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Reviewer: Gen. Quon ( talk · contribs) 03:36, 17 August 2015 (UTC) reply

Sorry about the review time!

• Maybe put ratings info in the lead?

• done

• Possibly expand why the episode got mixed reviews?

• done

• "Veronica has a dream of the dead bus crash students before she visits the guidance counselor" When did this happen? In a previous episode? If so, I'd recommend putting a "Background" subheading before the plot summary

• Wait, which part? The dream takes place within the episode--the bus crash takes place in the season two premiere.

• The bus crash. It happens out of the blue in the plot summary.-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:36, 7 September 2015 (UTC) reply

• "In science class, Logan gets paired with Wallace and Dick gets paired with Angie Dahl (Kayla Ewell)." That comes out of nowhere
• would cut out all the science stuff from the three paragraphs and restructure them into their own new one. As its stands, the plot summary is really choppy

• done Also, copyedited the section. I think it's a lot less choppy than The Rapes of Graff one, especially because this one is difficult to summarize. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214) ^{talk to me!} _{see my work} 23:30, 6 September 2015 (UTC) reply

• Is BuzzFeed a good source for reviews?

• I think it's fine seeing as it's a widely used source from known and vetted authors, especially because this is a list rather than a review, which is what BuzzFeed is known for.

• Fair enough.-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:36, 7 September 2015 (UTC) reply

• Just a personal preference (that you totally don't have to do, but I think it makes the page easier to read): I'd seperate all of the reviews and then group them based on what they're saying. So TV.com and AV Club could go together, and Television Without a Pity and Alan Sepinwall could go together, etc.

• done Flipped stuff around a bit--let me know how that looks. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214) ^{talk to me!} _{see my work} 23:30, 6 September 2015 (UTC) reply

• "The Rapes of Graff" has two columns for its references, but this one only has one. Just a minor note

• done

Just a few things.-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 15:42, 6 September 2015 (UTC) @ Gen. Quon: I fixed everything, I believe. Let me know if there's anything else I can do. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214) ^{talk to me!} _{see my work} 23:30, 6 September 2015 (UTC) reply

@ BenLinus1214: If you can expand upon/clarify the bus crash bit, then this'll pass!-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:37, 7 September 2015 (UTC) reply

@ Gen. Quon: I don't think a background bit is necessary--I added a link to " Normal Is the Watchword", the season two premiere in which the crash occurred. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214) ^{talk to me!} _{see my work} 01:07, 11 September 2015 (UTC) reply

Good enough for me! Pass.-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:11, 11 September 2015 (UTC) reply