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- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (
MoS): 
- The first sentence in the lead was a little confusing to read at first. Perhaps it can be changes to "Job for a Cowboy is an American death metal band that formed in Glendale, Arizona in December 2003." Under 'Formation and Doom (2003–2006)', first paragraph, the sentence that begins with "In 2004, they set up a MySpace page…" all the way to the end of that paragraph needs a good copy-edit; for the most part, those sentences were copied word by word. Part of the second paragraph follows the same pattern. Under 'Genesis (2007–present)', the sentence "In March 2007, Job for a Cowboy completed work on their full-length debut, entitled Genesis" reads a little odd. Perhaps it can be changed to "In March 2007, Job for a Cowboy completed their full-length debut album, Genesis."
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Doing...
Canniba
loki
20:35, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
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- I completely forgot this, but the lead does not comply with
WP:LEAD.
Diverse
Mentality
01:17, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
Done I changed the sentences, removed the {{Fact}} tag, and updated the lead.
Canniba
loki
03:22, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- The first sentence in the lead was a little confusing to read at first. Perhaps it can be changes to "Job for a Cowboy is an American death metal band that formed in Glendale, Arizona in December 2003." Under 'Formation and Doom (2003–2006)', first paragraph, the sentence that begins with "In 2004, they set up a MySpace page…" all the way to the end of that paragraph needs a good copy-edit; for the most part, those sentences were copied word by word. Part of the second paragraph follows the same pattern. Under 'Genesis (2007–present)', the sentence "In March 2007, Job for a Cowboy completed work on their full-length debut, entitled Genesis" reads a little odd. Perhaps it can be changed to "In March 2007, Job for a Cowboy completed their full-length debut album, Genesis."
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to
reliable sources):
c (
OR):
- The articles says the band was formed in 2003, but the source to
Allmusic says it was formed in 2002. Just for clarification, which is it? Under 'Genesis (2007–present)', there's a {{fact}} tag. That information has to be cited or removed.
- I'm not using the source of Allmusic. Metal Blade Records says that the band was formed in December 2003. Maybe Allmusic writer has commited an error. Just for clarification, I'm using the source of Metal Blade. Canniba loki 20:35, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
- The articles says the band was formed in 2003, but the source to
Allmusic says it was formed in 2002. Just for clarification, which is it? Under 'Genesis (2007–present)', there's a {{fact}} tag. That information has to be cited or removed.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- I am placing the article on hold for seven days to allow for the above concerns to be addressed. Diverse Mentality 19:38, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
- I'm still not too sure with the article. I'm going to have to ask for a second opinion. Diverse Mentality 08:10, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
Hi. I did a minor copy-edit on the article. For me the article still has some fairly obvious 1a issues. I'd also like to see more idea about why people keep leaving the band. I don't think saying that "---- left the band", without providing rationale is acceptable for a Wikipedia GA. Apart from that, I can't see any major issues. Does that held, DiverseMentality? Apterygial talk stalk insane idea 08:30, 3 December 2008 (UTC) Actually, the lead could be a little longer. Apterygial talk stalk insane idea 08:34, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, that was my concern with the lead; it seems a bit short, even for the a short article like this one. I hadn't thought about reasons of why members of the band were leaving, that would help the article as well.
Diverse
Mentality
16:36, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- If you want to expand the lead, add some stuff from the "Formation and Doom (2003–2006)" section. The lead has basically nothing from that at the moment. I think it would also held if you could give a brief description of their sound (influences, etc.) That should then be mentioned in the body in addition. That should get the lead to a decent length.
Apterygial
talk
stalk
insane idea
23:42, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- This properly expanded, now I will ask someone to make a copy-edit.
Canniba
loki
01:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- I don't mean to butt in on the GA review, DM, but I'm interested in why Doom is referred to as and EP in the main body, but an album in the lead. This needs to be consistent. I think it's probably an EP. Apterygial talk stalk insane idea 02:00, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- This properly expanded, now I will ask someone to make a copy-edit.
Canniba
loki
01:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- If you want to expand the lead, add some stuff from the "Formation and Doom (2003–2006)" section. The lead has basically nothing from that at the moment. I think it would also held if you could give a brief description of their sound (influences, etc.) That should then be mentioned in the body in addition. That should get the lead to a decent length.
Apterygial
talk
stalk
insane idea
23:42, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
No worries, Apterygial. Everything seems to be looking good, except for the last sentence under 'Genesis (2007–present)'. Has the tour began yet? It's pretty ambiguous. Diverse Mentality 04:18, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- I didn't understand. Following the release of Genesis, they began the tour. Canniba loki 04:41, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
I was referring to this sentence: "Job for a Cowboy will embark on a U.S. headlining tour in November and December 2008, with support acts Hate Eternal, and All Shall Perish." Diverse Mentality 04:45, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- I would like to remove it, because it is not a great tour and I don't have updated information about.
Canniba
loki
05:02, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- It's fine. I updated it. Apterygial talk stalk insane idea 05:06, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
All concerns have been addressed, I'm passing the article. Good work! Diverse Mentality 18:51, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks, DiverseMentality and Apterygial. =) Canniba loki 19:57, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
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- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (
MoS):
- The first sentence in the lead was a little confusing to read at first. Perhaps it can be changes to "Job for a Cowboy is an American death metal band that formed in Glendale, Arizona in December 2003." Under 'Formation and Doom (2003–2006)', first paragraph, the sentence that begins with "In 2004, they set up a MySpace page…" all the way to the end of that paragraph needs a good copy-edit; for the most part, those sentences were copied word by word. Part of the second paragraph follows the same pattern. Under 'Genesis (2007–present)', the sentence "In March 2007, Job for a Cowboy completed work on their full-length debut, entitled Genesis" reads a little odd. Perhaps it can be changed to "In March 2007, Job for a Cowboy completed their full-length debut album, Genesis."
-
Doing...
Canniba
loki
20:35, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
-
- I completely forgot this, but the lead does not comply with
WP:LEAD.
Diverse
Mentality
01:17, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- Done I changed the sentences, removed the {{Fact}} tag, and updated the lead.
Canniba
loki
03:22, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- The first sentence in the lead was a little confusing to read at first. Perhaps it can be changes to "Job for a Cowboy is an American death metal band that formed in Glendale, Arizona in December 2003." Under 'Formation and Doom (2003–2006)', first paragraph, the sentence that begins with "In 2004, they set up a MySpace page…" all the way to the end of that paragraph needs a good copy-edit; for the most part, those sentences were copied word by word. Part of the second paragraph follows the same pattern. Under 'Genesis (2007–present)', the sentence "In March 2007, Job for a Cowboy completed work on their full-length debut, entitled Genesis" reads a little odd. Perhaps it can be changed to "In March 2007, Job for a Cowboy completed their full-length debut album, Genesis."
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to
reliable sources): c (
OR):
- The articles says the band was formed in 2003, but the source to
Allmusic says it was formed in 2002. Just for clarification, which is it? Under 'Genesis (2007–present)', there's a {{fact}} tag. That information has to be cited or removed.
- I'm not using the source of Allmusic. Metal Blade Records says that the band was formed in December 2003. Maybe Allmusic writer has commited an error. Just for clarification, I'm using the source of Metal Blade. Canniba loki 20:35, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
- The articles says the band was formed in 2003, but the source to
Allmusic says it was formed in 2002. Just for clarification, which is it? Under 'Genesis (2007–present)', there's a {{fact}} tag. That information has to be cited or removed.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- I am placing the article on hold for seven days to allow for the above concerns to be addressed. Diverse Mentality 19:38, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
- I'm still not too sure with the article. I'm going to have to ask for a second opinion. Diverse Mentality 08:10, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
Hi. I did a minor copy-edit on the article. For me the article still has some fairly obvious 1a issues. I'd also like to see more idea about why people keep leaving the band. I don't think saying that "---- left the band", without providing rationale is acceptable for a Wikipedia GA. Apart from that, I can't see any major issues. Does that held, DiverseMentality? Apterygial talk stalk insane idea 08:30, 3 December 2008 (UTC) Actually, the lead could be a little longer. Apterygial talk stalk insane idea 08:34, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, that was my concern with the lead; it seems a bit short, even for the a short article like this one. I hadn't thought about reasons of why members of the band were leaving, that would help the article as well.
Diverse
Mentality
16:36, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- If you want to expand the lead, add some stuff from the "Formation and Doom (2003–2006)" section. The lead has basically nothing from that at the moment. I think it would also held if you could give a brief description of their sound (influences, etc.) That should then be mentioned in the body in addition. That should get the lead to a decent length.
Apterygial
talk
stalk
insane idea
23:42, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
- This properly expanded, now I will ask someone to make a copy-edit.
Canniba
loki
01:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- I don't mean to butt in on the GA review, DM, but I'm interested in why Doom is referred to as and EP in the main body, but an album in the lead. This needs to be consistent. I think it's probably an EP. Apterygial talk stalk insane idea 02:00, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- This properly expanded, now I will ask someone to make a copy-edit.
Canniba
loki
01:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- If you want to expand the lead, add some stuff from the "Formation and Doom (2003–2006)" section. The lead has basically nothing from that at the moment. I think it would also held if you could give a brief description of their sound (influences, etc.) That should then be mentioned in the body in addition. That should get the lead to a decent length.
Apterygial
talk
stalk
insane idea
23:42, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
No worries, Apterygial. Everything seems to be looking good, except for the last sentence under 'Genesis (2007–present)'. Has the tour began yet? It's pretty ambiguous. Diverse Mentality 04:18, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- I didn't understand. Following the release of Genesis, they began the tour. Canniba loki 04:41, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
I was referring to this sentence: "Job for a Cowboy will embark on a U.S. headlining tour in November and December 2008, with support acts Hate Eternal, and All Shall Perish." Diverse Mentality 04:45, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- I would like to remove it, because it is not a great tour and I don't have updated information about.
Canniba
loki
05:02, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- It's fine. I updated it. Apterygial talk stalk insane idea 05:06, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
All concerns have been addressed, I'm passing the article. Good work! Diverse Mentality 18:51, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks, DiverseMentality and Apterygial. =) Canniba loki 19:57, 4 December 2008 (UTC)