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Reviewer: Sagaciousphil ( talk · contribs) 15:49, 27 April 2014 (UTC)
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"... sleep on, and trained which areas she could not enter. One of these were the areas inhabited by the Chinese cooks, who disliked her."Could this be re-worded as it feels a bit clumsy to me, especially "trained which areas" and the repetition of 'areas' again in the next sentence.
More later - it's a really enjoyable read and hopefully I'm not coming across as nit-picking! SagaciousPhil - Chat 08:46, 28 April 2014 (UTC)
Post war and awards
"... which included a plaque which told of her life story."; could the repetition of 'which' be avoided?
Those are all the queries I have. Images are fine - all PD, captioned and relevant to the article. Although it's not a GA requirement alt captions would be helpful; refs are appropriately used, reliable and in a consistent style; no sign of copy vio problems - I've read through all the online sources; comprehensive coverage in a neutral well written manner without any original research; and the article is stable.
Just the minor points I've raised above to have a look at, please. A truly fascinating and intriguing story - proving a dog can indeed be "a man's best friend". SagaciousPhil - Chat 10:20, 29 April 2014 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Sagaciousphil ( talk · contribs) 15:49, 27 April 2014 (UTC)
Some initial comments:
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Military career
"... sleep on, and trained which areas she could not enter. One of these were the areas inhabited by the Chinese cooks, who disliked her."Could this be re-worded as it feels a bit clumsy to me, especially "trained which areas" and the repetition of 'areas' again in the next sentence.
More later - it's a really enjoyable read and hopefully I'm not coming across as nit-picking! SagaciousPhil - Chat 08:46, 28 April 2014 (UTC)
Post war and awards
"... which included a plaque which told of her life story."; could the repetition of 'which' be avoided?
Those are all the queries I have. Images are fine - all PD, captioned and relevant to the article. Although it's not a GA requirement alt captions would be helpful; refs are appropriately used, reliable and in a consistent style; no sign of copy vio problems - I've read through all the online sources; comprehensive coverage in a neutral well written manner without any original research; and the article is stable.
Just the minor points I've raised above to have a look at, please. A truly fascinating and intriguing story - proving a dog can indeed be "a man's best friend". SagaciousPhil - Chat 10:20, 29 April 2014 (UTC)