I am quite pleased with the
WP:LEAD right now. Once I read the article, I will reconsider whether it adequately summarized the content.--
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Even though it is a quote, "exploring the idea of people sharing a dream space — entering a dream space and sharing a dream." seems redundant. Can anything be done?--
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I am not confused by the remaining quotation. There must be some ellipses missing given what your removed.--
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When you use the term soundtrack in this section do you mean for it to be distinct from the term score or a synonym.--
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Marketing
You mention many aspects of viral marketing and I am not sure if the term is used as I understand it. Do you have any sort of pageview statistics that can confirm the viral nature of the marketing.--
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You added a paragraph of good content, but you did not clarify the viral issue.--
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I think it is O.K. However, "After the reveal of the first teaser trailer," is ungrammatical. Maybe change reveal to revelation.--
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Box-office performance
You use past tense in this paragraph except for "Its five highest-grossing markets after the U.S.A. and Canada are".--
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Critical response
What is meant by the phrase "first positive notice"
Maybe link surrealists
It is odd that you use the phrase "David Edelstein was reported to". Either he said it and you have an
WP:RS to back it up or you can not find an RS to
WP:ATT the quote to and it should be removed. reported to should not be used.--
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It remains ungrammatical although no longer misleading. I would change "described in his review" to claimed.--
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I think the general term
stagecraft should be used in the article as a collective for the types of awards won. The
WP:LEAD could Say something like "The film received eight Academy Award nominations and nine British Academy Film Award nominations, won no artistic categories, while winning most of the stagecraft awards for which it was nominated. At awards ceremonies focussing on artistic categories such as Golden Globes, the film met with little success."
The former already has said rights template, and I added it to the latter.
igordebraga≠ 20:32, 5 July 2011 (UTC)reply
Unless you are in a hurry, we can wait for an image review of the peculiar copyright claim on that image. If you don't want to wait, you can remove it and I will pass the article since that is the only remaining issue. I would expect an image review to happen by the weekend, but can't promise.--
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I am quite pleased with the
WP:LEAD right now. Once I read the article, I will reconsider whether it adequately summarized the content.--
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Even though it is a quote, "exploring the idea of people sharing a dream space — entering a dream space and sharing a dream." seems redundant. Can anything be done?--
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I am not confused by the remaining quotation. There must be some ellipses missing given what your removed.--
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When you use the term soundtrack in this section do you mean for it to be distinct from the term score or a synonym.--
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Marketing
You mention many aspects of viral marketing and I am not sure if the term is used as I understand it. Do you have any sort of pageview statistics that can confirm the viral nature of the marketing.--
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You added a paragraph of good content, but you did not clarify the viral issue.--
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I think it is O.K. However, "After the reveal of the first teaser trailer," is ungrammatical. Maybe change reveal to revelation.--
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Box-office performance
You use past tense in this paragraph except for "Its five highest-grossing markets after the U.S.A. and Canada are".--
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Critical response
What is meant by the phrase "first positive notice"
Maybe link surrealists
It is odd that you use the phrase "David Edelstein was reported to". Either he said it and you have an
WP:RS to back it up or you can not find an RS to
WP:ATT the quote to and it should be removed. reported to should not be used.--
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It remains ungrammatical although no longer misleading. I would change "described in his review" to claimed.--
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I think the general term
stagecraft should be used in the article as a collective for the types of awards won. The
WP:LEAD could Say something like "The film received eight Academy Award nominations and nine British Academy Film Award nominations, won no artistic categories, while winning most of the stagecraft awards for which it was nominated. At awards ceremonies focussing on artistic categories such as Golden Globes, the film met with little success."
The former already has said rights template, and I added it to the latter.
igordebraga≠ 20:32, 5 July 2011 (UTC)reply
Unless you are in a hurry, we can wait for an image review of the peculiar copyright claim on that image. If you don't want to wait, you can remove it and I will pass the article since that is the only remaining issue. I would expect an image review to happen by the weekend, but can't promise.--
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