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I made a couple small tweaks in the LEAD but otherwise see no issues.
In fact I did some small copy editing throughout.
Feels like the shorter working hours belongs in with his business rather than with his Europe travels. Sources also seem to support some more information in that section.
Can you clarify In the end, Pastoriza developed a diminished Houston Plan; that is, a property tax scheme that still favored owners of improved lots over owners of unimproved lots.
The GA guidelines and supporting explanatory essays don't seem to mind this but I want to note that nearly all of the content of the article is really sourced to Davis. The other sources are really only used for a very small percentage of the overall text. I see no indication that this topic wasn't covered broadly (besides the minor comment above).
Given the length of the article and the early 20th century timeframe can a second picture be found to accompany it? For instance a picture of Houston from Pastoriza's time.
I saw you removed a couple redlinks just in advance of my review. There is absolutely nothing in GA guidelines to suggest that redlinks are prohibited; feel free to add them back in.
No other GA related issues (e.g. copyright, OR)
"Feels like shorter working hours..." I think moving that part would be appropriate.
"Clarify..." Yes, that is too compressed. I will need to re-read the main article and re-write that part of the narrative.
"Nearly all sourced to Davis..." This was a case of this being the superior article on the subject. I linked to some other sources in the "Other reading." One was Pastoriza's own explanation of his tax plan. I had thought that a few of the other articles were opinion pieces. It has been a few years, maybe it's time to read those again.
Good suggestion on the visuals. I will look for a few photos. I should also use the photo for his shabby cabin. That must be in the public domain.cheers,
Oldsanfelipe (
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22:32, 31 May 2018 (UTC)reply
I have addressed your three concerns. I think the last of the three is the most important. If I have succeeded, then the reader will understand how the first Houston Plan met Pastoriza's objects while being popular with the voters, the plaintiffs in the end did not care if the tax system conformed with the state constitution, and the last plan failed to meet Pastoriza's objectives while not conforming to Texas law. Please let me know if I have more work to do. cheers,
Oldsanfelipe (
talk)
12:49, 1 June 2018 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
I made a couple small tweaks in the LEAD but otherwise see no issues.
In fact I did some small copy editing throughout.
Feels like the shorter working hours belongs in with his business rather than with his Europe travels. Sources also seem to support some more information in that section.
Can you clarify In the end, Pastoriza developed a diminished Houston Plan; that is, a property tax scheme that still favored owners of improved lots over owners of unimproved lots.
The GA guidelines and supporting explanatory essays don't seem to mind this but I want to note that nearly all of the content of the article is really sourced to Davis. The other sources are really only used for a very small percentage of the overall text. I see no indication that this topic wasn't covered broadly (besides the minor comment above).
Given the length of the article and the early 20th century timeframe can a second picture be found to accompany it? For instance a picture of Houston from Pastoriza's time.
I saw you removed a couple redlinks just in advance of my review. There is absolutely nothing in GA guidelines to suggest that redlinks are prohibited; feel free to add them back in.
No other GA related issues (e.g. copyright, OR)
"Feels like shorter working hours..." I think moving that part would be appropriate.
"Clarify..." Yes, that is too compressed. I will need to re-read the main article and re-write that part of the narrative.
"Nearly all sourced to Davis..." This was a case of this being the superior article on the subject. I linked to some other sources in the "Other reading." One was Pastoriza's own explanation of his tax plan. I had thought that a few of the other articles were opinion pieces. It has been a few years, maybe it's time to read those again.
Good suggestion on the visuals. I will look for a few photos. I should also use the photo for his shabby cabin. That must be in the public domain.cheers,
Oldsanfelipe (
talk)
22:32, 31 May 2018 (UTC)reply
I have addressed your three concerns. I think the last of the three is the most important. If I have succeeded, then the reader will understand how the first Houston Plan met Pastoriza's objects while being popular with the voters, the plaintiffs in the end did not care if the tax system conformed with the state constitution, and the last plan failed to meet Pastoriza's objectives while not conforming to Texas law. Please let me know if I have more work to do. cheers,
Oldsanfelipe (
talk)
12:49, 1 June 2018 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.