"Dr. Gross, however, convinces her" However isn't needed.
"Kara stops Frieda from leaving and drags her away crying." Was she controlled at that time?
"Flashbacks detail how Minerva, a nurse, met Finn's father Martin Mertins when he was hospitalized after it was mistakenly believed he was attempting to leave the island with a group of escapees." So that moment caused the flashbacks to happen?
"Now that Finn is here with her, however, she expresses" Doesn't sound right.
Per
[1], you're going to have to make it shorter, or paraphrase what you kept.
Some references link to social networking sites, but since I was able to confirm that they are associated with Cartoon Network and AT staff, I'll accept it in good faith.
"Dr. Gross, however, convinces her" However isn't needed.
"Kara stops Frieda from leaving and drags her away crying." Was she controlled at that time?
"Flashbacks detail how Minerva, a nurse, met Finn's father Martin Mertins when he was hospitalized after it was mistakenly believed he was attempting to leave the island with a group of escapees." So that moment caused the flashbacks to happen?
"Now that Finn is here with her, however, she expresses" Doesn't sound right.
Per
[1], you're going to have to make it shorter, or paraphrase what you kept.
Some references link to social networking sites, but since I was able to confirm that they are associated with Cartoon Network and AT staff, I'll accept it in good faith.