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Reviewer: JayTee32 ( talk · contribs) 14:59, 4 June 2021 (UTC)
At first look, the article appears to have a lot of information and is well-organized. Just appears that some sentence structures and info are more choppy than others.
Hurricaneboy23, I will begin the review as soon as possible.
Jay
Tee
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14:59, 4 June 2021 (UTC)
Despite these hostile conditions, weakening remained slow, and the storm's circulation became exposed on satellite images on September 9.codingcyclone advisories/ damages 20:53, 18 June 2021 (UTC)
I'll cover whatever JayTee32 missed in his review. In particular, I'll be going over a source review. The citations need to be filled out properly before a GAN. Please note that the standard citation properties (such as the title, author, publisher, and dates) all need to be completely filled out properly for GAs. LightandDark2000 🌀 ( talk) 21:31, 7 June 2021 (UTC)
Paulette fluctuated in intensity over the next few days due to strong wind shear,Add a comma after "days".
On September 14, Paulette made landfall in northeastern Bermuda as a Category 2 hurricane while making a gradual turn to the northeast.Add a comma after "Category 2 hurricane".
On the evening of September 15, Paulette began to weaken and undergo extratropical transition which it completed on September 16.Add a comma after "extratropical transition".
The hurricane's extratropical remnants persisted and moved southwards then eastwards, and eventually Paulette regenerated into a tropical storm early on September 20 south of the Azores. Two issues here. Change "southwards" to "southward" and "eastwards" to "eastward". Also add a comma after "eventually".
and became post-tropical again 2 days later.Change "2" to "two". Unless the value is 10 or larger, we write out the numbers.
Paulette was the longest-lived tropical cyclone worldwide in 2020, its lifetime spanning 21 days (3.0 weeks).For this claim, add that this includes the storm's period spent as an extratropical low, prior to regeneration. Also, note that when we refer to the "lifespan" of a tropical cyclone, we usually refer to only the tropical periods. We can list the entire duration in which the storm was active, but if we do this, it has to be specified that it includes the non-tropical portions of the storm's lifetime as well.
US$50 millionLink "US$" to United States dollar.
The disturbance gained sufficient organization by 00:00 UTC on September 7 to be designated a tropical depression about 1,160 miles (1,865 km) west of the Cabo Verde Islands and about 1,425 miles (2,290 km) east of the Northern Leeward Islands.This is a run-on. Add a comma after "tropical depression".
confirmed that Paulette had intensified into a hurricane at 00:00 UTC on September 13 on its approach to the island of Bermuda.Add a comma after "September 13".
Paulette began extratropical transition by September 15 while its wind speeds began to diminish.Add a comma after "September 15".
The low gradually lost its frontal features as it continued moving southwards on September 19 while convection near the center became less sporadic and organized.Add a comma after "September 19".
Paulette had regenerated into a fully tropical storm. Change "fully tropical" to "fully-tropical".
very shortly afterwards,Change "afterwards" to "afterward".
cool sea surface temperatures and increasing wind shear took a toll on the system and its thunderstorms began to wane;Add a comma after "system".
Dry air and cool sea surface temperatures continued to cause the remnant low's circulation to erode before it turned to the northwest and later took a sudden bend to the northeast, circling a high-pressure system.Add a comma after "erode".
By 18:00 UTC on September 28, Paulette had dissipated and became a surface trough just southwest of the Azores.Change "Paulette had dissipated and became a surface trough" to "Paulette had degenerated into a surface trough", or something like that. Make it more concise.
Multiple observing stations in Bermuda started reporting tropical storm-force wind gusts beginning at 23:00 UTC on September 13 with sustained tropical storm-force winds coming soon after.Add a comma after "September 13".
which is elevated at 290 ft above sea level.Convert the unit to meters, using the conversion template. For example: 290 feet (88 m). Make sure that all of the units in the article are converted.
The hurricane's eye was so clear during its nighttime landfall that, when it passed over the island, one resident reported he could see stars and planets in the sky.This is a new one. Remove the comma from after "that".
The collaboration between the BWS and U.S National Hurricane Center (NHC) was the first in which the NHC provided detailed hourly intensity estimates and forecasts based off of radar images and other weather data provided by the BWS, prior to the radar going offline as the storm's eyewall came ashore.Two issues here. "U.S" should be "U.S." Also, add a comma after "forecasts".
The commercial fishing industry in Bermuda came to a stand-still as Hurricane Paulette,Change "stand-still" to "standstill".
such as on Coopers Island Nature Reserve or Spittal Pond Nature Reserve.Remove "on".
Several islands of Castle Harbour sustained significant erosion on cliffs and caused some of the fortified walls to collapse, due to the heavy surf.This sounds confusing as it is right now. Change "and caused" to "which caused". Also add a comma after "cliffs".
and other severe weather events which frequently occur on the island.Add a comma after "events".
Bermuda Minister of National Security Renée Ming and Bermuda Premier David Burt appraised the Bermuda Electric Light Company (BELCO) crews who quickly restored electricity for thousands of customers and expressed gratefulness for the lack of damage,This is a run-on. Add a comma after "crews" and after "customers". Change "and expressed gratefulness" to "and they expressed gratefulness".
who the latter described as a 'remarkable achievement'.Change "who" to "whom". Also, use standard quotation marks for "remarkable achievement".
ultimately did not survive after both of them were rescued.You could make this phrase a bit more concise.
The eight year-old child was evaluated, but not hospitalized.I think you meant to say "evacuated" instead of "evaluated" here. (If not, you should use a more clear phrasing.)
Nonetheless, Paulette briefly caused thunderstorms on Santa Maria Island in the Azores before dissipating prior to impacting any other portions of the country.Add a comma after "before dissipating".
FN is an abbreviation for source, used in many FA reviews. This was done mostly by Destroyeraa, who has experience handling these at the FA level. This source review was done at the FA/A-Class article level, in the event that you plan to take this article to FAC. Comments are from both Destroyeraa and me.
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These are all of the issues that I've picked out. I'll let JayTee32 handle the rest. The article is pretty well-written, but the citations could still use some serious improvements. LightandDark2000 🌀 ( talk) 21:31, 7 June 2021 (UTC)
@ Hurricaneboy23 and CodingCyclone: Just wanted to let you guys know I will be inactive until July 3rd or after, as I'm out of town this week. If you finish the source review before then, you could reach out to LightandDark2000 if you want it passed quickly. Jay Tee 🕊️ 🇺🇸 02:55, 27 June 2021 (UTC)
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Reviewer: JayTee32 ( talk · contribs) 14:59, 4 June 2021 (UTC)
At first look, the article appears to have a lot of information and is well-organized. Just appears that some sentence structures and info are more choppy than others.
Hurricaneboy23, I will begin the review as soon as possible.
Jay
Tee
🐦
14:59, 4 June 2021 (UTC)
Despite these hostile conditions, weakening remained slow, and the storm's circulation became exposed on satellite images on September 9.codingcyclone advisories/ damages 20:53, 18 June 2021 (UTC)
I'll cover whatever JayTee32 missed in his review. In particular, I'll be going over a source review. The citations need to be filled out properly before a GAN. Please note that the standard citation properties (such as the title, author, publisher, and dates) all need to be completely filled out properly for GAs. LightandDark2000 🌀 ( talk) 21:31, 7 June 2021 (UTC)
Paulette fluctuated in intensity over the next few days due to strong wind shear,Add a comma after "days".
On September 14, Paulette made landfall in northeastern Bermuda as a Category 2 hurricane while making a gradual turn to the northeast.Add a comma after "Category 2 hurricane".
On the evening of September 15, Paulette began to weaken and undergo extratropical transition which it completed on September 16.Add a comma after "extratropical transition".
The hurricane's extratropical remnants persisted and moved southwards then eastwards, and eventually Paulette regenerated into a tropical storm early on September 20 south of the Azores. Two issues here. Change "southwards" to "southward" and "eastwards" to "eastward". Also add a comma after "eventually".
and became post-tropical again 2 days later.Change "2" to "two". Unless the value is 10 or larger, we write out the numbers.
Paulette was the longest-lived tropical cyclone worldwide in 2020, its lifetime spanning 21 days (3.0 weeks).For this claim, add that this includes the storm's period spent as an extratropical low, prior to regeneration. Also, note that when we refer to the "lifespan" of a tropical cyclone, we usually refer to only the tropical periods. We can list the entire duration in which the storm was active, but if we do this, it has to be specified that it includes the non-tropical portions of the storm's lifetime as well.
US$50 millionLink "US$" to United States dollar.
The disturbance gained sufficient organization by 00:00 UTC on September 7 to be designated a tropical depression about 1,160 miles (1,865 km) west of the Cabo Verde Islands and about 1,425 miles (2,290 km) east of the Northern Leeward Islands.This is a run-on. Add a comma after "tropical depression".
confirmed that Paulette had intensified into a hurricane at 00:00 UTC on September 13 on its approach to the island of Bermuda.Add a comma after "September 13".
Paulette began extratropical transition by September 15 while its wind speeds began to diminish.Add a comma after "September 15".
The low gradually lost its frontal features as it continued moving southwards on September 19 while convection near the center became less sporadic and organized.Add a comma after "September 19".
Paulette had regenerated into a fully tropical storm. Change "fully tropical" to "fully-tropical".
very shortly afterwards,Change "afterwards" to "afterward".
cool sea surface temperatures and increasing wind shear took a toll on the system and its thunderstorms began to wane;Add a comma after "system".
Dry air and cool sea surface temperatures continued to cause the remnant low's circulation to erode before it turned to the northwest and later took a sudden bend to the northeast, circling a high-pressure system.Add a comma after "erode".
By 18:00 UTC on September 28, Paulette had dissipated and became a surface trough just southwest of the Azores.Change "Paulette had dissipated and became a surface trough" to "Paulette had degenerated into a surface trough", or something like that. Make it more concise.
Multiple observing stations in Bermuda started reporting tropical storm-force wind gusts beginning at 23:00 UTC on September 13 with sustained tropical storm-force winds coming soon after.Add a comma after "September 13".
which is elevated at 290 ft above sea level.Convert the unit to meters, using the conversion template. For example: 290 feet (88 m). Make sure that all of the units in the article are converted.
The hurricane's eye was so clear during its nighttime landfall that, when it passed over the island, one resident reported he could see stars and planets in the sky.This is a new one. Remove the comma from after "that".
The collaboration between the BWS and U.S National Hurricane Center (NHC) was the first in which the NHC provided detailed hourly intensity estimates and forecasts based off of radar images and other weather data provided by the BWS, prior to the radar going offline as the storm's eyewall came ashore.Two issues here. "U.S" should be "U.S." Also, add a comma after "forecasts".
The commercial fishing industry in Bermuda came to a stand-still as Hurricane Paulette,Change "stand-still" to "standstill".
such as on Coopers Island Nature Reserve or Spittal Pond Nature Reserve.Remove "on".
Several islands of Castle Harbour sustained significant erosion on cliffs and caused some of the fortified walls to collapse, due to the heavy surf.This sounds confusing as it is right now. Change "and caused" to "which caused". Also add a comma after "cliffs".
and other severe weather events which frequently occur on the island.Add a comma after "events".
Bermuda Minister of National Security Renée Ming and Bermuda Premier David Burt appraised the Bermuda Electric Light Company (BELCO) crews who quickly restored electricity for thousands of customers and expressed gratefulness for the lack of damage,This is a run-on. Add a comma after "crews" and after "customers". Change "and expressed gratefulness" to "and they expressed gratefulness".
who the latter described as a 'remarkable achievement'.Change "who" to "whom". Also, use standard quotation marks for "remarkable achievement".
ultimately did not survive after both of them were rescued.You could make this phrase a bit more concise.
The eight year-old child was evaluated, but not hospitalized.I think you meant to say "evacuated" instead of "evaluated" here. (If not, you should use a more clear phrasing.)
Nonetheless, Paulette briefly caused thunderstorms on Santa Maria Island in the Azores before dissipating prior to impacting any other portions of the country.Add a comma after "before dissipating".
FN is an abbreviation for source, used in many FA reviews. This was done mostly by Destroyeraa, who has experience handling these at the FA level. This source review was done at the FA/A-Class article level, in the event that you plan to take this article to FAC. Comments are from both Destroyeraa and me.
|publisher=
parameter. Use the website parameter only if the website title is significantly different from that of the publisher.|author=
, but rather |last=
These are all of the issues that I've picked out. I'll let JayTee32 handle the rest. The article is pretty well-written, but the citations could still use some serious improvements. LightandDark2000 🌀 ( talk) 21:31, 7 June 2021 (UTC)
@ Hurricaneboy23 and CodingCyclone: Just wanted to let you guys know I will be inactive until July 3rd or after, as I'm out of town this week. If you finish the source review before then, you could reach out to LightandDark2000 if you want it passed quickly. Jay Tee 🕊️ 🇺🇸 02:55, 27 June 2021 (UTC)