Article is a great shape not much to fault it on, just a few minor issues on then it's a pass. I'll fix some of the issues myself, the following still need to be fixed:
"During the chase, Howard keeps running into Officer Alexander Hummell" - Chase? What chase? Rephrase to something like "During his search for the action figure, ..."
" Howard hooks up with a band of brand-spoofing crooks..." - Explain why he "hooks up" with them and why he fights with them. Also swap "hooks up" with something more professional.
"Unused shops in the Seventh Place Mall area were spruced up to..." - Replace "spruced up" with something more professional.
The Rotten Tomatoes figures have changed slightly. - Update figures and accessdate.
It might be nice to fix links to dab pages in an article (or asking for them to be fixed) before awarding a GA pass in future. The toolbox top right is there for a reason. Alternatively, installing
User:Anomie/linkclassifier.js makes such links immediately visible, and I count five in this article (I've fixed one in the lead, but will leave the others for people who know which target is right).
BencherliteTalk11:08, 2 February 2011 (UTC)reply
Article is a great shape not much to fault it on, just a few minor issues on then it's a pass. I'll fix some of the issues myself, the following still need to be fixed:
"During the chase, Howard keeps running into Officer Alexander Hummell" - Chase? What chase? Rephrase to something like "During his search for the action figure, ..."
" Howard hooks up with a band of brand-spoofing crooks..." - Explain why he "hooks up" with them and why he fights with them. Also swap "hooks up" with something more professional.
"Unused shops in the Seventh Place Mall area were spruced up to..." - Replace "spruced up" with something more professional.
The Rotten Tomatoes figures have changed slightly. - Update figures and accessdate.
It might be nice to fix links to dab pages in an article (or asking for them to be fixed) before awarding a GA pass in future. The toolbox top right is there for a reason. Alternatively, installing
User:Anomie/linkclassifier.js makes such links immediately visible, and I count five in this article (I've fixed one in the lead, but will leave the others for people who know which target is right).
BencherliteTalk11:08, 2 February 2011 (UTC)reply