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Having no prior knowledge of the subject matter, I find the lead section a bit confusing.
As the commander of No. 24 Squadron, based at Rabaul, New Britain - This should be explained a bit more. Where is New Britain, what is the 24. Squadron and what was its task?
After being directed to help repel the invading Japanese fleet with his one serviceable bomber - Which invading Japanese fleet? The war situation should be explained more. Also, was he flying the bomber was it just under his command? Did he accomplish the mission or did he refuse the orders?
he became famous in the annals of Air Force history - What are the "annals of Air Force history" and what does it mean? It's unclear at least to me as a non-native English speaker. Wouldn't just "he became famous" be sufficient?
Why is his response to the orders notable? What is so special about it?
I didn't read the rest of the article yet, but I think the lead needs more work. I hope this was helpful. Offliner ( talk) 00:04, 15 July 2009 (UTC)
The info box has the modern RAAF flag. It should be the one that was flown while he was in the air force. Ozdaren ( talk) 08:08, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
As a Dutch native, this looks wrong (although I know nothing of the subject). Oude Reimerink is a Dutch last name, and I assume that the lady's first name was simply Josephine. So her name would be Josephine Oude Reimerink. "Oude" means "old", and this kind of composite surname is rather common in the Eastern parts of the country HStreek ( talk) 13:46, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
"Morituri vos salutamus", the noted phrase, isn't quite what Roman gladiators would say to the Emperor before combat: the persons addressed are plural (vos). Gladiators would (naturally) address the Emperor in the singular (te). While the plural might be appropriate for a message to headquarters staff, it's not correct to say it was "the legendary phrase". It's likely better to say it was "derived from" the legendary phrase, or was "a variant of" the phrase. -- Piledhigheranddeeper ( talk) 16:37, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
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Having no prior knowledge of the subject matter, I find the lead section a bit confusing.
As the commander of No. 24 Squadron, based at Rabaul, New Britain - This should be explained a bit more. Where is New Britain, what is the 24. Squadron and what was its task?
After being directed to help repel the invading Japanese fleet with his one serviceable bomber - Which invading Japanese fleet? The war situation should be explained more. Also, was he flying the bomber was it just under his command? Did he accomplish the mission or did he refuse the orders?
he became famous in the annals of Air Force history - What are the "annals of Air Force history" and what does it mean? It's unclear at least to me as a non-native English speaker. Wouldn't just "he became famous" be sufficient?
Why is his response to the orders notable? What is so special about it?
I didn't read the rest of the article yet, but I think the lead needs more work. I hope this was helpful. Offliner ( talk) 00:04, 15 July 2009 (UTC)
The info box has the modern RAAF flag. It should be the one that was flown while he was in the air force. Ozdaren ( talk) 08:08, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
As a Dutch native, this looks wrong (although I know nothing of the subject). Oude Reimerink is a Dutch last name, and I assume that the lady's first name was simply Josephine. So her name would be Josephine Oude Reimerink. "Oude" means "old", and this kind of composite surname is rather common in the Eastern parts of the country HStreek ( talk) 13:46, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
"Morituri vos salutamus", the noted phrase, isn't quite what Roman gladiators would say to the Emperor before combat: the persons addressed are plural (vos). Gladiators would (naturally) address the Emperor in the singular (te). While the plural might be appropriate for a message to headquarters staff, it's not correct to say it was "the legendary phrase". It's likely better to say it was "derived from" the legendary phrase, or was "a variant of" the phrase. -- Piledhigheranddeeper ( talk) 16:37, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
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