"During the events of Resident Evil 3: Nemesis, Resident Evil: The Umbrella Chronicles, Resident Evil 5 and Resident Evil: Revelations, she escapes from a city overrun by zombies" - this makes it sound like all of those games have the same plot - that she escapes from a city overrun by zombies? Is this true?
I haven't played all of those games, but I know it isn't true for Resident Evil 5 at least, i'm rewording this. Thanks for noticing.
Freikorp (
talk)
23:28, 20 January 2015 (UTC)reply
The lead could summarise the article a little better. For example the opening of the second paragraph could be expanded a little on what the critics thought of her character?
"She is also the sole protagonist in Resident Evil: Genesis (2008), an alternative-story version of this game" - shouldn't this be in chronological order? A jump from 1996 to 2008 seems confusing as the next paragraph opens with Resident Evil 3: Nemesis, a 1999 game
"Jill Valentine has been received favorably as the Resident Evil series' main female protagonist and remains one of its most recognisable characters" - by who? Critics?
Ref 8, this is slightly risky as YouTube sources are generally not allowed, especially on VG articles. However per
WP:VG/RS it states "videos will fail
WP:USERG or
WP:COPYVIO. However, official accounts secured by reliable source websites (IGN) or specific developers/publishers are still usable". The source gives it as "Official Capcom channel on YouTube", so I think this is acceptable. I have to be on the safe side and state this just in case anybody initially disagrees
The Issue number is the "1" that appears after "Resident Evil". I actually remember thinking it wasn't obvious what the number referred to when I formatted the reference, but it is filled out as per
Template:Cite comic.
Freikorp (
talk)
23:12, 20 January 2015 (UTC)reply
On hold
Just a few prose issues and some more issues with the references that will need sorting out before this could meet the GA criteria. There is a invalid YouTube source left in and a couple that are missing a few details, but other than that the references have improved by leaps and bound since the previous GAN. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days until they can be addressed. Thanks! ☯Jaguar☯15:16, 20 January 2015 (UTC)reply
Thanks
Freikorp, looks like we're ready for GA now. I'm feeling lazy and won't create a level 3 header, so I'll just promote this as it meets the criteria ☯Jaguar☯14:46, 21 January 2015 (UTC)reply
"During the events of Resident Evil 3: Nemesis, Resident Evil: The Umbrella Chronicles, Resident Evil 5 and Resident Evil: Revelations, she escapes from a city overrun by zombies" - this makes it sound like all of those games have the same plot - that she escapes from a city overrun by zombies? Is this true?
I haven't played all of those games, but I know it isn't true for Resident Evil 5 at least, i'm rewording this. Thanks for noticing.
Freikorp (
talk)
23:28, 20 January 2015 (UTC)reply
The lead could summarise the article a little better. For example the opening of the second paragraph could be expanded a little on what the critics thought of her character?
"She is also the sole protagonist in Resident Evil: Genesis (2008), an alternative-story version of this game" - shouldn't this be in chronological order? A jump from 1996 to 2008 seems confusing as the next paragraph opens with Resident Evil 3: Nemesis, a 1999 game
"Jill Valentine has been received favorably as the Resident Evil series' main female protagonist and remains one of its most recognisable characters" - by who? Critics?
Ref 8, this is slightly risky as YouTube sources are generally not allowed, especially on VG articles. However per
WP:VG/RS it states "videos will fail
WP:USERG or
WP:COPYVIO. However, official accounts secured by reliable source websites (IGN) or specific developers/publishers are still usable". The source gives it as "Official Capcom channel on YouTube", so I think this is acceptable. I have to be on the safe side and state this just in case anybody initially disagrees
The Issue number is the "1" that appears after "Resident Evil". I actually remember thinking it wasn't obvious what the number referred to when I formatted the reference, but it is filled out as per
Template:Cite comic.
Freikorp (
talk)
23:12, 20 January 2015 (UTC)reply
On hold
Just a few prose issues and some more issues with the references that will need sorting out before this could meet the GA criteria. There is a invalid YouTube source left in and a couple that are missing a few details, but other than that the references have improved by leaps and bound since the previous GAN. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days until they can be addressed. Thanks! ☯Jaguar☯15:16, 20 January 2015 (UTC)reply
Thanks
Freikorp, looks like we're ready for GA now. I'm feeling lazy and won't create a level 3 header, so I'll just promote this as it meets the criteria ☯Jaguar☯14:46, 21 January 2015 (UTC)reply