"Judas" is a dance song that speaks of a woman in love with a man who betrays her, while simultaneously embodying things that have haunted her in the past, thus representing something that was bad for her – something she could not escape. < I don't know if it's just me but this is difficult to understand possibly because of the ending
The artwork for the single was designed by Gaga in Microsoft Word and features a black background with the word "Judas" written in red capital letters in Impact font and took the picture with her cell phone for texture. < It is a run on sentence will no commas to break it up. The final statement about using her cell phone needs a "she" before took. Try breaking it up a bit.
but in the end < doesn't really fit here does it?
Background
Gaga confirmed "Judas" on Ryan Seacrest's radio show on February 14, 2011 < confirmed Judas? Do you mean it's release as the second single?
Fernando Garibay, one of the producers of Born This Way described the song as about sometimes not choosing the right choice. < is this not redundant since Gaga soon after this creates a major explanation?
On the radio show Last Call with Carson Daly, Gaga explained to the host Carson Daly <isn't it obvious that the host is Carson Daly?
Live performances
monk-like garments, her side. < "her side" doesn't make sense
Short review I know, but I have read the article over and over again for the past 2 hours and can see nothing else to comment on. Great work on the article! Not much to fix here, as soon as you get to them it'll be GA.--
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14:20, 22 June 2011 (UTC)reply
"Judas" is a dance song that speaks of a woman in love with a man who betrays her, while simultaneously embodying things that have haunted her in the past, thus representing something that was bad for her – something she could not escape. < I don't know if it's just me but this is difficult to understand possibly because of the ending
The artwork for the single was designed by Gaga in Microsoft Word and features a black background with the word "Judas" written in red capital letters in Impact font and took the picture with her cell phone for texture. < It is a run on sentence will no commas to break it up. The final statement about using her cell phone needs a "she" before took. Try breaking it up a bit.
but in the end < doesn't really fit here does it?
Background
Gaga confirmed "Judas" on Ryan Seacrest's radio show on February 14, 2011 < confirmed Judas? Do you mean it's release as the second single?
Fernando Garibay, one of the producers of Born This Way described the song as about sometimes not choosing the right choice. < is this not redundant since Gaga soon after this creates a major explanation?
On the radio show Last Call with Carson Daly, Gaga explained to the host Carson Daly <isn't it obvious that the host is Carson Daly?
Live performances
monk-like garments, her side. < "her side" doesn't make sense
Short review I know, but I have read the article over and over again for the past 2 hours and can see nothing else to comment on. Great work on the article! Not much to fix here, as soon as you get to them it'll be GA.--
Blackjacks101 (
talk)
14:20, 22 June 2011 (UTC)reply