"It was the ninth named storm, fifth hurricane, and third major hurricane[nb 1] of the 2001 Atlantic hurricane season. Iris was the second strongest storm of the season behind Hurricane Michelle.[2] The storm formed on October 4 just southeast of Barbados from a tropical wave." many issues.
Very much so. That's why the damage was isolated, albeit rather heavy. It was also only slightly larger than Wilma 05's record small eye size. --♫
Hurricanehink (
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20:30, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Striking the poorest parts of the country, Iris left about 15,000 people homeless, and many received assistance from the government and the local Red Cross chapter." to "Striking the poorest parts of the country, Iris left about 15,000 people homeless, many pf which received assistance from the government and the local Red Cross chapter." since you mention a lot of "and's" in the lead.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
" later dropped heavy rainfall in southern Mexico, killing two people." you use "killing [X] people" a lot in the lead so cahnge it " later dropped heavy rainfall in southern Mexico, where two people perished."
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Toward the end of September 2001, a poorly defined tropical wave moved westward across the tropical Atlantic Ocean" I am not sure but should "Toward" be "Towards"?
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"In the first discussion on the depression, around which time the depression was passing between St. Vincent and St. Lucia, the NHC noted the potential for it to degenerate into a tropical wave if the cyclone maintained its fast forward motion." what is the NHC? You don't say so in the MH.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Despite its intensification and well-organized satellite appearance, the circulation remained very poorly defined.[3]" 3rd time you've said that in the MH.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
The first time was in reference to the wave, the second was when it formed, and the third was noting the potential for degeneration back into a wave. I think that's pretty important. --♫
Hurricanehink (
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20:30, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"However, officials noted the potential for the storm to dissipate, due to its small circulation." how is this important if that is waht happened? This MH is too long IMO.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"In Belize, where Iris made landfall, a hurricane warning was issued about 23 hours before the storm moved ashore.[3] " ditch the "where IRis made landfall" part since you mentioned it moved ashore later in the sentence.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
The evacuations were later credited for limiting the death toll.[21] Hurricane Keith struck the nation a year prior, which prepared some citizens.[20] "" reverse the order of these sentences. 19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)
"On October 8, the Government of Honduras declared a red alert for all northern regions.[22] " what is a red alert? I know what it is, but others may not.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Although sustaining significant damage, the Government of Guatemala deployed a working team with members from throughout the country to assist in recovery in Belize.[65] " Link to
Government of Guatemala. Ditto with Chinese/Japense government and the UN.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"It was the ninth named storm, fifth hurricane, and third major hurricane[nb 1] of the 2001 Atlantic hurricane season. Iris was the second strongest storm of the season behind Hurricane Michelle.[2] The storm formed on October 4 just southeast of Barbados from a tropical wave." many issues.
Very much so. That's why the damage was isolated, albeit rather heavy. It was also only slightly larger than Wilma 05's record small eye size. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk)
20:30, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Striking the poorest parts of the country, Iris left about 15,000 people homeless, and many received assistance from the government and the local Red Cross chapter." to "Striking the poorest parts of the country, Iris left about 15,000 people homeless, many pf which received assistance from the government and the local Red Cross chapter." since you mention a lot of "and's" in the lead.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
" later dropped heavy rainfall in southern Mexico, killing two people." you use "killing [X] people" a lot in the lead so cahnge it " later dropped heavy rainfall in southern Mexico, where two people perished."
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Toward the end of September 2001, a poorly defined tropical wave moved westward across the tropical Atlantic Ocean" I am not sure but should "Toward" be "Towards"?
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"In the first discussion on the depression, around which time the depression was passing between St. Vincent and St. Lucia, the NHC noted the potential for it to degenerate into a tropical wave if the cyclone maintained its fast forward motion." what is the NHC? You don't say so in the MH.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Despite its intensification and well-organized satellite appearance, the circulation remained very poorly defined.[3]" 3rd time you've said that in the MH.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
The first time was in reference to the wave, the second was when it formed, and the third was noting the potential for degeneration back into a wave. I think that's pretty important. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk)
20:30, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"However, officials noted the potential for the storm to dissipate, due to its small circulation." how is this important if that is waht happened? This MH is too long IMO.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"In Belize, where Iris made landfall, a hurricane warning was issued about 23 hours before the storm moved ashore.[3] " ditch the "where IRis made landfall" part since you mentioned it moved ashore later in the sentence.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
The evacuations were later credited for limiting the death toll.[21] Hurricane Keith struck the nation a year prior, which prepared some citizens.[20] "" reverse the order of these sentences. 19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)
"On October 8, the Government of Honduras declared a red alert for all northern regions.[22] " what is a red alert? I know what it is, but others may not.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Although sustaining significant damage, the Government of Guatemala deployed a working team with members from throughout the country to assist in recovery in Belize.[65] " Link to
Government of Guatemala. Ditto with Chinese/Japense government and the UN.
YEPacificHurricane19:09, 28 June 2013 (UTC)reply