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All in all, not bad, but something's weird in the Met. history. It reads as if it strengthened from Cat. 3 to Cat. 4 over land, but the best track clearly has it as a Cat. 4 offshore. Please fix it. Also, is there any impact from non-newspaper sources? For example, Spanish government sources, something about a climatology of Mexican hurricanes. It's a bit lacking, but it's in decent shape. --♬♩
Hurricanehink (
talk)
01:00, 4 April 2010 (UTC)reply
Under "Meteorological history", first paragraph, "By the morning of September 29, the disturbance was upgraded to a 40 mph (65 km/h) tropical storm and named as Madeline based on ship reports and satellite imagery." - The way this is phrased, it makes it seem like the storm was named "Madeline" because of those reports.
The language in this section needs to be more precise. "During the next couple of days", "over the next day or two" etc. is not particularly encyclopedic in tone and does not help the reader gain a clear understanding of the storm's progression. If something is not know with sufficient certainty, then you can state "on either Monday or Tuesday..." (as a random example) or whatever.
Same section, second paragraph "Despite the upgrade, the aircraft reported winds 70 mph (120 km/h) winds and a pressure of 984 millibars." - This reads as if the hurricane's winds acted against the will of the upgrade. I assume that the idea is something along the lines of "The storm was upgraded despite the fact that the aircraft reported...", which needs to be made clearer.
Same section, third paragraph "before early on October 8" is not proper English.
Under "Preparations and impact", first paragraph - "Army headquarters put in effect..." per WP:OBVIOUS, which army? Can it be wikilinked?
Same paragraph, it is written "According to newspapers, evacuations prior to Madeline were considered a success", but then only one newspaper is cited. Perhaps "According to at least one report" would be more accurate, unless others claim the same.
Same section, second paragraph - "Damage from the hurricane was severe." - Is this your opinion or something from the source (PDFs tend to crash my browser, so I couldn't check)? If it's something from the source, it should be written as "Damage from the hurricane was considered severe". If not, per
WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV, let the facts describe themselves and let the reader decide if it was severe or not.
This paragraph is overall very choppy. It's basically a bunch of very short facts one after the other. Perhaps combining or reworking some of these sentences would help, as right now it's difficult to read.
To allow for these changes to be made I am placing the article on hold for a period of up to a week. I'm always open to discussion on any of the items, so if you think I'm wrong on something leave your thoughts here and we'll discuss. I'll be checking this page at least daily, unless something comes up, so you can be sure I'll notice any comments left here.
CanadianPaul04:14, 30 April 2010 (UTC)reply
I have addressed all the issues except 4 and 7. In 4, the day off the week is not mention in the season summary. In 7, the army is not known.
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Regarding #4, the point was more that the language used here is imprecise and unencyclopedic in tone; using the days of the week to specify was only an example. And even if it is justified (maybe the precise timeline is unknown?), you use the exact same phrase twice in quick succession.
Moving to the lead, there's two problems: "The system remained weak for several days as it drifted west-northwest for several days." - at least one of those "for several days" is redundant. Also, it is written "This made Madeline the second most intense hurricane to strike the west coast of Mexico on record", but this fact is not mentioned in the body of the article. Per WP:LEAD, the introduction must not introduce information that is not cited within the body of the article.
CanadianPaul16:30, 30 April 2010 (UTC)reply
Good! I believe that this article now satisfied the Good Article criteria, and therefore I will be passing it as such. Congratulations and thank you for your hard work.
CanadianPaul22:56, 30 April 2010 (UTC)reply
Where's Madeline?
Pacific hurricanes with a wind speed of 140 mph (220 km/h) or higher at landfall
Madeline made landfall with winds of 145 mph and 940 mbars in pressure, so why isn't she on this list as #1? I'm not sure if this was forgotten about, but still, where is she here?
Rye998 (
talk)
19:31, 12 July 2010 (UTC)reply
I have one more question about this list. It doesn't really pertain to Madeline, but should the 1959 Mexico Hurricane be abriviated "Mexico" instead of unnamed on this list? I believe it is a better way of addressing that storm, and the 1943 Mazatlán hurricane, another "unnamed" hurricane is abbriviated "Mazatlán" instead of unnamed on the deadliest Pacific hurricanes list.
Rye998 (
talk)
23:02, 14 July 2010 (UTC)reply
It can't be added. There are no known measurements of pressure when the storm made landfall. The closest reading was made roughly 9-10 hours before landfall, resulting in a fairly large window of opportunity for the pressure to fluctuate. Since there is no solid evidence of a pressure, inferring one for the time it made landfall borders on
WP:OR.
Cyclonebiskit (
talk)
14:36, 16 July 2010 (UTC)reply
...So Madeline can't be added to this list because there could be a possible inacurracy for the pressure, or it might have not hit with 941 mbars? Truth is, Madeline's 941 mbar pressure was measured when it was a 135 mph storm; there is no reading when it was a 145 mph storm at its landfall. This means Madeline could have been lower than 941 at its landfall This is the exact same thing with other storms like 1994's John. It had winds of 175 mph, higher than Gilma or Ioke, but only 929 mbars in pressure. However, since that 929 mbar reading was only measured when it was a 160 mph storm, it may have been stronger than Gilma and Ioke, but until that is confirmed, if it ever will be, John is considered "weaker" than both storms. There might be reanalysis done on Madeline in the future to prove it was the most intense East Pacific landfall, just like the hurricane reanalysis project is trying to confirm the 1932 Cuba storm was a category 5 based on its Lone 915 mbar pressure. All in all, I believe Madeline was the strongest landfall in terms of pressure, but I also agree with you, Cyclonebiskit, it's against WP:OR to assume that. If I can find a valid source proving Madeline was the strongest, I will mention it here.
Rye998 (
talk)
03:22, 17 July 2010 (UTC)reply
I didn't really think that, YE, I think Madeline was the strongest EPac landfall on record. Unless, you meant the 1932 storm.
Rye998 (
talk)
03:56, 17 July 2010 (UTC)reply
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Weather, which collaborates on weather and related subjects on Wikipedia. To participate, help improve this article or visit the
project page for details.
All in all, not bad, but something's weird in the Met. history. It reads as if it strengthened from Cat. 3 to Cat. 4 over land, but the best track clearly has it as a Cat. 4 offshore. Please fix it. Also, is there any impact from non-newspaper sources? For example, Spanish government sources, something about a climatology of Mexican hurricanes. It's a bit lacking, but it's in decent shape. --♬♩
Hurricanehink (
talk)
01:00, 4 April 2010 (UTC)reply
Under "Meteorological history", first paragraph, "By the morning of September 29, the disturbance was upgraded to a 40 mph (65 km/h) tropical storm and named as Madeline based on ship reports and satellite imagery." - The way this is phrased, it makes it seem like the storm was named "Madeline" because of those reports.
The language in this section needs to be more precise. "During the next couple of days", "over the next day or two" etc. is not particularly encyclopedic in tone and does not help the reader gain a clear understanding of the storm's progression. If something is not know with sufficient certainty, then you can state "on either Monday or Tuesday..." (as a random example) or whatever.
Same section, second paragraph "Despite the upgrade, the aircraft reported winds 70 mph (120 km/h) winds and a pressure of 984 millibars." - This reads as if the hurricane's winds acted against the will of the upgrade. I assume that the idea is something along the lines of "The storm was upgraded despite the fact that the aircraft reported...", which needs to be made clearer.
Same section, third paragraph "before early on October 8" is not proper English.
Under "Preparations and impact", first paragraph - "Army headquarters put in effect..." per WP:OBVIOUS, which army? Can it be wikilinked?
Same paragraph, it is written "According to newspapers, evacuations prior to Madeline were considered a success", but then only one newspaper is cited. Perhaps "According to at least one report" would be more accurate, unless others claim the same.
Same section, second paragraph - "Damage from the hurricane was severe." - Is this your opinion or something from the source (PDFs tend to crash my browser, so I couldn't check)? If it's something from the source, it should be written as "Damage from the hurricane was considered severe". If not, per
WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV, let the facts describe themselves and let the reader decide if it was severe or not.
This paragraph is overall very choppy. It's basically a bunch of very short facts one after the other. Perhaps combining or reworking some of these sentences would help, as right now it's difficult to read.
To allow for these changes to be made I am placing the article on hold for a period of up to a week. I'm always open to discussion on any of the items, so if you think I'm wrong on something leave your thoughts here and we'll discuss. I'll be checking this page at least daily, unless something comes up, so you can be sure I'll notice any comments left here.
CanadianPaul04:14, 30 April 2010 (UTC)reply
I have addressed all the issues except 4 and 7. In 4, the day off the week is not mention in the season summary. In 7, the army is not known.
Leave Message,
Yellow Evan home
Regarding #4, the point was more that the language used here is imprecise and unencyclopedic in tone; using the days of the week to specify was only an example. And even if it is justified (maybe the precise timeline is unknown?), you use the exact same phrase twice in quick succession.
Moving to the lead, there's two problems: "The system remained weak for several days as it drifted west-northwest for several days." - at least one of those "for several days" is redundant. Also, it is written "This made Madeline the second most intense hurricane to strike the west coast of Mexico on record", but this fact is not mentioned in the body of the article. Per WP:LEAD, the introduction must not introduce information that is not cited within the body of the article.
CanadianPaul16:30, 30 April 2010 (UTC)reply
Good! I believe that this article now satisfied the Good Article criteria, and therefore I will be passing it as such. Congratulations and thank you for your hard work.
CanadianPaul22:56, 30 April 2010 (UTC)reply
Where's Madeline?
Pacific hurricanes with a wind speed of 140 mph (220 km/h) or higher at landfall
Madeline made landfall with winds of 145 mph and 940 mbars in pressure, so why isn't she on this list as #1? I'm not sure if this was forgotten about, but still, where is she here?
Rye998 (
talk)
19:31, 12 July 2010 (UTC)reply
I have one more question about this list. It doesn't really pertain to Madeline, but should the 1959 Mexico Hurricane be abriviated "Mexico" instead of unnamed on this list? I believe it is a better way of addressing that storm, and the 1943 Mazatlán hurricane, another "unnamed" hurricane is abbriviated "Mazatlán" instead of unnamed on the deadliest Pacific hurricanes list.
Rye998 (
talk)
23:02, 14 July 2010 (UTC)reply
It can't be added. There are no known measurements of pressure when the storm made landfall. The closest reading was made roughly 9-10 hours before landfall, resulting in a fairly large window of opportunity for the pressure to fluctuate. Since there is no solid evidence of a pressure, inferring one for the time it made landfall borders on
WP:OR.
Cyclonebiskit (
talk)
14:36, 16 July 2010 (UTC)reply
...So Madeline can't be added to this list because there could be a possible inacurracy for the pressure, or it might have not hit with 941 mbars? Truth is, Madeline's 941 mbar pressure was measured when it was a 135 mph storm; there is no reading when it was a 145 mph storm at its landfall. This means Madeline could have been lower than 941 at its landfall This is the exact same thing with other storms like 1994's John. It had winds of 175 mph, higher than Gilma or Ioke, but only 929 mbars in pressure. However, since that 929 mbar reading was only measured when it was a 160 mph storm, it may have been stronger than Gilma and Ioke, but until that is confirmed, if it ever will be, John is considered "weaker" than both storms. There might be reanalysis done on Madeline in the future to prove it was the most intense East Pacific landfall, just like the hurricane reanalysis project is trying to confirm the 1932 Cuba storm was a category 5 based on its Lone 915 mbar pressure. All in all, I believe Madeline was the strongest landfall in terms of pressure, but I also agree with you, Cyclonebiskit, it's against WP:OR to assume that. If I can find a valid source proving Madeline was the strongest, I will mention it here.
Rye998 (
talk)
03:22, 17 July 2010 (UTC)reply
I didn't really think that, YE, I think Madeline was the strongest EPac landfall on record. Unless, you meant the 1932 storm.
Rye998 (
talk)
03:56, 17 July 2010 (UTC)reply