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Reviewer: Bait30 ( talk · contribs) 21:47, 30 October 2020 (UTC) reply

I'll take a look at this. My review should be complete sometime within the next 7 days.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 21:47, 30 October 2020 (UTC) reply

Lead

  • lead looks good.

Early years

  • "The elder Burrow, whose last coaching position was defensive coordinator for the Ohio Bobcats for more than a decade, retired after the 2018 season in part to be able to see all of Joe's games in his final college season.": personally, this sentence might a little bit out of scope. (3b)
  • "One day while visiting the office": unclear what "the office" is referring to. (1a)
  • "the seven year old had a future": might be better to say "the seven year old Burrow had a future" (1a)
  • "Jimmy Burrow": try to keep it consistent. either Jim Burrow or Jimmy Burrow, but not both. (1a)

College career

  • looks good

Professional career

  • "Burrow was one of 58 players invited to the draft, which was held virtually due to social distancing regulations arising from the COVID-19 pandemic, where he was selected first overall by the Cincinnati Bengals." The "which was held virtually...pandemic" part isn't necessary in my opinion. And I would specify which draft. (1a/3b)
  • "He became the first rookie n NFL history": fix minor typo (1a)
  • Statistics table: instead of making "Career" an external link, just cite it in the same style as the College statistics table. In other words, make it a proper citation. (2b)

Joe played in 17 games in 2021, not 16. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Muthchri ( talkcontribs) 16:55, 17 June 2022 (UTC) reply

Personal life

  • it's fine

Images

  • All images are related with appropriate copyright tags.

 Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 23:29, 30 October 2020 (UTC) reply

References

The reference numbers come from this version of the article.

Ok, my review is done. I'll place this on hold for the standard 7 days.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 04:40, 31 October 2020 (UTC) reply

Your changes look good. The article passes all the criteria now.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 06:13, 1 November 2020 (UTC) reply
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

Article ( | visual edit | history) · Article talk ( | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Bait30 ( talk · contribs) 21:47, 30 October 2020 (UTC) reply

I'll take a look at this. My review should be complete sometime within the next 7 days.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 21:47, 30 October 2020 (UTC) reply

Lead

  • lead looks good.

Early years

  • "The elder Burrow, whose last coaching position was defensive coordinator for the Ohio Bobcats for more than a decade, retired after the 2018 season in part to be able to see all of Joe's games in his final college season.": personally, this sentence might a little bit out of scope. (3b)
  • "One day while visiting the office": unclear what "the office" is referring to. (1a)
  • "the seven year old had a future": might be better to say "the seven year old Burrow had a future" (1a)
  • "Jimmy Burrow": try to keep it consistent. either Jim Burrow or Jimmy Burrow, but not both. (1a)

College career

  • looks good

Professional career

  • "Burrow was one of 58 players invited to the draft, which was held virtually due to social distancing regulations arising from the COVID-19 pandemic, where he was selected first overall by the Cincinnati Bengals." The "which was held virtually...pandemic" part isn't necessary in my opinion. And I would specify which draft. (1a/3b)
  • "He became the first rookie n NFL history": fix minor typo (1a)
  • Statistics table: instead of making "Career" an external link, just cite it in the same style as the College statistics table. In other words, make it a proper citation. (2b)

Joe played in 17 games in 2021, not 16. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Muthchri ( talkcontribs) 16:55, 17 June 2022 (UTC) reply

Personal life

  • it's fine

Images

  • All images are related with appropriate copyright tags.

 Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 23:29, 30 October 2020 (UTC) reply

References

The reference numbers come from this version of the article.

Ok, my review is done. I'll place this on hold for the standard 7 days.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 04:40, 31 October 2020 (UTC) reply

Your changes look good. The article passes all the criteria now.  Bait30   Talk 2 me pls? 06:13, 1 November 2020 (UTC) reply

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