'll be happy to pass the article as
good.
Article is good and exemplifies the basic needs of a good article on Wikipedia. Passing.
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.