I'll be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:
How do you feel about combining the first two sections (early life and education, marriage and divorce)? They are both relatively short and deal more with his personal life than his career.
"Corzine later admitted that he had also given $15,000 to Carla Katz's brother-in-law
Rocco Riccio, a former state employee who had resigned, after being accused of examining
income tax returns for political purposes. which bargains on behalf of many state employees." - I think part of that second sentence is missing.
"Also in 2000, Corzine denied having paid off African-American ministers, when in fact the foundation controlled by him and his wife had paid one influential black church $25,000." - This seemed to come out of nowhere. Who accused him of that? Can some more background on this particular fact be included?
"Corzine's candidacy for Governor, like his prior run for the U.S. Senate, broke all prior spending records. The combined expenditures for Corzine's run for the Senate and Governorship exceeded $100 million." - these two sentences need to be cited.
"Corzine won his campaign for the post of
Governor of New Jersey with 54% of the vote. Republican nominee
Doug Forrester, a businessman and a former Mayor of
West Windsor Township, in
Mercer County, won 43%. Corzine received 1,224,493 votes to Forrester's 985,235. A total of 80,277 votes, or 3%, were scattered among other candidates. Corzine won 13 of New Jersey's 21 counties:
Atlantic,
Bergen,
Burlington,
Camden,
Cumberland,
Essex,
Gloucester,
Hudson,
Mercer,
Middlesex,
Passaic,
Salem, and
Union. Corzine won the three most populous counties (Bergen, Essex, and Middlesex), five of the top six, and seven of the top nine." - these stats need to be cited.
I'll be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:
How do you feel about combining the first two sections (early life and education, marriage and divorce)? They are both relatively short and deal more with his personal life than his career.
"Corzine later admitted that he had also given $15,000 to Carla Katz's brother-in-law
Rocco Riccio, a former state employee who had resigned, after being accused of examining
income tax returns for political purposes. which bargains on behalf of many state employees." - I think part of that second sentence is missing.
"Also in 2000, Corzine denied having paid off African-American ministers, when in fact the foundation controlled by him and his wife had paid one influential black church $25,000." - This seemed to come out of nowhere. Who accused him of that? Can some more background on this particular fact be included?
"Corzine's candidacy for Governor, like his prior run for the U.S. Senate, broke all prior spending records. The combined expenditures for Corzine's run for the Senate and Governorship exceeded $100 million." - these two sentences need to be cited.
"Corzine won his campaign for the post of
Governor of New Jersey with 54% of the vote. Republican nominee
Doug Forrester, a businessman and a former Mayor of
West Windsor Township, in
Mercer County, won 43%. Corzine received 1,224,493 votes to Forrester's 985,235. A total of 80,277 votes, or 3%, were scattered among other candidates. Corzine won 13 of New Jersey's 21 counties:
Atlantic,
Bergen,
Burlington,
Camden,
Cumberland,
Essex,
Gloucester,
Hudson,
Mercer,
Middlesex,
Passaic,
Salem, and
Union. Corzine won the three most populous counties (Bergen, Essex, and Middlesex), five of the top six, and seven of the top nine." - these stats need to be cited.