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Reviewer: DiplomatTesterMan ( talk · contribs) 08:50, 12 November 2021 (UTC)
A widely admired author... were read around the world..... Weasel words not in body.
A Tryst with Destiny, which has been widely admired.... Weasel words not in body.
a prominent lawyer.... Weasel words not in body. (The section #Advocate practice points in another direction.)
...receiving the support of Mahatma Gandhi who was to designate Nehru as his political heir.Unreferenced.
died as a result of a stroke ...stroke and heart attack point to two different articles. The body and infobox says heart attack, but the intro says stroke.
Krishna Hutheesing, became a noted writer......nothing pointing to her being a "noted" writer. TOI reference inadequate here.
Zakaria, Rafiq. 1960. A Study of Nehru.. Internet Archive has the book. Rafiq Zakaria is the editor. Currently he is placed as an author. Further, the book is a collection. The reference should reflect this. If the book is online and easily available online such as this, please link it. Other readers will then find it easier to access references. Accordingly the page number can be changed according to this.
Nanda, B. R. (15 October 2007). The Nehrus: Motilal and Jawaharlal— The publisher is linked. The author Bal Ram Nanda could also be linked.
Jawaharlal was the eldest of three children– Is this correct? The very next line says he had an elder sister.
Smith, Bonnie G. 2008. The Oxford Encyclopedia of Women in World History. Oxford— Smith is the editor. Also, the publisher is linked so she could be too, Bonnie G. Smith.
"Jawaharlal Nehru (1889-1964)". theosophyforward.com— promotional link
Nevertheless, Besant formed...Usage of 'Nevertheless' here seems a bit misleading. The word applies to Nehru, this should be clear.
"Jawaharlal Nehru – a chronological accountPlease add citation details such as Jawaharlal Nehru Memorial Fund (JNMF)
Pratiyogita Darpan Extra Issue Series, Volume 12., even though the page number is linked through the reference, it would be a good idea to mention to page number in the citation as well. Please confirm if this citation adequately references the two sentences it references.
non-Cooperation movementcheck capital letter
"Nehru's Nabha jail ordeal lost in past". 15 November 2014.please complete citation details
he formed the Independence for India league- as per the reference, the 'l' in 'league' can be in capitals
Nehru agreed to vote for the new resolution.- uncited
A pledge of [...] for mass civil disobedience were also underway.This entire paragraph and specific details are not adequately
cited. The reference quality could also be improved, further the Pearson Education citation does not reference many details it is placed ahead of.
tried summarily behind prison walls- is this specific detail referenced?
he could never bring himself to accept Karl Marx's writings as revealed scripture.DTM ( talk) 06:59, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
The elections brought the Congress party to power [...] and "equal partner" within Indian politics were widely rejected.This is one reference already used above that could be used for referencing a part of this. DTM ( talk) 11:11, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
When World War II began, Viceroy Linlithgow ...The Disha Publications reference does not adequately cite the line.
...the background is the same...; this quote is not in the given reference.
On 23 October 1939, the...- Does pg 412 cover this? Including the specific mention of the date and the following words
Nehru urged Jinnah and the Muslim League to join the protest, but Jinnah declined?
was 'denied by large and powerful elements in India's national life"- the quotation marks need copyediting.
...until 15 June 1945) as well with a new page number. Format that citation as well.
A general sympathy...His prestige...The page linked to the citation The Gandhi Reader does not cover this.
In July 1946, Nehru pointedly observed that no princely state could prevail militarily against the army of independent India.- picked up from the source as it is. This is discouraged. (Copyvio/close paraphrasing). However in this case the indirect speech needs some looking into which Google Books does not reveal in the preview.
In July 1946, Nehru pointedly observed ... would be treated as an enemy state.
...cause of humanity."- remove inverted quotes.
On 30 January 1948, Gandhi was shot ... to Pakistan.- another case of copyvio/close paraphrasing.
Friends and comrades, the light has gone...- does not require two citations.
200,000 arrests
Integration of states: 1947–1950" needs to link - Political integration of India.
The constitution of 1950 distinguished between three main types of states:The next heading goes on to state -
Under the Seventh Amendment, the existing distinction between Part A, Part B, Part C, and Part D states was abolished..... So if the detailing needs to be addressed, this will also need to be edited accordingly.
Western scholars ... in India.—Not backed by a good source. A very general sentence that doesn't really add value. If there is a need to retain, a better source(s) is/are needed.
The numbers who voter- spelling of voted.
Ramachandra Guha in his... campaign looked like:
After the exit of Subhashchandra Bose from mainstream Indian politics— the following bracketed text needs to be taken out of the brackets and connected with the first part of the sentence in a better way. All this has to be done keeping in mind the reference that is being used.
the power struggle ... without hindrance.– is unreferenced.
Jawaharlal Nehru was a passionate advocate of education ... in the rural areas.The book, Freedom Fighters of India by Lion M.G. Agrawal was published in 2008. This is another probable case of a source copying from Wikipedia. The IndiaTV source has also picked up the first line as it is. Please find references that do not seem to have bluntly copied text from this paragraph. There are many sources for this, already present in this article, and online which can be found through a quick search engine search. DTM ( talk) 02:09, 23 December 2021 (UTC)
Under Nehru, ... freedoms of women.— Is followed by four citations; this is a case of excessive citations. Either briefly expand the content according to the citations or remove some of the citations.
However, Nehru has been ... secularism.— These five sentences are unreferenced. The existing citation does not cover this.
On the international scene, ... the Western bloc.— This entire paragraph was present in the article before the publication date of the referenced book "Ruling Dynasties of Independent India". Another probable case of copying from Wikipedia. This particular reference also has the entire text of the next paragraph, however those are referenced differently.
Gopal, 2:232-35.— If this points to Sarvepalli Gopal's "Jawaharlal Nehru: A Biography" Vol.2 please specify that more clearly. DTM ( talk) 11:21, 31 December 2021 (UTC)
Earwigs catches the following:
...watershed in his political and economic thinking...Britannica
DTM ( talk) 10:20, 15 November 2021 (UTC)
TheWikiholic, hi. Do you have any comments about how this review is progressing? DTM ( talk) 09:50, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
Going by the above review progress, there are sure to be a few more cases of close paraphrasing, referencing sources that have been copied from Wikipedia etc. While the review is not complete, I am not failing this outright and asking for a second opinion. DTM ( talk) 02:48, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
– Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 16:53, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
DTM, TheWikiholic, where does this nomination stand? TheWikiholic, I don't see any attempt to address the issues raised in the partial second opinion by Kavyansh.Singh, even as the original review—ten listed sections are blank—and a potential second opinion are both incomplete. In a few days, the review will be four months old; if there isn't additional work done soon, perhaps it should be closed. Thank you. BlueMoonset ( talk) 05:10, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: DiplomatTesterMan ( talk · contribs) 08:50, 12 November 2021 (UTC)
A widely admired author... were read around the world..... Weasel words not in body.
A Tryst with Destiny, which has been widely admired.... Weasel words not in body.
a prominent lawyer.... Weasel words not in body. (The section #Advocate practice points in another direction.)
...receiving the support of Mahatma Gandhi who was to designate Nehru as his political heir.Unreferenced.
died as a result of a stroke ...stroke and heart attack point to two different articles. The body and infobox says heart attack, but the intro says stroke.
Krishna Hutheesing, became a noted writer......nothing pointing to her being a "noted" writer. TOI reference inadequate here.
Zakaria, Rafiq. 1960. A Study of Nehru.. Internet Archive has the book. Rafiq Zakaria is the editor. Currently he is placed as an author. Further, the book is a collection. The reference should reflect this. If the book is online and easily available online such as this, please link it. Other readers will then find it easier to access references. Accordingly the page number can be changed according to this.
Nanda, B. R. (15 October 2007). The Nehrus: Motilal and Jawaharlal— The publisher is linked. The author Bal Ram Nanda could also be linked.
Jawaharlal was the eldest of three children– Is this correct? The very next line says he had an elder sister.
Smith, Bonnie G. 2008. The Oxford Encyclopedia of Women in World History. Oxford— Smith is the editor. Also, the publisher is linked so she could be too, Bonnie G. Smith.
"Jawaharlal Nehru (1889-1964)". theosophyforward.com— promotional link
Nevertheless, Besant formed...Usage of 'Nevertheless' here seems a bit misleading. The word applies to Nehru, this should be clear.
"Jawaharlal Nehru – a chronological accountPlease add citation details such as Jawaharlal Nehru Memorial Fund (JNMF)
Pratiyogita Darpan Extra Issue Series, Volume 12., even though the page number is linked through the reference, it would be a good idea to mention to page number in the citation as well. Please confirm if this citation adequately references the two sentences it references.
non-Cooperation movementcheck capital letter
"Nehru's Nabha jail ordeal lost in past". 15 November 2014.please complete citation details
he formed the Independence for India league- as per the reference, the 'l' in 'league' can be in capitals
Nehru agreed to vote for the new resolution.- uncited
A pledge of [...] for mass civil disobedience were also underway.This entire paragraph and specific details are not adequately
cited. The reference quality could also be improved, further the Pearson Education citation does not reference many details it is placed ahead of.
tried summarily behind prison walls- is this specific detail referenced?
he could never bring himself to accept Karl Marx's writings as revealed scripture.DTM ( talk) 06:59, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
The elections brought the Congress party to power [...] and "equal partner" within Indian politics were widely rejected.This is one reference already used above that could be used for referencing a part of this. DTM ( talk) 11:11, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
When World War II began, Viceroy Linlithgow ...The Disha Publications reference does not adequately cite the line.
...the background is the same...; this quote is not in the given reference.
On 23 October 1939, the...- Does pg 412 cover this? Including the specific mention of the date and the following words
Nehru urged Jinnah and the Muslim League to join the protest, but Jinnah declined?
was 'denied by large and powerful elements in India's national life"- the quotation marks need copyediting.
...until 15 June 1945) as well with a new page number. Format that citation as well.
A general sympathy...His prestige...The page linked to the citation The Gandhi Reader does not cover this.
In July 1946, Nehru pointedly observed that no princely state could prevail militarily against the army of independent India.- picked up from the source as it is. This is discouraged. (Copyvio/close paraphrasing). However in this case the indirect speech needs some looking into which Google Books does not reveal in the preview.
In July 1946, Nehru pointedly observed ... would be treated as an enemy state.
...cause of humanity."- remove inverted quotes.
On 30 January 1948, Gandhi was shot ... to Pakistan.- another case of copyvio/close paraphrasing.
Friends and comrades, the light has gone...- does not require two citations.
200,000 arrests
Integration of states: 1947–1950" needs to link - Political integration of India.
The constitution of 1950 distinguished between three main types of states:The next heading goes on to state -
Under the Seventh Amendment, the existing distinction between Part A, Part B, Part C, and Part D states was abolished..... So if the detailing needs to be addressed, this will also need to be edited accordingly.
Western scholars ... in India.—Not backed by a good source. A very general sentence that doesn't really add value. If there is a need to retain, a better source(s) is/are needed.
The numbers who voter- spelling of voted.
Ramachandra Guha in his... campaign looked like:
After the exit of Subhashchandra Bose from mainstream Indian politics— the following bracketed text needs to be taken out of the brackets and connected with the first part of the sentence in a better way. All this has to be done keeping in mind the reference that is being used.
the power struggle ... without hindrance.– is unreferenced.
Jawaharlal Nehru was a passionate advocate of education ... in the rural areas.The book, Freedom Fighters of India by Lion M.G. Agrawal was published in 2008. This is another probable case of a source copying from Wikipedia. The IndiaTV source has also picked up the first line as it is. Please find references that do not seem to have bluntly copied text from this paragraph. There are many sources for this, already present in this article, and online which can be found through a quick search engine search. DTM ( talk) 02:09, 23 December 2021 (UTC)
Under Nehru, ... freedoms of women.— Is followed by four citations; this is a case of excessive citations. Either briefly expand the content according to the citations or remove some of the citations.
However, Nehru has been ... secularism.— These five sentences are unreferenced. The existing citation does not cover this.
On the international scene, ... the Western bloc.— This entire paragraph was present in the article before the publication date of the referenced book "Ruling Dynasties of Independent India". Another probable case of copying from Wikipedia. This particular reference also has the entire text of the next paragraph, however those are referenced differently.
Gopal, 2:232-35.— If this points to Sarvepalli Gopal's "Jawaharlal Nehru: A Biography" Vol.2 please specify that more clearly. DTM ( talk) 11:21, 31 December 2021 (UTC)
Earwigs catches the following:
...watershed in his political and economic thinking...Britannica
DTM ( talk) 10:20, 15 November 2021 (UTC)
TheWikiholic, hi. Do you have any comments about how this review is progressing? DTM ( talk) 09:50, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
Going by the above review progress, there are sure to be a few more cases of close paraphrasing, referencing sources that have been copied from Wikipedia etc. While the review is not complete, I am not failing this outright and asking for a second opinion. DTM ( talk) 02:48, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
– Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 16:53, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
DTM, TheWikiholic, where does this nomination stand? TheWikiholic, I don't see any attempt to address the issues raised in the partial second opinion by Kavyansh.Singh, even as the original review—ten listed sections are blank—and a potential second opinion are both incomplete. In a few days, the review will be four months old; if there isn't additional work done soon, perhaps it should be closed. Thank you. BlueMoonset ( talk) 05:10, 9 March 2022 (UTC)