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Nominator: Dawkin Verbier ( talk · contribs) 13:34, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: ZyphorianNexus ( talk · contribs) 00:08, 8 May 2024 (UTC)
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Sim watched a speech by then-Prime Minister Goh Chok Tong on the social significance of clean public toilets.It feels a bit out of place in the context of his business career, unless it directly affected his decisions and career. You could consider either proving additional context as to its subsequent relevance on his career, or omitting it to streamline the narrative.
Sim founded BOP Hub, a non-profit organisation targeting bottom-of-pyramid individuals at the poorest global income margins in 2011, developing a $10,000,000 building in Ubi.I'm trying to find a relationship between the building and the rest of the sentence. With the way it's currently structured, I interpret it as BOP Hub being the entity responsible for developing the building. Is that what it means? For clarity's sake, I think it may need rephrasing.
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Nominator: Dawkin Verbier ( talk · contribs) 13:34, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: ZyphorianNexus ( talk · contribs) 00:08, 8 May 2024 (UTC)
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Sim watched a speech by then-Prime Minister Goh Chok Tong on the social significance of clean public toilets.It feels a bit out of place in the context of his business career, unless it directly affected his decisions and career. You could consider either proving additional context as to its subsequent relevance on his career, or omitting it to streamline the narrative.
Sim founded BOP Hub, a non-profit organisation targeting bottom-of-pyramid individuals at the poorest global income margins in 2011, developing a $10,000,000 building in Ubi.I'm trying to find a relationship between the building and the rest of the sentence. With the way it's currently structured, I interpret it as BOP Hub being the entity responsible for developing the building. Is that what it means? For clarity's sake, I think it may need rephrasing.