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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 ( talk · contribs) 20:02, 2 October 2018 (UTC) reply


Comments by Dunkleosteus77

Added sections on both of these. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 15:07, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
It's mentioned in the second sentence. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done all the ones I noticed. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Removed. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done where appropriate. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply

Thank you for taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply

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Or 3 days later    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed. I always hope to slip in an 'is comprised of' to trigger a bit of AWB in such instances ;-} Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:20, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Glossed. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 07:43, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:19, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
  • wikilink septa
Done. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:06, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
I tried moving the Anatomy section to before the Taxonomy section and that had its disadvantages too. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
No I mean move the last 2 paragraphs in Anatomy to the top    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Added. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:16, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:01, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Called it 'Largest and smallest' which seems to describe its function and content well. Within that scope it seems well focussed, i.e. some forms are small but only short-lived, etc. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 07:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Up with which we will not put! Chiswick Chap ( talk) 07:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
It's archived inside the ref. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:08, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Also, use true jellyfish    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
The term is already mentioned as a gloss for Scyphozoa in the tree and in the taxonomy section, which should be sufficient.
Glossed. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 07:38, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
  • You wikilink fission on second mention
WL first instance. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 17:57, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed, I think. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:12, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:25, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Gone. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 17:58, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
It's accurate, explains something very surprising, and shows what needs to be shown. Not sure what else a science diagram should be, really. We can say "vertical section through the bell" or "sagittal section" if that would help. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 19:08, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
No I mean aesthetically, but it’s not a problem for GA    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  21:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
I've tarted it up a little.

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Not sure what that might be referring to. We've mentioned Craspedacusta sowerbii which turned up in a canal in England (from China) recently. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 19:08, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Looking it up, I was thinking of Jellyfish Lake    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  21:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Added. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 00:24, 9 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Meant for you to put that in the Diet section    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC) reply
???
You say all jellyfish are carnivorous and then there’s this one that’s not    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  18:48, 11 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Mastigias eats plankton, so it's not an exception.
Being omnivorous, the statement “jellyfish are carnivorous,” implying all are, is false    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  01:35, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Well an impeccable source boldly uses "All", actually. The point is that the stinging cells paralyse or kill wriggly animals, which are their prey. Brusca, Richard (2016). Invertebrates. Sinauer Associates. p. 296. ISBN  978-1-60535-375-3. All cnidarians are carnivores (or parasites). Typically, nematocyst-laden feeding tentacles capture animal prey and carry it to the mouth region where it is ingested whole. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 08:27, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
In any case you need to bring up that there is an omnivorous jellyfish because it is notable and related to Diet    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  13:32, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Mentioned in Diet section. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 13:42, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
spotted jellyfish from jellyfish lake in a symbiotic relationship with some algae    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  14:58, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Oh is that what you wanted. Added to Diet section.
Not a problem.
Fixed.
Cut.
Rearranged paragraph. The connection is that jellyfish prevent fish stocks from recovering, by eating their young and competing for food, so once fish numbers go down, they won't come back up. Hope that's clear now.
Reworded.
Data records; larger circles mean those with higher certainty. Added to legend.
Cut.
Cut down repeat mentions of blooming; merged Population, Jelly-fall, Dead zone sections into Blooms.
Fixed.
Fixed.
Above the file description is a section called SCOP Lineage, which says it's Green Fluorescent Protein, as the caption already says.
Fixed.

References

All fixed, we think.
Done, I think. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 19:41, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
It was alive at 18:08 on 13 October 2018. It's also in the web archive https://web.archive.org/web/20180324085114/http://eol.org/info/442.
Unnecessary, given ref 10 - let's delete it at the end to avoid messing up all your numbers below.
Now deleted! Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 19:41, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
doi present, no PMC or PMID as far as I can see. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 19:36, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Changed.
Replaced.
Done
Done.
Added.
Added.
Trimmed.
Done.
Gone.
I thought secondary sources were favoured over primary sources. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Journal articles are preferred over news articles    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  21:32, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Added ref to paper by Hays on ocean currents and marine life.
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Gone.
  • ref no 100 date given inconsistently
Fixed.
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
GA is the goal, but really the question is off-limits. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 16:49, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 ( talk · contribs) 20:02, 2 October 2018 (UTC) reply


Comments by Dunkleosteus77

Added sections on both of these. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 15:07, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
It's mentioned in the second sentence. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done all the ones I noticed. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Removed. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done where appropriate. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply

Thank you for taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC) reply

More comments

Or 3 days later    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed. I always hope to slip in an 'is comprised of' to trigger a bit of AWB in such instances ;-} Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:20, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Glossed. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 07:43, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:19, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
  • wikilink septa
Done. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:06, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
I tried moving the Anatomy section to before the Taxonomy section and that had its disadvantages too. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
No I mean move the last 2 paragraphs in Anatomy to the top    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Added. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:16, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:01, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Called it 'Largest and smallest' which seems to describe its function and content well. Within that scope it seems well focussed, i.e. some forms are small but only short-lived, etc. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 07:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Up with which we will not put! Chiswick Chap ( talk) 07:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
It's archived inside the ref. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:08, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Also, use true jellyfish    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
The term is already mentioned as a gloss for Scyphozoa in the tree and in the taxonomy section, which should be sufficient.
Glossed. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 07:38, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
  • You wikilink fission on second mention
WL first instance. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 17:57, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed, I think. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:12, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Fixed. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 18:25, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Gone. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 17:58, 7 October 2018 (UTC) reply
It's accurate, explains something very surprising, and shows what needs to be shown. Not sure what else a science diagram should be, really. We can say "vertical section through the bell" or "sagittal section" if that would help. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 19:08, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
No I mean aesthetically, but it’s not a problem for GA    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  21:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
I've tarted it up a little.

Even more comments

Not sure what that might be referring to. We've mentioned Craspedacusta sowerbii which turned up in a canal in England (from China) recently. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 19:08, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Looking it up, I was thinking of Jellyfish Lake    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  21:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Added. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 00:24, 9 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Meant for you to put that in the Diet section    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC) reply
???
You say all jellyfish are carnivorous and then there’s this one that’s not    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  18:48, 11 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Mastigias eats plankton, so it's not an exception.
Being omnivorous, the statement “jellyfish are carnivorous,” implying all are, is false    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  01:35, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Well an impeccable source boldly uses "All", actually. The point is that the stinging cells paralyse or kill wriggly animals, which are their prey. Brusca, Richard (2016). Invertebrates. Sinauer Associates. p. 296. ISBN  978-1-60535-375-3. All cnidarians are carnivores (or parasites). Typically, nematocyst-laden feeding tentacles capture animal prey and carry it to the mouth region where it is ingested whole. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 08:27, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
In any case you need to bring up that there is an omnivorous jellyfish because it is notable and related to Diet    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  13:32, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Mentioned in Diet section. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 13:42, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
spotted jellyfish from jellyfish lake in a symbiotic relationship with some algae    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  14:58, 12 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Oh is that what you wanted. Added to Diet section.
Not a problem.
Fixed.
Cut.
Rearranged paragraph. The connection is that jellyfish prevent fish stocks from recovering, by eating their young and competing for food, so once fish numbers go down, they won't come back up. Hope that's clear now.
Reworded.
Data records; larger circles mean those with higher certainty. Added to legend.
Cut.
Cut down repeat mentions of blooming; merged Population, Jelly-fall, Dead zone sections into Blooms.
Fixed.
Fixed.
Above the file description is a section called SCOP Lineage, which says it's Green Fluorescent Protein, as the caption already says.
Fixed.

References

All fixed, we think.
Done, I think. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 19:41, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
It was alive at 18:08 on 13 October 2018. It's also in the web archive https://web.archive.org/web/20180324085114/http://eol.org/info/442.
Unnecessary, given ref 10 - let's delete it at the end to avoid messing up all your numbers below.
Now deleted! Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 19:41, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
doi present, no PMC or PMID as far as I can see. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 19:36, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Changed.
Replaced.
Done
Done.
Added.
Added.
Trimmed.
Done.
Gone.
I thought secondary sources were favoured over primary sources. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Journal articles are preferred over news articles    User:Dunkleosteus77 | push to talk  21:32, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Added ref to paper by Hays on ocean currents and marine life.
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Gone.
  • ref no 100 date given inconsistently
Fixed.
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
Done. Cwmhiraeth ( talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply
GA is the goal, but really the question is off-limits. Chiswick Chap ( talk) 16:49, 13 October 2018 (UTC) reply

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