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Reviewer: Etriusus ( talk · contribs) 05:26, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
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was the first of two tropical cyclones to threaten the Gulf Coast of the United States within a three-day period, with the other being Hurricane Laura.
The thirteenth named storm and third hurricane of the record-breaking 2020 Atlantic hurricane season...
Due to strong wind shear...Split sentence
Shortly after being named, Marco continued to contradict the forecasts and followed a more northerly course
As it was a small system...reorder sentence, hard to follow
but that was changed in post-storm analysis.What was it changed to?
this was more than twice the average August rainfall of 9.1 in (231 mm)awkward wording
Despite this, the NHC did not attribute Marco to any deaths in their post-storm reportwhy?
there was flooding due to the growth of rivers that come from mountains nearbyawkward wording
However, heavy rainfallCut however, repetitive wording
Comment: The prose is a little awkward, but otherwise the page is close to GA status. Kicking it back to you. 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 05:26, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Etriusus ( talk · contribs) 05:26, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
Grabbing this review
was the first of two tropical cyclones to threaten the Gulf Coast of the United States within a three-day period, with the other being Hurricane Laura.
The thirteenth named storm and third hurricane of the record-breaking 2020 Atlantic hurricane season...
Due to strong wind shear...Split sentence
Shortly after being named, Marco continued to contradict the forecasts and followed a more northerly course
As it was a small system...reorder sentence, hard to follow
but that was changed in post-storm analysis.What was it changed to?
this was more than twice the average August rainfall of 9.1 in (231 mm)awkward wording
Despite this, the NHC did not attribute Marco to any deaths in their post-storm reportwhy?
there was flooding due to the growth of rivers that come from mountains nearbyawkward wording
However, heavy rainfallCut however, repetitive wording
Comment: The prose is a little awkward, but otherwise the page is close to GA status. Kicking it back to you. 🏵️ Etrius ( Us) 05:26, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
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