"An Indian team last participated in the 1960 games." - The word "games" should be captalised in this instance
"India's best showing was at the 1956 Summer Olympics where its team reached the semi-finals." - try to use another more formal word other than "showing"
"the rules were changed so that only under-23 national teams are allowed to compete in the games." - same issue as the first query in this subsection
"has yet to qualify for the Olympics football competition." - Olympic
Warm-up
"The Indian team decided to wear shoes if the conditions were wet (rainy) and if they had to play on soft grounds As conditions were dry," - you don't need to include the brackets and the word rainy
Also with regards to the sentence mentioned above, a full stop should be inserted after the word "ground" and before the word "As"
"Of the eleven players who took the field against France eight players were bootless, three wore boots." - barefooted would be better
The match
Wikilink penalty kick to the appropriate article
"Vajravelu (a substitute)" - better; substitute B.N. Vajravelu
" was saved by the French goalkeeper Rouxel." - full names please; Gaston Rouxel
The second paragraph should be split into two with the new one beginning with the mention of India failing to reach the final of the 1956 Olympics
"But four years later, at the 1956 Olympics at Melbourne, India had its best outing at the games - better; Four years later at the
1956 Olympics in
Melbourne, India attained its best outing at the Games
"The team was led by Samar Banerjee and India's most successful coach Syed Abdul Rahim" - a comma is required at the end of this portion of text
"who coached the team at both the 1952 and 1960 Olympics." - Rahim coaching at the 1952 Olympics is not mentioned by the goal.com source attached to it but it does for the 1960 Olympics. Please find another source that verifies it
"They got a walkover as Hungary did not participate." - better to avoid
WP:LIMITED; The team received a walkover because Hungary did not play.
Wikilink walkover for those unfamiliar with sports
"Then in the 33rd minute D'Souza converted a cross from P.K.Banerjee" - it should be P.K. Banerjee
"D'souza scored the opening goal in the match for India" - D'Souza
"from a melee between Indian striker Kannayan and Australian goalkeeper Lord." - should be Ron Lord.
"The team was led by P.K Banerjee" - same issue as the fourth issue in this section
"In the second match Banerjee's goal at 71st minute" - in the
"one each in the matches against Hungary and Peru both of which India lost." - add a comma between the words "Peru" and "both"
"Thanks to two losses and a draw," - more formal With two losses and a draw,
"This was the last time India qualified for the Olympics in football." - This sentence requires a reliable source to allow the user to independently verify the information
1964–present
"the qualifying matches of the 1992 Olympics to the 2012 Olympics" - better; every qualifying match from the 1992 to 2012 Olympic Games
"India has yet to qualify for the AFC U-23 Championship and thus for the Olympics since then." - This sentence will require a reliable source to be placed at the end of it so that it can be verified independently
"as Republic of China and Philippines withdrew from the qualification round." - as the
Republic of China and the
Philippines teams
"which India failed to qualify till date, thus failed to qualify for the Olympics too." - more concise; which India failed to progress from.
Fixed all but except six games by six squads, it will change the meaning and info. as match/games played are eight. Actually I think it should be conceded against.
Dey subrata (
talk)
19:04, 17 February 2020 (UTC)reply
Match summary
"their biggest win in the Olympics' history."- Olympic
"The most goals were conceded in a 1–10 loss" - better; The most goals the team conceeded were in a 1–10 loss
"their biggest defeat to date." - can be largest for variety
Reference
References 5, 6, 7, 38 should include the authors of the respective sources
Reference 11 should include the page numbers that the information it cites is located and the name of its publisher
The title in Reference 26 is incomplete
Reference 43 would benefit if Asian News International was mentioned as the news agency who provided the story to Business Story
Reference 44 should mention the Press Trust of India is the agency who provided the story to India Today
All of the newspaper sources, such as The Times of India, The Hindu, Business Standard, The Morung Express, The Economist and India Today, should use the
Template:Cite news template instead of the
Template:Cite web template
Overall there are issues with the grammar and there are a lack of wikilinks of football specific terms that the general audience may not understand. There is also one piece of unverified information and some missing parameters in some of the sources. On hold.
MWright96(talk)14:44, 17 February 2020 (UTC)reply
"An Indian team last participated in the 1960 games." - The word "games" should be captalised in this instance
"India's best showing was at the 1956 Summer Olympics where its team reached the semi-finals." - try to use another more formal word other than "showing"
"the rules were changed so that only under-23 national teams are allowed to compete in the games." - same issue as the first query in this subsection
"has yet to qualify for the Olympics football competition." - Olympic
Warm-up
"The Indian team decided to wear shoes if the conditions were wet (rainy) and if they had to play on soft grounds As conditions were dry," - you don't need to include the brackets and the word rainy
Also with regards to the sentence mentioned above, a full stop should be inserted after the word "ground" and before the word "As"
"Of the eleven players who took the field against France eight players were bootless, three wore boots." - barefooted would be better
The match
Wikilink penalty kick to the appropriate article
"Vajravelu (a substitute)" - better; substitute B.N. Vajravelu
" was saved by the French goalkeeper Rouxel." - full names please; Gaston Rouxel
The second paragraph should be split into two with the new one beginning with the mention of India failing to reach the final of the 1956 Olympics
"But four years later, at the 1956 Olympics at Melbourne, India had its best outing at the games - better; Four years later at the
1956 Olympics in
Melbourne, India attained its best outing at the Games
"The team was led by Samar Banerjee and India's most successful coach Syed Abdul Rahim" - a comma is required at the end of this portion of text
"who coached the team at both the 1952 and 1960 Olympics." - Rahim coaching at the 1952 Olympics is not mentioned by the goal.com source attached to it but it does for the 1960 Olympics. Please find another source that verifies it
"They got a walkover as Hungary did not participate." - better to avoid
WP:LIMITED; The team received a walkover because Hungary did not play.
Wikilink walkover for those unfamiliar with sports
"Then in the 33rd minute D'Souza converted a cross from P.K.Banerjee" - it should be P.K. Banerjee
"D'souza scored the opening goal in the match for India" - D'Souza
"from a melee between Indian striker Kannayan and Australian goalkeeper Lord." - should be Ron Lord.
"The team was led by P.K Banerjee" - same issue as the fourth issue in this section
"In the second match Banerjee's goal at 71st minute" - in the
"one each in the matches against Hungary and Peru both of which India lost." - add a comma between the words "Peru" and "both"
"Thanks to two losses and a draw," - more formal With two losses and a draw,
"This was the last time India qualified for the Olympics in football." - This sentence requires a reliable source to allow the user to independently verify the information
1964–present
"the qualifying matches of the 1992 Olympics to the 2012 Olympics" - better; every qualifying match from the 1992 to 2012 Olympic Games
"India has yet to qualify for the AFC U-23 Championship and thus for the Olympics since then." - This sentence will require a reliable source to be placed at the end of it so that it can be verified independently
"as Republic of China and Philippines withdrew from the qualification round." - as the
Republic of China and the
Philippines teams
"which India failed to qualify till date, thus failed to qualify for the Olympics too." - more concise; which India failed to progress from.
Fixed all but except six games by six squads, it will change the meaning and info. as match/games played are eight. Actually I think it should be conceded against.
Dey subrata (
talk)
19:04, 17 February 2020 (UTC)reply
Match summary
"their biggest win in the Olympics' history."- Olympic
"The most goals were conceded in a 1–10 loss" - better; The most goals the team conceeded were in a 1–10 loss
"their biggest defeat to date." - can be largest for variety
Reference
References 5, 6, 7, 38 should include the authors of the respective sources
Reference 11 should include the page numbers that the information it cites is located and the name of its publisher
The title in Reference 26 is incomplete
Reference 43 would benefit if Asian News International was mentioned as the news agency who provided the story to Business Story
Reference 44 should mention the Press Trust of India is the agency who provided the story to India Today
All of the newspaper sources, such as The Times of India, The Hindu, Business Standard, The Morung Express, The Economist and India Today, should use the
Template:Cite news template instead of the
Template:Cite web template
Overall there are issues with the grammar and there are a lack of wikilinks of football specific terms that the general audience may not understand. There is also one piece of unverified information and some missing parameters in some of the sources. On hold.
MWright96(talk)14:44, 17 February 2020 (UTC)reply