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Reviewer: Xtzou ( Talk) 19:58, 8 April 2010 (UTC)
My main complaint about the article is that it seems to be a list of his promotions without explaining what he did in each of these positions.
The intro promises a lot: "An experienced engineer, Capper was involved in numerous building projects during his years in India and pioneered the development of airships in Britain. He helped establish and command several military training establishments in Britain, was involved in large-scale military planning during 1918 and 1919 and was pivotal in establishing the tank as an important feature of the British Army. Although Capper was sometimes described as pompous and possessing poor communication skills, earning the nickname Stone Age for his attitude towards the ideas of junior officers in the Royal Tank Corps, he nevertheless played a vital role in the development and deployment of armoured vehicles in the British Army."
But the article doesn't elaborate on these achievements. For example, it sounds like he did interesting things in India, but the reader never learns anything specific.
Xtzou ( Talk) 19:58, 8 April 2010 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Congratulations!
Xtzou ( Talk) 18:09, 9 April 2010 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Xtzou ( Talk) 19:58, 8 April 2010 (UTC)
My main complaint about the article is that it seems to be a list of his promotions without explaining what he did in each of these positions.
The intro promises a lot: "An experienced engineer, Capper was involved in numerous building projects during his years in India and pioneered the development of airships in Britain. He helped establish and command several military training establishments in Britain, was involved in large-scale military planning during 1918 and 1919 and was pivotal in establishing the tank as an important feature of the British Army. Although Capper was sometimes described as pompous and possessing poor communication skills, earning the nickname Stone Age for his attitude towards the ideas of junior officers in the Royal Tank Corps, he nevertheless played a vital role in the development and deployment of armoured vehicles in the British Army."
But the article doesn't elaborate on these achievements. For example, it sounds like he did interesting things in India, but the reader never learns anything specific.
Xtzou ( Talk) 19:58, 8 April 2010 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Congratulations!
Xtzou ( Talk) 18:09, 9 April 2010 (UTC)