The article is quite short, and there is little information on the history and demand for the library. I think a second round of research and information-digging for expansion is needed. Conversely, the Game Lab section goes into unnecessary jargon and detail - people interested in the specs can look them up, but for most readers they are distracting and intimidating.
There seem to be significant issues raised on the talk page. I wholeheartedly agree with
DGG's comments about the readiness and development of the article. I haven't yet looked into the close paraphrasing, but this is a copyright issue and needs to be remedied pretty smartly (if not already attended to).
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
While images are not a requirement for GA, I think a photograph of the BookBot would be awesome to see included!
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
There is a great foundation here, but I think it needs a decent push to meet the GA criteria. The only library GA I could find is
Harold B. Lee Library, but take a look at other articles in the
education section—and perhaps some
FAs—for inspiration. I hope to see this article back at GAN in the future. Good luck.
Adabow (
talk)
05:20, 15 June 2013 (UTC)reply
I have done a bit of copy-editing on the article. Feel free to undo anything.
The lead doesn't adequately summarise the article, and contains information no present in the body. See
MOS:LEAD for more.
"When the project's budget was cut by $11 million in the aftermath of the financial crisis of 2007-08, the BookBot was one of several innovations to emerge, enabling architects to design a smaller building without sacrificing seating." - I know you have a whole subsection dedicated to the BookBot, but I think a few words outlining what the BookBot actually is.
The first two sections (Architecture and Design and Sustainability) feel quite choppy to read. I think they would work better as one section
"Compared to storing books on traditional shelves, the delivery system can store the same amount of books while only using 1/9 the size of that." - poor prose, please try to rewrite
The article is quite short, and there is little information on the history and demand for the library. I think a second round of research and information-digging for expansion is needed. Conversely, the Game Lab section goes into unnecessary jargon and detail - people interested in the specs can look them up, but for most readers they are distracting and intimidating.
There seem to be significant issues raised on the talk page. I wholeheartedly agree with
DGG's comments about the readiness and development of the article. I haven't yet looked into the close paraphrasing, but this is a copyright issue and needs to be remedied pretty smartly (if not already attended to).
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
While images are not a requirement for GA, I think a photograph of the BookBot would be awesome to see included!
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
There is a great foundation here, but I think it needs a decent push to meet the GA criteria. The only library GA I could find is
Harold B. Lee Library, but take a look at other articles in the
education section—and perhaps some
FAs—for inspiration. I hope to see this article back at GAN in the future. Good luck.
Adabow (
talk)
05:20, 15 June 2013 (UTC)reply
I have done a bit of copy-editing on the article. Feel free to undo anything.
The lead doesn't adequately summarise the article, and contains information no present in the body. See
MOS:LEAD for more.
"When the project's budget was cut by $11 million in the aftermath of the financial crisis of 2007-08, the BookBot was one of several innovations to emerge, enabling architects to design a smaller building without sacrificing seating." - I know you have a whole subsection dedicated to the BookBot, but I think a few words outlining what the BookBot actually is.
The first two sections (Architecture and Design and Sustainability) feel quite choppy to read. I think they would work better as one section
"Compared to storing books on traditional shelves, the delivery system can store the same amount of books while only using 1/9 the size of that." - poor prose, please try to rewrite