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Reviewer: Golden ( talk · contribs) 18:29, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
I'll review this article over the next few days. — Golden call me maybe? 18:29, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
Originating in- A better word here would be "Born in" or "Hailing from".
His parents were Javanese nobility.
whom he thought would fit in better in Bandung- Do we know why he thought this?
When the Indonesian National Party (PNI) was founded in 1927, Iskaq was one of its co-founders- This could be shortened to "Iskaq co-founded the Indonesian National Party (PNI) in 1927.."
Iskaq was arrested due to involvement in PNI- Can you provide some context as to why involvement in PNI became a problem in 1929, when it seemingly wasn’t in 1927?
brought him into conflict with the Masyumi Party- Why? It would be helpful to have some context here.
enroll a son- "his son" would be a better choice.
Iskaq refused to participate in the new party.
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Reviewer: Golden ( talk · contribs) 18:29, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
I'll review this article over the next few days. — Golden call me maybe? 18:29, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
Originating in- A better word here would be "Born in" or "Hailing from".
His parents were Javanese nobility.
whom he thought would fit in better in Bandung- Do we know why he thought this?
When the Indonesian National Party (PNI) was founded in 1927, Iskaq was one of its co-founders- This could be shortened to "Iskaq co-founded the Indonesian National Party (PNI) in 1927.."
Iskaq was arrested due to involvement in PNI- Can you provide some context as to why involvement in PNI became a problem in 1929, when it seemingly wasn’t in 1927?
brought him into conflict with the Masyumi Party- Why? It would be helpful to have some context here.
enroll a son- "his son" would be a better choice.
Iskaq refused to participate in the new party.