”Boston.com” is the Boston Globe’s website, so I would change all of those references to Boston Globe as the work. (You already have it that way for ref 93, anyway.)
”Born in West Palm Beach, Florida, Saltalamacchia's performance for the Royal Palm Beach High School baseball team drew the attention of scouts, and the Braves selected him in the first round of the 2003 MLB Draft.” – “Raised in West Palm Beach, Florida, Saltalamacchia attended Royal Palm Beach High School. His performance on the institution’s baseball team drew the attention of scouts, and the Braves selected him in the first round of the 2003 MLB Draft.”
”Saltalamacchia's slumps continued through the remainder of his major league career, and most of his time with Detroit and Toronto were within their respective Triple-A organizations, where he helped mentor pitching and catching prospects like Grayson Greiner.” – “Saltalamacchia
batted just .171 with the Tigers in 2016. Most of his time with Toronto and Detroit over the next two seasons was spent with their Triple-A affiliates, where he helped mentor pitching and catching prospects like Grayson Greiner.”
Fun fact—Gabbard is one of two major leaguers to wear a Kason Gabbard jersey during a game. The other is
Darren O’Day, who pitched his first game for the Rangers before they had a chance to get him a jersey of his own.
” on baseball, and began fielding interest from scouts by his junior year.” – “on baseball. By his junior year, he was drawing interest from MLB scouts.”
”GCL Braves” – I’d spell it out the first time, since it’s an abbreviation—"Gulf Coast League (GCL) Braves.” Then, you could change Gulf Coast League championship title to GCL title later on.
I’d label these sections “Detroit Tigers, first stint (2016)” and “Detroit Tigers, second stint (2018)” – or “First stint with the Detroit Tigers (2016)” and “Second stint with the Detroit Tigers (2018)”, whichever you prefer.
” He acted as a mentor to young pitchers Michael Fulmer and Matthew Boyd, acting as the latter's personal catcher.” – “He acted as a mentor to young pitchers Michael Fulmer and Matthew Boyd, serving also as Boyd’s personal catcher.”
Actually, I’d move the last sentence of the section to the end of the 2017 section, explaining what he did after the Blue Jays released him. You can link and abbreviate NESN there.
The last sentence of the first paragraph is kind of awkwardly phrased. I’d split it into two— “They have four daughters. Jarrod is a Christian, and he listed his strong faith as one of the reasons he decided to coach baseball at a Christian school.” (All this is supported by ref 97.)
Change Palm Beach Sheriff’s Department to
Palm Beach County Sheriff's Office and remove the comma afterwards. (I think it’s usually office when it’s a sheriff and department when it’s police, though it’s always hard to keep track of such things!)
”Boston.com” is the Boston Globe’s website, so I would change all of those references to Boston Globe as the work. (You already have it that way for ref 93, anyway.)
”Born in West Palm Beach, Florida, Saltalamacchia's performance for the Royal Palm Beach High School baseball team drew the attention of scouts, and the Braves selected him in the first round of the 2003 MLB Draft.” – “Raised in West Palm Beach, Florida, Saltalamacchia attended Royal Palm Beach High School. His performance on the institution’s baseball team drew the attention of scouts, and the Braves selected him in the first round of the 2003 MLB Draft.”
”Saltalamacchia's slumps continued through the remainder of his major league career, and most of his time with Detroit and Toronto were within their respective Triple-A organizations, where he helped mentor pitching and catching prospects like Grayson Greiner.” – “Saltalamacchia
batted just .171 with the Tigers in 2016. Most of his time with Toronto and Detroit over the next two seasons was spent with their Triple-A affiliates, where he helped mentor pitching and catching prospects like Grayson Greiner.”
Fun fact—Gabbard is one of two major leaguers to wear a Kason Gabbard jersey during a game. The other is
Darren O’Day, who pitched his first game for the Rangers before they had a chance to get him a jersey of his own.
” on baseball, and began fielding interest from scouts by his junior year.” – “on baseball. By his junior year, he was drawing interest from MLB scouts.”
”GCL Braves” – I’d spell it out the first time, since it’s an abbreviation—"Gulf Coast League (GCL) Braves.” Then, you could change Gulf Coast League championship title to GCL title later on.
I’d label these sections “Detroit Tigers, first stint (2016)” and “Detroit Tigers, second stint (2018)” – or “First stint with the Detroit Tigers (2016)” and “Second stint with the Detroit Tigers (2018)”, whichever you prefer.
” He acted as a mentor to young pitchers Michael Fulmer and Matthew Boyd, acting as the latter's personal catcher.” – “He acted as a mentor to young pitchers Michael Fulmer and Matthew Boyd, serving also as Boyd’s personal catcher.”
Actually, I’d move the last sentence of the section to the end of the 2017 section, explaining what he did after the Blue Jays released him. You can link and abbreviate NESN there.
The last sentence of the first paragraph is kind of awkwardly phrased. I’d split it into two— “They have four daughters. Jarrod is a Christian, and he listed his strong faith as one of the reasons he decided to coach baseball at a Christian school.” (All this is supported by ref 97.)
Change Palm Beach Sheriff’s Department to
Palm Beach County Sheriff's Office and remove the comma afterwards. (I think it’s usually office when it’s a sheriff and department when it’s police, though it’s always hard to keep track of such things!)