The last sentence in paragraph 1 is too long. There are too many cases of semi colons.
You don't have to put a citation at the end of every sentence. If you are using 1 footnote to cite multiple consecutive sentences, only cite it at the very end. (not required for GAC)
"His goal was export on a scale" change to "His goal was exported on a scale"
Fujisawa didn't want to export his goal. His goal was to have large-scale exports of bikes. Maybe it should say "...was to export motorcycles on a scale..."
Why use "@"? Is that a special annotation, if so link to the page.
I can't find any preference for @ or 'at' on peak torque or hp. FAs
Talbot Tagora and
Sunbeam Tiger use @. I wish
Torque had fewer physics formulas and more plain English explanations of why we express torque (and hp) this way. I don't know where else to link.
"In late 1960" - should be "In the late 1960s"
This is from a chart; the year was definitely 1960, per p. 39 of same source. Probably "mid" is more accurate than late, or just "In 1960" if we don't know the month. --
Dennis Bratland (
talk)
23:27, 31 October 2014 (UTC)reply
The last sentence in paragraph 1 is too long. There are too many cases of semi colons.
You don't have to put a citation at the end of every sentence. If you are using 1 footnote to cite multiple consecutive sentences, only cite it at the very end. (not required for GAC)
"His goal was export on a scale" change to "His goal was exported on a scale"
Fujisawa didn't want to export his goal. His goal was to have large-scale exports of bikes. Maybe it should say "...was to export motorcycles on a scale..."
Why use "@"? Is that a special annotation, if so link to the page.
I can't find any preference for @ or 'at' on peak torque or hp. FAs
Talbot Tagora and
Sunbeam Tiger use @. I wish
Torque had fewer physics formulas and more plain English explanations of why we express torque (and hp) this way. I don't know where else to link.
"In late 1960" - should be "In the late 1960s"
This is from a chart; the year was definitely 1960, per p. 39 of same source. Probably "mid" is more accurate than late, or just "In 1960" if we don't know the month. --
Dennis Bratland (
talk)
23:27, 31 October 2014 (UTC)reply