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23:57, 28 October 2022 (UTC)reply
As a prolific volunteer, he personally documented the pandemic's burgeoning reach across multiple U.S. states, business sectors, and communities. How about something like He documented its...? You've already established that he is a prolific editor, and I don't see what "personally" adds in this context.
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He has described being motivated by said he is motivated by
Source go out of date over time, so this language hedges rather than assuming he still is motivated by these things czar01:49, 29 October 2022 (UTC)reply
on the developing event in real-time Maybe drop developing or on the event as it developed?
I spotchecked Refs 1, 3 and 4. I noticed that Ref 4 says he currently works at Oregon Symphony while Personal life mentions he previously worked there.
Hi, I'm planning to review this article. This is my first GA review, so please notify me if you have any concerns. — VORTEX3427 (
Talk!)
23:57, 28 October 2022 (UTC)reply
As a prolific volunteer, he personally documented the pandemic's burgeoning reach across multiple U.S. states, business sectors, and communities. How about something like He documented its...? You've already established that he is a prolific editor, and I don't see what "personally" adds in this context.
Edited
He has described being motivated by said he is motivated by
Source go out of date over time, so this language hedges rather than assuming he still is motivated by these things czar01:49, 29 October 2022 (UTC)reply
on the developing event in real-time Maybe drop developing or on the event as it developed?
I spotchecked Refs 1, 3 and 4. I noticed that Ref 4 says he currently works at Oregon Symphony while Personal life mentions he previously worked there.