I'll be reviewing this. As this is my first review, it may take a few days but I'll try and get it entirely reviewed very soon.
Eiga-Kevin2 (
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contribs) 23:30, 10 April 2023 (UTC)reply
Here are my initial comments.
Lead section:
"For the role of Lota the Panther woman"; should be written "Panther Woman" as written elsewhere on the article.
"Island of Lost Souls was released in December 1932, since when several edited forms have been released with several edits to remove dialogue and scenes involving Dr. Moreau"; I suggest changing "when" to "then" in this sentence.
I recommend adding a space between the words rather than having a hyphen in "home-video" and "most-difficult".
Done. (strange, I don't think I would've written them with a dash. Not sure where that come from!)
Andrzejbanas (
talk) 17:03, 11 April 2023 (UTC)reply
Plot section:
"Moreau tells Parker Lota"; should be "Moreau tells Parker that Lota".
"It was announced Burke was go on a promotional tour for Island of Lost Souls after production"; suggest making this "It was announced Burke was going on a promotional tour for Island of Lost Souls after production".
In the Reception section, I suggest removing the n.a. in the "author" section, "- Rotten Tomatoes" in the "title" section, and changing Rotten Tomatoes.com to simply
Rotten Tomatoes in the Rotten Tomatoes citation.
Also agreed. Formatted to make it a bit cleaner.
Andrzejbanas (
talk) 04:48, 12 April 2023 (UTC)reply
The only note in the "notes" section is unreferenced; unless a reliable source features the information on what lines were removed from the film, it is classed as original research and should be deleted per
WP:NOR.
Eiga-Kevin2 (
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contribs) 12:11, 12 April 2023 (UTC)reply
I think that got lost in a peer edit. I've re-added the source.
Andrzejbanas (
talk) 04:48, 12 April 2023 (UTC)reply
Great!, that was the last issue. Passing.
Eiga-Kevin2 (
talk -
contribs) 2:17, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this. As this is my first review, it may take a few days but I'll try and get it entirely reviewed very soon.
Eiga-Kevin2 (
talk -
contribs) 23:30, 10 April 2023 (UTC)reply
Here are my initial comments.
Lead section:
"For the role of Lota the Panther woman"; should be written "Panther Woman" as written elsewhere on the article.
"Island of Lost Souls was released in December 1932, since when several edited forms have been released with several edits to remove dialogue and scenes involving Dr. Moreau"; I suggest changing "when" to "then" in this sentence.
I recommend adding a space between the words rather than having a hyphen in "home-video" and "most-difficult".
Done. (strange, I don't think I would've written them with a dash. Not sure where that come from!)
Andrzejbanas (
talk) 17:03, 11 April 2023 (UTC)reply
Plot section:
"Moreau tells Parker Lota"; should be "Moreau tells Parker that Lota".
"It was announced Burke was go on a promotional tour for Island of Lost Souls after production"; suggest making this "It was announced Burke was going on a promotional tour for Island of Lost Souls after production".
In the Reception section, I suggest removing the n.a. in the "author" section, "- Rotten Tomatoes" in the "title" section, and changing Rotten Tomatoes.com to simply
Rotten Tomatoes in the Rotten Tomatoes citation.
Also agreed. Formatted to make it a bit cleaner.
Andrzejbanas (
talk) 04:48, 12 April 2023 (UTC)reply
The only note in the "notes" section is unreferenced; unless a reliable source features the information on what lines were removed from the film, it is classed as original research and should be deleted per
WP:NOR.
Eiga-Kevin2 (
talk -
contribs) 12:11, 12 April 2023 (UTC)reply
I think that got lost in a peer edit. I've re-added the source.
Andrzejbanas (
talk) 04:48, 12 April 2023 (UTC)reply
Great!, that was the last issue. Passing.
Eiga-Kevin2 (
talk -
contribs) 2:17, 12 April 2023 (UTC)