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It is reasonably well written:
Dup links, dab links and external links show no problems.
Copyvio tool
returns a yellow result, likely just based on similar phraseology. Could the wording be rearranged a bit on some similar terms? ie., "when the German battleships Scharnhorst and Gneisenau made a high–speed dash from Brest to reach safety in German ports."; "hecketts led a section of four Spitfires against eight Bf 109s and destroyed three of them. The other three New Zealand pilots in the section each destroyed one and Checketts damaged one of the two remaining 109s"
There's a strong reliance on the Orange ref, which which a third-party source, risks favoring the article toward one historian's viewpoint. I'd recommend it needs some additional sources. Don't need to remove any Orange refs, just that a few should be backed up with other books/views.
Could a few details be cross referenced in other sources, in order to prevent over-reliance on one? Seeing
[1][2] and
[3], which adds some detail about his perspective on the war which would be helpful addition.
Not Yet A few suggestions to place the detail here in context.
"although he had damaged others in the previous year he had never put in claims for them." -- Was this something he individually claimed or that historians later cite to him?
This is what his biographer states although from what I can make out from the notes, that is based on conversations with Checketts himself.
Zawed (
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09:08, 20 January 2019 (UTC)reply
Any chance the DFC or DSO citations can be quoted?
Any number of missions or flight hours tracked anywhere?
There is one mention already in relation to his wartime service as a wing commander, added another covering the period late 1941 up to August 1942.
Zawed (
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09:08, 20 January 2019 (UTC)reply
" "university of flying",[65] and when he graduated in August 1945 it was with a "Distinguished Pass."[66]" -- note punctuation inside and outside of quotes. Can be one or the other, just needs to be consistent through the entire article.
It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate:
One imaged tagged PD as appropriate. Is there a chance for more supporting images? Thinking aircraft he flew or a map of where he was shot down might be appropriate. Also thinking the engine preserved in the museum, if a photo is readily available.
Have you considered a table for victories, for reference? I did a few in my ace articles
John F. Bolt and
George Andrew Davis Jr. thought certainly not a requirement.
Thanks for looking at this
Ed!, I have made a start on your comments. I am tracking down some other sources to supplement Orange, but that may take a few days. Cheers,
Zawed (
talk)
08:08, 14 January 2019 (UTC)reply
GA review (see
here for criteria) (see
here for this contributor's history of GA reviews)
It is reasonably well written:
Dup links, dab links and external links show no problems.
Copyvio tool
returns a yellow result, likely just based on similar phraseology. Could the wording be rearranged a bit on some similar terms? ie., "when the German battleships Scharnhorst and Gneisenau made a high–speed dash from Brest to reach safety in German ports."; "hecketts led a section of four Spitfires against eight Bf 109s and destroyed three of them. The other three New Zealand pilots in the section each destroyed one and Checketts damaged one of the two remaining 109s"
There's a strong reliance on the Orange ref, which which a third-party source, risks favoring the article toward one historian's viewpoint. I'd recommend it needs some additional sources. Don't need to remove any Orange refs, just that a few should be backed up with other books/views.
Could a few details be cross referenced in other sources, in order to prevent over-reliance on one? Seeing
[1][2] and
[3], which adds some detail about his perspective on the war which would be helpful addition.
Not Yet A few suggestions to place the detail here in context.
"although he had damaged others in the previous year he had never put in claims for them." -- Was this something he individually claimed or that historians later cite to him?
This is what his biographer states although from what I can make out from the notes, that is based on conversations with Checketts himself.
Zawed (
talk)
09:08, 20 January 2019 (UTC)reply
Any chance the DFC or DSO citations can be quoted?
Any number of missions or flight hours tracked anywhere?
There is one mention already in relation to his wartime service as a wing commander, added another covering the period late 1941 up to August 1942.
Zawed (
talk)
09:08, 20 January 2019 (UTC)reply
" "university of flying",[65] and when he graduated in August 1945 it was with a "Distinguished Pass."[66]" -- note punctuation inside and outside of quotes. Can be one or the other, just needs to be consistent through the entire article.
It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate:
One imaged tagged PD as appropriate. Is there a chance for more supporting images? Thinking aircraft he flew or a map of where he was shot down might be appropriate. Also thinking the engine preserved in the museum, if a photo is readily available.
Have you considered a table for victories, for reference? I did a few in my ace articles
John F. Bolt and
George Andrew Davis Jr. thought certainly not a requirement.
Thanks for looking at this
Ed!, I have made a start on your comments. I am tracking down some other sources to supplement Orange, but that may take a few days. Cheers,
Zawed (
talk)
08:08, 14 January 2019 (UTC)reply