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Looks like I'll be the one moving forward with this review! --
K. Peake 08:58, 21 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Man it's been so long since I wrote this I almost forgot about it. Guess I gotta get back into Bowie mode for a sec xD – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
"of Bowie's career." → "of the singer's career."
Changed to 'artist's' since he was more than a singer – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
The music sentence should be before the meaning one since this is the correct order, also maybe Buddhist themes should be changed to something else in this sentence when the order is switched for context?
As far as I know there's no written rule saying music info has to come first. Plus, having it this way follows how I structured the comp section, and as is it properly introduces the Buddhist themes, as least imo – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
How about "the 2000 compilation Bowie at the Beeb? – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Yeah that works. --
K. Peake 11:16, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Remove English rock band introduction to Suede and the years of the songs, as this is not notable info for the lead
Done
Remove the same session part because this is implied
Done
"with the entire Toy album" → "with the entire project" and maybe add a sentence about the single release afterwards?
Nah I don't think the latter's necessary. If I recall correctly I don't think I did that for the other Toy tracks released as singles (i.e. CHTAM) – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Background and recording
Img looks good!
Mention the release year of Bowie's self-titled album
Done
"turned it down" → "turned the offer down"
Done
"after Bowie's desire to write" → "after his desire to write" unless this term means "after he had a desire to write..." then reword appropriately (I can't see the original source so do not know this)
Zmbro✓Pass now, the copyvio score for the RS ref was slightly over 40% but this was such a minor violation that I brought the score down by merely changing the introduction to the quote. --
K. Peake 21:22, 26 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the
Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed
Looks like I'll be the one moving forward with this review! --
K. Peake 08:58, 21 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Man it's been so long since I wrote this I almost forgot about it. Guess I gotta get back into Bowie mode for a sec xD – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
"of Bowie's career." → "of the singer's career."
Changed to 'artist's' since he was more than a singer – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
The music sentence should be before the meaning one since this is the correct order, also maybe Buddhist themes should be changed to something else in this sentence when the order is switched for context?
As far as I know there's no written rule saying music info has to come first. Plus, having it this way follows how I structured the comp section, and as is it properly introduces the Buddhist themes, as least imo – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
How about "the 2000 compilation Bowie at the Beeb? – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Yeah that works. --
K. Peake 11:16, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Remove English rock band introduction to Suede and the years of the songs, as this is not notable info for the lead
Done
Remove the same session part because this is implied
Done
"with the entire Toy album" → "with the entire project" and maybe add a sentence about the single release afterwards?
Nah I don't think the latter's necessary. If I recall correctly I don't think I did that for the other Toy tracks released as singles (i.e. CHTAM) – zmbro(
talk) (
cont) 02:07, 23 March 2022 (UTC)reply
Background and recording
Img looks good!
Mention the release year of Bowie's self-titled album
Done
"turned it down" → "turned the offer down"
Done
"after Bowie's desire to write" → "after his desire to write" unless this term means "after he had a desire to write..." then reword appropriately (I can't see the original source so do not know this)
Zmbro✓Pass now, the copyvio score for the RS ref was slightly over 40% but this was such a minor violation that I brought the score down by merely changing the introduction to the quote. --
K. Peake 21:22, 26 March 2022 (UTC)reply