I see no major problems, this is essentially a list of nitpicks.
There are quite a few instances of the "noun plus -ing" construction. See
User:Tony1/Noun plus -ing for a guide to what that is and what can be done about it.
Is the rdfc1992 page a mirror of the now-defunct Rushden & Diamonds club website? If so, this should be indicated. If not, is it a reliable source? Similarly,
http://www.bfcsa.co.uk/0304/articles/release_040122.htm doesn't look like it was produced by the Barnet FC Supporters' Association.
The
RDFC1992 homepage states "This site is an archive for content that was published on the Official Rushden & Diamonds Football Club website". The Barnet page states the text is taken from a Nationwide Conference Press Release. Have made note of these in the publisher parameters.
Mattythewhite (
talk)
17:41, 24 April 2013 (UTC)reply
The references to "Grimsby Mad" could do with being replaced by something more reliable.
I've use this reference as I couldn't find any other source providing complete statistics (all FA Cup, FA Trophy and Conference League Cup stats) for these seasons. I'll look for an alternative if you feel it needs to be replaced in order to pass the article.
Mattythewhite (
talk)
17:41, 24 April 2013 (UTC)reply
Perhaps mention how many divisions he dropped by moving from Rushden to Stamford?
”which Aldershot lost 3–0 in a penalty shoot-out after a 1–1 after extra time.” - there's a word missing somewhere here, plus it could do with rewording to avoid repetition of “after”.
I see no major problems, this is essentially a list of nitpicks.
There are quite a few instances of the "noun plus -ing" construction. See
User:Tony1/Noun plus -ing for a guide to what that is and what can be done about it.
Is the rdfc1992 page a mirror of the now-defunct Rushden & Diamonds club website? If so, this should be indicated. If not, is it a reliable source? Similarly,
http://www.bfcsa.co.uk/0304/articles/release_040122.htm doesn't look like it was produced by the Barnet FC Supporters' Association.
The
RDFC1992 homepage states "This site is an archive for content that was published on the Official Rushden & Diamonds Football Club website". The Barnet page states the text is taken from a Nationwide Conference Press Release. Have made note of these in the publisher parameters.
Mattythewhite (
talk)
17:41, 24 April 2013 (UTC)reply
The references to "Grimsby Mad" could do with being replaced by something more reliable.
I've use this reference as I couldn't find any other source providing complete statistics (all FA Cup, FA Trophy and Conference League Cup stats) for these seasons. I'll look for an alternative if you feel it needs to be replaced in order to pass the article.
Mattythewhite (
talk)
17:41, 24 April 2013 (UTC)reply
Perhaps mention how many divisions he dropped by moving from Rushden to Stamford?
”which Aldershot lost 3–0 in a penalty shoot-out after a 1–1 after extra time.” - there's a word missing somewhere here, plus it could do with rewording to avoid repetition of “after”.