I am little puzzled by the phrsing of Originally, the nickname belonged to music teacher Arvo Vainio, who had a big nose like a comic book character called Junnu. Later the name was given to another Vainio, Juha.. Were the two related, or is Vainio a common surname? Why did Juha acquire the nickname? Done
Changed the last sentence to Later the name was given to Juha because he had the same last name as the teacher. Hopefully that clarifies that the two were not related and that the last name was the reason for Juha acquiring the nickname.
Jafeluv (
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23:08, 3 March 2011 (UTC) Donereply
The prose does not yet meet the criteria of "reasonably well written". I made a few minor copy-edits, but it could do with a comprehensive copy-edit. The
WP:Guild of copyeditors may be able to help. Done
I assume good faith for all off-line and Finnish language sources. article appears to be suitably referenced.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Olli Miettinen was nicknamed "the emperor of Fennia", and several different ceremonies were held in his honour. For example, he was crowned in 1958. The motto of the ceremony was "Work for the unemployed, booze for Miettinen". Is this really necessary? Done
Shortly before quitting teaching, Vainio organized an excursion for the pupils. What was special about this? Why is it mentioned? Done
Added "to express his gratitude of the time he had had with them". The point of that sentence is to show that Vainio had enjoyed his time as a teacher, although he never returned to the profession.
Jafeluv (
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08:50, 4 March 2011 (UTC)reply
I am little puzzled by the phrsing of Originally, the nickname belonged to music teacher Arvo Vainio, who had a big nose like a comic book character called Junnu. Later the name was given to another Vainio, Juha.. Were the two related, or is Vainio a common surname? Why did Juha acquire the nickname? Done
Changed the last sentence to Later the name was given to Juha because he had the same last name as the teacher. Hopefully that clarifies that the two were not related and that the last name was the reason for Juha acquiring the nickname.
Jafeluv (
talk)
23:08, 3 March 2011 (UTC) Donereply
The prose does not yet meet the criteria of "reasonably well written". I made a few minor copy-edits, but it could do with a comprehensive copy-edit. The
WP:Guild of copyeditors may be able to help. Done
I assume good faith for all off-line and Finnish language sources. article appears to be suitably referenced.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Olli Miettinen was nicknamed "the emperor of Fennia", and several different ceremonies were held in his honour. For example, he was crowned in 1958. The motto of the ceremony was "Work for the unemployed, booze for Miettinen". Is this really necessary? Done
Shortly before quitting teaching, Vainio organized an excursion for the pupils. What was special about this? Why is it mentioned? Done
Added "to express his gratitude of the time he had had with them". The point of that sentence is to show that Vainio had enjoyed his time as a teacher, although he never returned to the profession.
Jafeluv (
talk)
08:50, 4 March 2011 (UTC)reply